"Come out,come out wherever you are" the man stood in the middle of the room scanning every object. "Don't you wanna see your father?, I can take you to him".
"You can?" a little voice said out of a cupboard.
"Of course. But you have to come out first" the man trailed his blonde hair covering one of his eyes. After some thought a little girl crawled out of the cupboard with specs of dirt on her black cloak.
"Is she the one, Tobias?" the blonde haired man glanced at another person who had been leaning on the wall for some time now. The man named Tobias raised his head to meet the girls curious gaze then hummed in response.
"Let's just get this over with" Tobias said dryly. The girl took a step backwards and the man grinned "Don't make this hard, I promise it would only hurt for a second"
The man soon brought out an axe making the girls eyes go wide. He was about to swing it at the girl when there was a sudden bang outside distracting the man.
The girl ran out of the room to another one and locked the door. She knew it wouldn't stop them but she hoped she could find one of the hidden passages before they opened the door.
It seemed like she had picked a room with no passages. Someone started banging the door. Then she heard one of them say "Use the axe idiot!"
As the axe began dismantling the door she suddenly heard gunshots which made her even more terrified. Soon she found herself under the bed that was in the room.
Someones walked into the room, the footsteps drawing nearer then stopped right in front of the bed
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