hello just saying something before you get back to your story, I've reread my first chapter to check for mistakes. Noticed I slightly didn't give enough info about the MC due to my rush to get him to Teyvat.
This is gonna be reconned later, but the story will take a slower pace now that we're actually in Teyvat. I also noticed a lack of descriptive writing so I'll attempt to add more in this chapter, again thanks for reading.
In case this confused anyone
'subconscious thought' (this is for illusions and mental manipulation)
' conscious thought ' (for any mind reading it goes here)
" 2 or more talking at once " (until this arc is over he will be alone, even if he meets people)
(or when someone talks in descriptive writing)
this: a singular person talking
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MC POV
A small Teepee is seen inside a forest, that is suddenly knocked down. "dang nabbit, I swear this keeps happening, whatever got more important to do"
He walks down the dirt path back to the beach, then bends down and picks up a stick. "alright catch-up time, so firstly yellow butterfly shows up. [whispers] damn butterfly fly"
draws a bad looking butterfly in the sand. " next suddenly as I'm running a hole pops under me ' now that I think about it I was probably led there ' "
draws a stickman falling into a hole " afterwards I woke up on this beach naked
'luckily my clothes were nearby' "
draws a stickman, a squiggly line, and a shirt.
"And currently due to the large leaves I built a strong house ' Also for some reason their as strong as wood? Grass was also pretty durable but meh, if it worked for my ancestors it'll work for me ' "
Suddenly he stands up and kicks what he just drew. " god what am I doing right now, literally been here for a day and I'm already going insane. " suddenly he feels hungry.
Kymani pauses for a second, before walking back into the forest. ' whatever long as I keep the rules of 3 in my mind 3 minutes without oxygen, 3 hours without shelter, 3 days Without water, 3 months without food '
he repeats them like a montra, as he walks back into the forest. He walks back to his fallen Teepee and deconstructs it. 'Man I'm lucky I did that black history project, my mom did help with the early parts, but hey building that small teepee did help me build this big one '
With 3 wooden sticks stuck together by rope like grass, he wandered beyond where he was.
'is that a light, huh the forest wasn't as big as I thought. well the clearing.'
He continues walking onward and sees a boar.
'yeah no I've seen enough movies to see what happens if I fuck with that' he slowly creeps beyond the boar.
' man am I glad there are so many bushes' thankfully for him there wasn't any problems and he moved onward. As the light grew brighter he ran faster until he reached the peak.
' now if that ain't the most beautiful thi- what the heck is that ' initially blinded by the sunset he notices a wierd tower with blue energy glowing.
'Oh hell no' his immediate thoughts were to avoid it, as he immediately thought about Hollow Knight. He assumed it'd either A, kill him, or B give him some ability. He wasn't risking either.
Sadly he couldn't think further as suddenly he feels a pain behind him, almost as if he got hit by a metal bat (courtesy of his brother) 'asswipe'
he immediately got off his stomach and quickly skipped downhill to gain distance. once he reached all the way down 'damn my back hurts'
he immediately turns and to his shock he sees... 'a fucking slime' "a fucking slime, this some bullshit" he notices for a slime its pretty slow, he found it suspicious growing up with mobile rpg games but thought nothing further of it.
He then simply decides that was enough exploring, however the slime was blocking his way and slowly hopping towards him. 'kinda pathetic, and cute in a way'
He simply dodged the slime and walks past it, not in the mood to to fight a slime without anything sharp. ' this is basic knowledge people '
He while walking questions his sanity considering he is talking to himself as an actual entity. ' then again I wasn't the most sane person alive '
he chuckles to himself as he remembers a time in 2nd grade he almost threw a kid off a roof. ' ah good times, he fucked around and found out ' he distracted in his thoughts didn't notice he went into the water until...
'ah shit'
he starts panicking until he remembers he is 6'3. 'god I'm an idiot' he also noticed in his panic a chest. He considers the benefits and costs of opening this chest.
' well it's either A, a mimic considering I'm in some sort of fantasy world, or B a normal treasure chest. Meh whoever transported me wouldn't want me to die early I'll risk it '
He wades into the water until he reached a rock. he climbs up on the rock and right in front of him standa a chest. 'cmon baby gimme something good'
As any normal Feynx Rising player he attempts to kick open the chest, then he slams his arm on it hurting himself with no results.
'aight that was dumb, and my elbow hurts, let's see what I'll actually get' he finnally decides to use his hands and opens the chest shocked at what he finds.
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that's the end of that one folks, I was gonna give him a simple dull sword and end the chapter at a different note, however an idea came to me your gonna have to wait and see.
sidenote thought I haven't found a good picture to describe my mc, thinking of asking a friend to draw something to show y'all. I'll give a picture later though.