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Kaliethe is a boy that was born in a world where people had powers called "Blessings". The Blessings gave them extraordinary abilities which normal people could not replicate. People with Blessings could create flames, water or air and etc. Kaliethe came from a clan of Phoenix-like people known as The Ashenflame. As so, he was blessed with the ability of a phoenix, granting him the abilities of flames and regeneration. However, after he was born, a entity cloaked and cladded with darkness whispered into his heart, bounding his soul and making him unable to reach his full potential. As a result, his clan abandoned him on a island, hoping so that the powerless members of the clan can't bring weak offspring which could tarnish the clan's reputation. How will he survive in a world where danger lurks everywhere on his own with no guidance to help him grow stronger?

The newly rebirthed Nora does not want the love of the man she had given her life. What she wants is to reach a position where she could look down at others and take her revenge from those who had hurt her and killed her. Even in her death, they have proved that she was a fake. “I will return everything tenfold!” this time she did not run behind her hero, her sister can have him. She would be wealthy instead. Alric Mccoy had never looked down from where he was, for him life only meant perfection. Yet, he found himself attracted to a woman who made mistakes like breathing. He took a fancy to her but she avoided him. “I am teaching you romance!” he frowned when she did not cooperate with his first kiss. “Ha, i need you to teach me how to take over your business.” her chest heaved with anger but she was sure she felt something strange there too. “Ah, that. It is very simple. Marry me, and be the owner of it.” “.........”

A son of a broken family has gotten involve into a new world between myths and legends. For he the chosen will create his own path and change his own ill-fated life as he will embark to the journey of being the great one not only on Earth but also in the Universe.

In a world on the brink of annihilation, Aarav Sharma is given a second chance—one month before Earth faces a disaster that will push humanity to its very limits. Reborn into a timeline where the countdown to extinction has already begun, Aarav carries the memories of his first life, where he witnessed the fall of cities, the deaths of countless comrades, and the collapse of everything he fought to protect. But this time, he’s not alone. A mysterious system has embedded itself within his mind, offering him blueprints of advanced technologies—spaceships, battleships, and human machines capable of defending Earth against the horrors that lurk beyond the stars. With these tools, Aarav embarks on a desperate journey to rewrite the fate of humanity. As he races against time, Aarav uncovers secret organizations that have operated in the shadows for centuries—Shadow Guardians, Space Guardians, and the Human Alliance, among others. Each holds a piece of the puzzle, but gathering them together will require more than just intellect; it will demand sacrifices, betrayals, and the courage to face the unknown. Aarav’s quest is fraught with danger as he encounters hostile alien races, political intrigue among Earth’s nations, and the ever-present shadow of his past failures. Alongside a growing band of allies—including a romantic harem of fierce and intelligent women—he must navigate the treacherous path to survival. But every victory comes at a cost, and the weight of his comrades’ deaths bears down on him with every step. With the clock ticking, Aarav must make impossible choices—choices that will either save humanity or doom it forever. For this is the part of no return, and the future of multiple galaxies hangs in the balance. Will Aarav succeed in forging a new destiny for humankind, or will the darkness consume them all? The journey has just begun, and the stakes have never been higher.

Rowan, an ordinary twenty-something with a penchant for fantasy novels, is suddenly pulled into the world of his latest read—Between the pages. In this brutal and unforgiving realm, he finds himself as a nameless soldier, doomed to die in the opening battle like countless others. However, instead of succumbing to the violence, Rowan discovers he has been granted a powerful and mysterious ability—the Shardbound System, which allows him to mimic the skills and abilities of those he observes, though only for short periods of time. Thrown into a world of politics, war, and treachery, Rowan must quickly adapt, using his newfound power to survive and navigate the shifting allegiances of the realm. Along the way, he encounters Ardyn, a morally ambiguous mercenary whose motives remain unclear, and the Crimson King, a tyrant whose conquest of the land seems inevitable. With every step, Rowan realizes that his presence in this world is no accident, and that the rules of the story are beginning to unravel. Now, Rowan must decide: can he survive long enough to carve out his own fate in a world where heroes are fickle and villains rule? Or will the story consume him as it does the countless nameless souls before him? One thing is certain—Rowan isn’t just an extra anymore. He’s a player in a story that’s changing by the moment, and his choices might just be the key to altering its course forever.

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Julie Ward is an author who was starting her third novel when her family was in a fatal car accident. While grieving she is struggling to start and finish her novel, until her agent reaches out with an amazing opportunity to do a book signing and book contest at a local bookstore. The catch is the contest winner is someone from Julie's past. Can Julie and the person from her past move forward for the sake of their novel?

As the title says, the story of the first mage who created necromancy, and other magics, during his long life.

Eren Kain was an ordinary engineer and inventor until the day the Tower of Trials appeared. A massive, otherworldly spire reaching into the heavens, the tower beckoned humanity with promises of power, wealth, and immortality—but also death. Unlike the others, Eren was forcibly bound to the Tower. No one else could enter until he began his climb, and he couldn’t leave unless he reached the top. Stripped of magic, aura, or any supernatural ability, Eren’s only advantage is his engineering genius and the technology he can smuggle in. From basic firearms to drones and exoskeletons, he uses every tool at his disposal to survive the monsters, traps, and bizarre ecosystems within the Tower. Yet even technology has its limits in a world governed by magic. As Eren climbs, he discovers the Tower isn’t just a trial but a puzzle. Its magic isn’t arbitrary—it’s systematic, a science he slowly learns to decode. However, one wrong calculation could kill him instantly, forcing him to balance experimentation with survival. He scavenges magic crystals, artifacts, and spell books, using them in crude, improvised ways to bolster his arsenal. Over time, he begins merging technology and magic, creating unique hybrid tools to overcome the increasingly insurmountable challenges. But why was Eren chosen? What secret does the Tower hold? With no escape and the weight of humanity’s fate on his shoulders, Eren must climb—not just to survive, but to unravel the truth of the Tower itself. every 50 collections I’ll give a chapter and every 20 powerstones I’ll give a chapter every 10 reviews I’ll give a chapter

The story follows the journey of a young man in a world thousands of years after a great calamity that left only 15% of the global population as survivors. In order to curve extinction, the survivors became Guardians: beings that use Soul Arms and Magic as tools to fight the Nycerii and Darkpawn that almost brought about their destruction. Follow his story as he meets new friends, faces incredible dangers, uncovers hidden truths and ultimately discovers the source of all that began this strife.

Tetsuro Arbour, a young high school student, is forced to move to Japan with his estranged mother. The one constant in his life has always been hockey. There's something about gliding on the ice and forming strong bonds with his teammates that keeps him grounded, offering an escape from the harsh reality of his fractured family. While his mother is making an effort to be there for him, unlike his father. Tetsuro's journey to stardom is filled with both exhilarating highs and crushing lows.

the story is about mc transmigrated in a novel. It is the story about his life and how he overcome the dangerous situation in a fantasy world.

A newly birthed child is akin to a pure white sheet. And if someone had to badmouth about their behavior, it should be towards the parents because after birth it is up to the parents to navigate their children on the road of life. They paint their child with their ideology , thought's , emotion and sometimes dream. So how a child grows up depends on the environment and their parents. ••••••• Quotes: “One must prepare themselves to be embarrassed if they want to embarrass someone.” “One must deceive themselves to deceive others.” “Everyone wears a mask to hide themselves from the world.” •••••• Submitting this for the webnovel spirity awards 2024. Please support me. Thank you. [Warning. Mature content. sensitive content.] [This is fiction so don't take it seriously and just enjoy.]

Age of Ascension.  This is a story of a reincarnated person in alternative world. Earth, or what I should call Sector 77 now, was a beautiful blue planet inhabited by humans.  But the blue planet is no more.  The planet's size has expanded ten times, and a powerful magical barrier surrounds us like a cage. To make it even worse, we got trapped in this cage with aggressive alien races that invaded us.  Although we have so many conflicts and hate among ourselves, we didn't expect a higher power to befall us one day. A power that made humans united against a common enemy, the Syluman.  I, Theomars Adam Gates, will thread a path for humanity! ... Hello, This is Nine_Clouds! This story is my first original novel. I'm still experimenting with it, so please give me your support and comments about the story. English is not my first language but I guaranteed that the story is readable.

In the dim twilight of a dying world, the remnants of humanity huddle within crumbling fortresses and decaying cities. The once mighty gods, giants, and dragons have long been vanquished. The devils, in their ruthless conquest, have crushed all who dared oppose them. In this forsaken realm, where hope has faded, Arat clings to his fragile existence, as a half-devil, hunted by humans, he searches for his place in this corrupted world.

Warning!! Please be aware that there will be incest in this story. Before the Elven goddess created her first elf, she created a guardian for them, a demi-god without a soul that possessed a single purpose: to protect the goddess' creation. He did so for eons, protecting them from mighty titans, fearsome dragons, greedy humans, and filthy goblins. He protected them until the war that led to his death and almost all of the races on the realm, where they waged war against the elves. He fought alone for twelve winters, which led to the deaths of billions of mortals and eventually his own. He welcomed his eternal sleep, but Elven goddess called for him once again. This is my first story that im writing for fun and english is not my first language so please be patient with me. I will try to write myself as much as possible while using AI to correct my grammar. I'm thinking of adding some other elves from games, like the Windrunner sisters from Warcraft, and anything other than my OG belongs to their own respective creator. Warning!! Please be aware that there will be incest and lots of gore and NO YURİ,NO NTR

WARNING WARNING!! THIS BOOK CONTAINS MATURE CONTENT. {WSA ENTRY..} Orpheus was once a young vampire, born into a family of vampires who turned him into a werewolf through the use of black magic. This transformation created a battle within him as vampires and werewolves because of a deep-seated enmity towards each other. Orpheus struggled with this duality for thousands of years and eventually learned to live with his newfound self. However, this transformation left him ruthless and cold, instilling fear in people who worked for him. Despite his fearsome reputation, there was one exception - Camilla Grande. Camilla was a young woman in her twenties who lost her parents in a devastating car accident when she was just eighteen. She had to give up her dreams of pursuing a degree and a career in dancing to start working. However, her lack of a degree made it difficult for her to find a job in a regular office. One day, while wandering the streets, she overheard someone talking about a luxurious mansion on the other side of town that needed a housekeeper. The previous staff who worked there either got fired or left on their own accord, and no one could tell a complete story about the mysteries of that house. Camilla was about to dismiss the thought, but when she heard the amount they were offering to pay, she decided to apply. Little did she know that her decision to work at that mansion would change her life forever.

Samul is a novel author. He enjoys writing novels and even reading other's works as well. But that's just it. Reading and writing novels. Those are the only things Samuel enjoyed in his whole life. His parents were well-off and he didn't need to find a job to feed himself. Everything going well for him until he died, his health was worsening as the day went by. Before he died he tried to write a thank you letter to his parents but he couldn't do that too. The next thing he knows he wakes up in the world that he created, [Blade Of Destiny]. However, instead of transmigrating into the body of the main character or even a side character, the boy became an extra called Lucas Darkheart. Who is Lucas Darkheat? No Idea! He's just an Extra in the novel! ...Or is he just an Extra? ______ Note: The cover is mine and also this cover is made by Author A4KL. &-- Support me one Pateron patreon.com/InkWaver_122

Death. It began washing over the earth like a plague. The plague being the sudden appearance of powerful monsters, destroying cities and killing anyone that stood in their way. But when a young boy gets confronted by these monsters, he doesn’t run or feel an ounce of fear in the face of death. He wanted to die, he wished for it. His wish… Granted. But in death comes rebirth, a new opportunity. But very few that have died to the waves of monsters have been given the opportunity, the opportunity to reincarnate together to the ground zero of this multiversal disaster. To save that world and many worlds including their own. But the very same boy decides a new route for himself. A new route for a new life. One he would hope would be better than his last. Separating from the rest that reincarnates. Being the first to reincarnate. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Warning AI is used to make the images as I can't draw whatsoever and I'm too broke to hire an artist. This novel does contain gore and smut, but hopefully, the R18 tag insinuates that. I'm writing this for fun and while I do check over my work there may be some writing or grammatical errors. Very Sorry. Please feel free to support me or my work and any comments or questions I will try my best to reply to. This is my first ever proper work and my first contracted work so I hope you enjoy it! Tags: Reincarnation, Harem, Fantasy, Yuri (only mentioned), Smut, R-18, Fantasy, Action, Adventure, Magic, Ecchi, Overpowered, Weak to Strong

Kaito Sakamura never expected his final year at Matsuda High to turn into a nightmare. What began as an ordinary school day quickly descends into chaos as a mysterious outbreak transforms his classmates and teachers into infected, mindless killers. In the midst of the terror, Kaito suddenly gains access to a strange, game-like survival system that grants him enhanced abilities and displays stats, skills, and even titles. Marked as the “First Slayer” for being the first to kill an infected, Kaito realizes he’s been given a chance to survive—but at a brutal cost. As the infection spreads through Matsuda High, Kaito must fight for his life, leveling up and unlocking new abilities as he battles his way through blood-soaked hallways and barricaded classrooms. But survival is more than just defeating enemies; it means making impossible choices, risking everything for his friends, and finding out the truth behind the outbreak and this strange “protocol” that seems to govern his every move. With each level he gains, Kaito becomes stronger, faster, and more resilient—but he’s not alone. Other students begin to awaken similar powers, and soon Kaito finds himself caught between enemies both living and undead. As he faces off against monsters both human and infected, he begins to uncover a horrifying secret that goes far beyond his school—a secret that could change the fate of humanity itself. "Awakening Protocol: Rise of the First Slayer" is a high-stakes action-horror novel blending supernatural survival elements with intense thriller and post-apocalyptic themes. In a world where strength is the only currency, Kaito must evolve or face certain death in a school that has become his deadly proving ground.

A high-schooler, Agus and his schoolmates, were teleported to a fantasy world. He needs to work with his friends and use his newfound talent to survive. Faced with anxiety and shortcomings, will he loathe himself further or finally accept change?

“Youth is the hope of the future,” a resonant quote among Filipinos, attributed to national hero Jose Rizal. How accurate are these words for generations gone by? Senior High, the last stage for high school. It differs from other grade levels, which aim to prepare students like Adrian Cabanas for the future. With only two years remaining in high school, how will Adrian navigate challenges during his Senior High days? Teacher, classmate, or family–amidst looming problems, Adrian's only thing he can do is to review and improve for his future.

A freshly graduated student in the private investigation department, Alastair, going to the real-world to make it a better place for human beings. Whenever there is a crime that either CBI or police department failed to solve, Alastair solved all of them with ease. But he is unable to crack his own parent's death mystery. It's been years when they died, which looked like no less than an accident. Just because he is in a detective profession, Alastair is not like a cold-blooded person. Will he able to succeed in bringing new changes to this current world..? Will he be able to catch his parents murderer..?

"What Lengths would you go to have the power to shape your own path? What would you give up? How far would you go?" "I have gone far and given much to get where I am today. Maybe my story would help you to figure it out. Sit, Listen. This is the story of Cytar's First Lich."

The story is about how great historical figures together with their armies fight mythical, fantastic monsters for the sake of survival, but with each wave the number of monsters, their kind and their strength grow. Will they be able to win? Which historical figures will manifest themselves? How will they fight? If you are interested, welcome

A manga novel about a detective who's life changes when a mystical diary and a spirit appear in his life giving him the abilities to speak with the dead and read the present as if it were a book. Together with his assistant Lily Kimbel and the spirit try to solve the mystery of the diary while chasing down a masked man that appears to know about it's existance. All Rights Reserved

"you are dead" says the god of original story's Bragi. "and for your sins you will be reincarnated into your own plagiarized novel, try to entertain us." this is my first novel, feedback is appreciated and so is comments, i will try to reply to every one, regardless of it is constructive or not Im also on scribble hub and applying for royal road.