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Tags: Power Couple, Action, Adventure, Romance, R-18, Virtual Reality, Comedy, Secret Identity, Overpowered MC, Male Protagonist and Female Lead. The most feared Assassin in the world died because of vengeance. What he didn't expect was instead of being sent to the nether world, he instead woke up on his younger self all before the time he became an Assassin. Instead of going back to the life of living in the shadows. He instead decided to lead a new normal life this time and play the newly released Virtual Game, Fate Online! Let's watch as he change the things that isn't supposed to happen while changing his fate along with it and watch him, on the road to becoming a top professional player. Note: The Female Lead would have its own narration along in the story. [Artwork: ptitvinc] Release Update: 7 Chapters /week Want to add an addition to the story? Then check out my Patreon! https://www.patreon.com/apocalypseII P.S - If you're gonna leave a low end review. Make sure its a constructive criticism, because I would certainly get it deleted, if it doesn't help me in improving my story. I don't except hate reviews just to lower its rating because the story is premium. Discord - https://discord.gg/XPeAkE

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Yun Lintian, a man from Earth, found himself in a clichéd transmigrated situation and ended up in the Azure World, a magical cultivation-oriented world. Unlike the protagonists in the novels he had read, Yun Lintian lacks any cheating devices to assist him on his journey. Did the God of Transmission forget about it? However, as a crisis unfolds, an ancient power dormant within him suddenly awakens, entangling him in a mysterious destiny... Watch the journey of Yun Lintian in a foreign world as he rises in power ranking alongside his precious all-female sect! ————————————— DISCLAIMER: The protagonist of this novel is exceptionally powerful, resourceful, and mature. If you don't enjoy stories with an overpowered protagonist who frequently use logic from novels he has read to solve the problems he encounters, this novel may not be to your liking. Besides the cultivation adventure, this novel also focuses on romance, comedy, and the bonds between the protagonist and his fellow disciples in the sect. The author is not a native English speaker, so you can expect some grammatical errors in the novel. Please bear with me, and trust me, I am trying to improve it. Everything in this novel is pure fantasy based on the author's imagination. It does not reflect the real world. Hence, readers should not attempt to apply their common sense and logic to this novel. Constructive criticism is always welcome. ————————————— All rights to the cover belong to the original artist.

{Brainless, Cool Article, Power Fantasy, Stupidly Overpowered,...} [In order to balance the quality, quantity, rarity, and frequency of critical strikes, the system has taken the initiative to categorize them. Monthly critical strikes range from 100 trillion times quality with 1 unit of item to 1 trillion times quality with 100 units of items. Weekly critical strikes range from 100 billion times quality with 1,000 units to 1 billion times quality with 100,000 units. Daily critical strikes range from 100 million times quality with 1 million units to 1 million times quality with 100 million units. Hourly critical strikes range from 100,000 times quality with 1 billion units to 1,000 times quality with 100 billion units. Then there is the most basic rate with no restrictions whatsoever between 100 to 999 times quality with 1 trillion units.]

Trapped in a strange magical cave our Protagonist must make his way in order to discover who he is, where he is, and why he's there. Join our MC on a journey of self discovery and exploration as we uncover a whole new magical world one step at a time. This is my first novel; Please comment what you enjoyed and what you didn't. Constructive criticism is always welcome. Let's help each other create a wonderful story.

A lone figure stood amid the wreckage of where once reigned a pantheon, his broad back radiating an unfathomable aura of power as his golden irises swept over the debris that once housed some of the most powerful existences in this universe. "oh.. you survived that ?" Loki asked with a hint of surprise as his eyes fell on the bloodied blue-haired God barely clinging to life a few meters away Poseidon couldn't even muster the strength to respond as his eyes stared at Loki in pure terror. His mind couldn't help but think, 'What did my brother do to offend such an existence?!' Suddenly, Poseidon felt a cold chill run down his spine as a gust of wind flew passed him, before he could muster the strength to turn and face what could possibly make him feel more dreadful than the green-haired demon before him, the demon uttered three words that made his blood run cold "Fenrir.. eat him." ========= This story is strictly fictional. It revolves around a down-and-out Loki who rises to the pinnacle of existence. It will have some similarities to what is already known in the myths; however, due to my lack of knowledge on the matter, most of the story is entirely original, with only a few elements added as I learn more through my research along the way. As I said, it's strictly fictional. ========= NOTE: I am not a professional writer and have zero experience. This is honestly just to gain experience as well as a hobby but constructive criticism is always welcomed. I will try to upload 2-4 chapters a week with each chapter having at least 1200 words

What happens when the one who doesn't want to forget his life is reincarnated as a baby of the Sarutobi clan during the creation of Konoha? I'll tell you what happens!! Hiruzen Sarutobi as you really should see it happens, a Hiruzen who takes advantage of his talent, and raises his own potential to something never seen before, a pacifist Hiruzen but never weak, if war is necessary, let there be war, a Hokage who would rather see Konoha fall than send someone under the age of 12 to war. *I don't have the cover image(if the creator wants me to remove it, please get in touch.)* *English is not the first language* *First book, give constructive criticism please* *First chapter released just to see what you think of the story* *Don't expect frequency, I'm still new at this, I'll probably only get the hang of it by chapter 40 or so* *Thank you*

The MC finds himself possessing the body of Leo. Upon his arrival in a fantasy world, he is quickly branded as a dangerous criminal, forcing him to abandon any hopes of a peaceful life. The story follows Leo as he navigates the challenges of this deadly fantasy realm, where he must face fierce pirates and the royal navy while in search of hidden treasures, and ultimately growing his pirate crew. Constructive criticism is accepted.

Have you ever wondered if god exists? If there is life on another planet? Does magic exist? What is there after death? Well, the answer to these questions is not difficult. Follow the story of a young porn lover who reincarnated in a fantasy world as the candidate for the God of sex, eroticism and obscenity. Accompany our protagonist on his journey full of fantasy, intrigue, women and lots of sex. English is not my native language, therefore, I apologize in advance if I present grammatical errors, I appreciate any correction and constructive criticism to improve.

Geraldina was an intersex whose life seemed to be only tied to her crazy love for her ex until the same guy dragged her into a whole new and insane journey. *** "He's always dragging me into strange things. My life is this messed up because of him!" Dina complained to her system Zero-one "Then let me take you away," A certain target said "Whaa???" All of a sudden, the mission took the weirdest turn with her targets now 'targeting' her with their crazy love. This wasn't right! Her heart was only for her Jack...Right? "Zero-baby, help me~ I don't know who's the target anymore!" Dina whimpered in confusion "Come into my arms then," Zero suddenly said with a strange seductive smile and the same crazy, infatuated look the targets had in their eyes! "EH?!" THIS TRANSMIGRATION SUDDENLY BECAME STRANGE! *This is my first novel so the beginning might not be the best but I promise it gets better as you move on. Constructive criticism is allowed but please don't be mean. *Read my review and its reply for important clues (optional but necessary) *I am on FB,Twitter and pininterest and I have a blog. Links in my review.

In this story, our protagonist finds himself transmigrated into his favorite game, a world filled with magic and demonic beasts. To secure a peaceful life in this new world—where strength equates to power—he must leverage his knowledge of the game to grow stronger and overcome the challenges that come his way. I appreciate any constructive criticism you may have. You can expect to see improvements as the story unfolds if you think it is. Release schedule: 5 chapters per week.

The story of a witch with a heart full of venom getting the chance to redo her life and seize strength for herself. MC only cares about herself and her own gains don't expect any romance or deep relationships. power system is a mix of Xianxia cultivation and and isekai magic fantasy. trying to make an aesthetic similar to the dark souls series with a hint of reverend insanity and a bit of age of adepts. Constructive criticism is welcome. Reading comments makes me happy so please don't be afraid to share any of your thoughts

Cesare Caruso, a renowned actor and a global superstar, appeared to have it all—fame, fortune, and an impeccable reputation. Yet, hidden beneath the surface was a secret he had guarded for years—he was an Omega. That carefully guarded secret came crashing down in one fateful night, during a glamorous masquerade ball aboard a luxurious cruise ship. Overwhelmed by an unexpected heat cycle, Cesare loses control of himself, devoured by his own desires and falling into the arms of a mysterious Alpha—a reckless moment that changed everything. [Zahir al-Tamid. That’s my name.] To his shock, the Alpha was Zahir—a proud prince from an oil-rich kingdom and an unwelcome figure from Cesare’s past. Worse, that night left Cesare unexpectedly pregnant! Before Cesare could make sense of it all, Zahir made a grand entrance at Cesare’s mansion by helicopter, uninvited, catching the attention of major media outlets around the world, demanding a settlement claiming that Cesare shall be responsible for ‘imprinting’ a royal family like him! “...Seriously, it’s not as if I have a ludicrous $2 billion just lying around, you know.” “Thus, marry me, Cesare.” Pregnancy, imprinting, and a royal marriage proposal—showered by a series of unwanted events, Cesare is desperate to find a way to cut ties with Zahir. But Zahir, stubborn and relentless, has no plans to let go. Can Cesare outrun the tempest, or will it pull him under? #BL #Omegaverse #Obsessive #Crybaby #One-sideLove #Prince #Superior Text copyright ⓒ 2024 by Kim Sol Da All right reserved. The Korean edition was originally written by 김솔다, Korea Translated and Published by We’ve Lab.

In the year 2147, the human race has spread to all eight planets of the Milky Way, even constructing rings to harness the Sun's energy whilst prolonging the life of the star. On Earth, what was San Francisco has been turned into Neo City, the first city that was rebuilt once humans created Neo Metal, a man made element that was stable and more durable than any other. Many corporations make tech with Neo Metal and various other electronics the such, however Zeoman Enterprises stand at the top of their game. Eventually, Zeoman Enterprises would create a one of a kind metal assassin, meant to guard the company's CEOs and other high ranking members. As well as hunt down any rebels against the company's monopoly. The Zeoman Enterprises Combatant Construct Serial Designation X-1288 opposes any enemies for his creators. Follow the journey of this mechanical marvel.

Cover Art by Neo and Yaoyueyi Volume 1 - Having been summoned to another world, Claude Evers is devastated to find out that he has no attack or magic proficiency. In a world of swords and magic, Claude endeavors to become his master's...chef? Despite this turn of events, he soon finds himself relying on his wit and strange abilities to stand by his master's side. With such fearsome enemies in this world, what solutions can Claude hope to cook up? Volume 2 - Defeating a terrifying monster endangering the kingdom, Claude's fame grows. With this in mind, his next goal is to...win over his master's heart? However, he soon learns that the nobility are not one to be trifled with. What can a lone chef do against the schemes of the powerful threatening his livelihood? Volume 3 - Welcome to the 'Certain Slice', where we are sure to serve you something that perfectly hits your tastes. This is a restaurant where you can sample our line of otherworldly food and drink, created by the one and only Demon Cleaver. Please wait here while we call a maid over to attend to your orders. The owner? I'm very sorry. He's not available at the moment. The reason? I'm afraid that he is now a wanted man, for defying kings and kidnapping princesses. Volume 4 - Stuck in another country, Claude and his companions happen upon abilities far different from what they had known before. With a country full of powerful warriors wielding such techniques, guided by a prophetic Oracle, new allies and enemies are around every corner. Will they find what they need to return home, or will 'destiny' swallow them up? Volume 5 - What happens when the person you thought you knew is completely different? Past and present collide as Claude makes his way back to Sistina to once again fight alongside his Master, encountering challenges that few Electi have ever faced. Destruction looms over Sistina as his enemies attack right where one is most vulnerable, the insecurities held in one’s heart. Volume 6 - With Sistina in the process of recoverying, Claude finds himself in a new role with many new challenges ahead. Though the dangers have passed, daily life is still far from boring as messy relationships and sudden adventures are at every corner. There is never a break in the life of an Electi! Volume 7 - War breaks out with the Empire of Purnesia. With decades of hatred possessing its people, Claude becomes embroiled in the tragedy of death and suffering. With his commitment to retain his humanity in jeopardy, how can a chef protect his friends on the battlefield? Volume 8 - Various tragedies have left Claude reeling. With his heart torn and his vow to not kill abandoned, he charges forward to the capital of Purnesia. With his heart trending towards darkness, who will remain by his side as he seeks revenge... and who will point their blade at him instead? Volume 9 - Learning of the existence of an entire army of demons, led by a familiar face, the very world is at stake. What will Claude discover upon setting foot in the realm of Gods, seeking the very limits of his Electi powers? Volume 10 - Peace has come at last, along with a new role for Claude. But his dreams foretell of another hidden danger on the horizon, one that would shatter everything he knows about the world. Volume 11 - Everything has ended, or has it? The secrets of the world are now revealed, and Claude must find everyone once again to face against a threat as old as the Gods. Volume 12 - Back together again, Claude and his crew make one final attempt against The Architect. Past and present collide as the fate of two worlds rest on the victor!

In a world where nothing seemed to matter, Aisam once lived a dull life with no passion or dreams. But fate took a cruel turn when he perished in a tragic plane crash planned by terrorists. Suddenly reincarnated in a new world, he found himself in the body of a forgotten orphan from a long-forgotten novel he once read. Armed with a mysterious system, Aisam chooses to traverse the world pursuing the path he chose to accept... The Path of Terror. *** It's my first novel, and English isn't my first language so I kindly ask for your patience and support. Constructive criticism is greatly welcomed as I try to improve. That's why, the further chapters you go, the overall story may have improved.

A couple weeks before Lake's Martial Course Entrance Exam, While he was taking a nap during a class he is awoken by a strange beeping sound. Opening his sleepy eyes, he could sees a strange holographic screen in front of him. [Roleplay System has successfully bonded to host. Do you wish to begin roleplaying?] [Yes?] or [No?] At first Lake thought he was still half asleep and half-heartedly chose [Yes]. Immediately After he saw a new prompt appear before his eyes. [Please select the main role the host wishes to play from the following options.] After reading that message, A series of options appeared before him. The options were so numerous that they covered the entirety of his vision. From the numerous options Lake could spot a few interesting sounding roles, [Martial Saint], [Heavenly Sage], [Harem King], [Slaughterer]… The options were too much and they made Lake dizzy. Without much thinking Lake scanned through the list of roles and choose the role whose name caught his attention the most. [Master of Fate] *** Disclaimer 1. Cover art is not mine. It belongs to kaslla. I took the image and edited my title onto it. Their twitter handle is ksb_x4 if you wish to check out their work. 2. This is my first novel that I decided to write to fill up my free time, so don't expect constant updates or any amazing writing quality. 3. I am willing to take criticism as I am still looking to improve my writing skills. For those who may post constructive criticism, thanks in advance. 4. Finally, thank you for taking the time to read my novel.

In a high-stakes contract marriage, Serena and Alexander navigate unexpected love, dark secrets, and dangerous enemies, where every choice could seal their fate—or shatter their carefully constructed lives.

Rein was walking home after finishing his part-time job, his thoughts drifting as he strolled through the quiet streets. Unbeknownst to him, he passed through an invisible gate—one that neither the eye could see nor the senses could detect. Was this an accidental misstep, or was it something beyond his control? To find out, you’ll need to read the novel and uncover the truth. Please note that the cover image is not my own; I found it on Google, where it was labeled as free to use. If you are the original creator and wish for me to remove it, please contact me. Additionally, English is not my first language, so there may be some grammatical errors in the text. Lastly, this is my first attempt at writing a novel, and I’m still learning the craft. I would greatly appreciate any constructive criticism or feedback you can offer. Please feel free to share your thoughts and suggestions!

A construction site murder, a complex case entanglement, the protagonist how to maintain their own justice. When you are cornered, don't forget that there is another road behind you, and that is crime, and remember that there is no shame in it.

Some worlds have its fate to be worst than death itself, what's better than a little chaos to put things back together? Talia earned her reincarnation and system through her past life, she was giving a mission to change this new world's fate, will she be able to do so, starting from scratch and with all the obstacles in her way? A/N: Read the tags, leave a comment if you like it so far, constructive criticism is always welcome to help me improve, though don't be too harsh, this is the first novel I've ever written. Ps: The cover is temporary until I get something better.

John Fan wakes up only to find he has returned to the past after almost stabbing his mom thinking she was an intruder! After clearing up the misunderstanding John decides that maybe he should take this chance given to him by the horns and find happiness not only for himself but those around him. ———————————————— I also ask for constructive criticism. This is my first time writing and I would enjoy all the help I can get. I plan to use this novel as an outlet for my boredom in quarantine for both my enjoyment. So don’t expect a steady upload speed.

Sora Arashi; a lonely and love-deprived teenager. Walks a tightrope between despair and hope. Orphaned at a young age, he lives with his uncle’s abusive family enduring constant neglect. Sora finds solace in books, particularly those containing “Yanderes”. He yearns for a connection so intense, that not even death could severe it. So, will Sora find what he intensely yearns for, or will he succumb to the overwhelming urge to just disappear? ----- This is my first ever novel, so please do go easy on me. I am not very confident in my writing, but hope you guys like it. English isn't my native language, so I sometimes have used AI to make it sound better, but be sure the idea or base isn't taken by AI, just some of the wording. So I hope you guys can excuse that. The novel concept won't be something revolutionary, just your average wish fulfilment novel you can say. It can be read as a good time pass. It will be cliche but I will try my best to upload quality content. The cover is AI-made. Credit to my friend Odayaka. Be sure to check his novels out (Much better than mine) https://www.webnovel.com/profile/4320077764 Constructive criticism is very welcome. I will try to release every 2 to 3 days. My discord: https://discord.gg/eDaKPehNf5

A 15 Year old Guy Helps turning a Newly Constructed Kingdom into something to be reckoned with by making friends enemies and advancing his love life

Arthur is a mercenary on a quest to learn magic. Once a blacksmith’s apprentice, he left his comfortable life behind at fourteen to chase his dream of crafting enchanted weapons. With no noble blood or wealth, he turned to mercenary work, earning coin for the chance to study magic and uncover ancient relics. This is my first story. so sorry for any mistakes. I do plan to add romance later in the story when I feel more confident writing it. Constructive criticism please.

A child hated for what they are, a thief loved by all in their kingdom, a knight without a lord and many more stories in the world of Diitriva. If stories or characters are liked, then they might reappear I'm new to writing and any criticism is appreciated. ^^

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A story about our mc, Arin, join his journey in reaching to the top of the world. he makes the world shake at his might with his dragon lineage. the stories pace will change as this is my first novel and am still learning. I would appreciate any constructive criticism. New writer, synopsis will later be updated

If you could gain power, wealth, or prestige, but at the price of your soul, would you accept the deal? Humanity continues on to day-to-day life, oblivious of the supernatural creatures that lurk in the dark. Being attacked by one of these creatures, Jayce Price was given a choice, sell his soul or die as a human, picking one of the options, multiple messages appeared in front of him. [ You have acquired the System ] [ Current Demonic Synchronization 0.00% ] [ Increasing Demonic Synchronization ] --- Author here, As this is my first ever novel I would appreciate constructive criticism to help improve the quality of the novel. Hoping to improve the quality as I write more so please feel free to state your opinions on the matter. It would be most appreciated if you could support my novel in any way you can, every contribution toward a goal is valuable, regardless of how small it may be. Also, special thanks to J.G. for the artwork! Contact me through Discord or Email for any questions: Ribblood#3222 Ribblood2@gmail.com

Nero was an ordinary guy with memories of a high school freshman who stumbled upon the magical world. However, there was no truck-kun, the Goddess who gives cheats, the kingdom facing a demon king needing a chosen hero, or any other bullshit that came up as the reason for his rebirth. But with memories from the digital age, he aspired to live in the magical fantasy world, seeking greatness: Power, Wealth, and Sex. He wanted it all. He desired a day when he could roam freely, like a butterfly unhindered by the restraints of humans, gods, and demons. However, all his dreams were shattered when his system revealed that his path was non-combat. Forced into a corner, awakening his Incubus bloodline seemed the only choice. Sigh, His destiny to gift green hats to other men seems set in stone. Author note: what to expect from the story - A selfish and manipulative mc - heavy netori - 100% degenerate material - a story with a thick plot and the THICC PLOT. The more support I receive, the more chapters I will try to push out. Warning: [R-18] The following story contains graphic sexual scenes and content that may be offensive or disturbing to some readers. Reader discretion is advised. You can always let me know what place my writing needs to improve. Constructive criticism is always appreciated:) P.S: This scripture does not fall under the Xianxia sect, but is an inspired work.