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How does one control the world? Power & Strength. That's all Rui cares about. As he travels through dangerous lands and faces formidable challenges, he uncovers the hidden truths of his past and the mysterious forces shaping his destiny. Surrounded by powerful rivals, enigmatic figures, and the watchful eyes, Rui must navigate a world where strength is everything and the path to supremacy is filled with both allies and enemies. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- First time ever writing a novel, feedback and criticism are wanted, please!

To be human--Normally that would mean something good. Being called humane would mean you're someone who show's compassion, love, and kindness toward another... but why exactly is that called being humane? Nothing about humans is kind, they're straight up assholes! For a majority of the human race they are either full of fake feelings, always calculating against each other and only ever caring about themselves! What exactly is kind about that? What exactly is loving about that? What exactly is human about that? Just for fun, new to writing, I'll take criticism, Writing until late January 2025 then returning most likely mid 2025

A couple weeks before Lake's Martial Course Entrance Exam, While he was taking a nap during a class he is awoken by a strange beeping sound. Opening his sleepy eyes, he could sees a strange holographic screen in front of him. [Roleplay System has successfully bonded to host. Do you wish to begin roleplaying?] [Yes?] or [No?] At first Lake thought he was still half asleep and half-heartedly chose [Yes]. Immediately After he saw a new prompt appear before his eyes. [Please select the main role the host wishes to play from the following options.] After reading that message, A series of options appeared before him. The options were so numerous that they covered the entirety of his vision. From the numerous options Lake could spot a few interesting sounding roles, [Martial Saint], [Heavenly Sage], [Harem King], [Slaughterer]… The options were too much and they made Lake dizzy. Without much thinking Lake scanned through the list of roles and choose the role whose name caught his attention the most. [Master of Fate] *** Disclaimer 1. Cover art is not mine. It belongs to kaslla. I took the image and edited my title onto it. Their twitter handle is ksb_x4 if you wish to check out their work. 2. This is my first novel that I decided to write to fill up my free time, so don't expect constant updates or any amazing writing quality. 3. I am willing to take criticism as I am still looking to improve my writing skills. For those who may post constructive criticism, thanks in advance. 4. Finally, thank you for taking the time to read my novel.

Have you ever wondered if god exists? If there is life on another planet? Does magic exist? What is there after death? Well, the answer to these questions is not difficult. Follow the story of a young porn lover who reincarnated in a fantasy world as the candidate for the God of sex, eroticism and obscenity. Accompany our protagonist on his journey full of fantasy, intrigue, women and lots of sex. English is not my native language, therefore, I apologize in advance if I present grammatical errors, I appreciate any correction and constructive criticism to improve.

After his village was destroyed by an E-Ranked demon horde, Augustus was titled the failed lord and mocked by other noble lords. Until, he died. Augustus regressed with the knowledge of the future and his SSS-Ranked skill “Talent Evolution,” fighting to change the D-Ranked village of Iona into an S-Ranked Empire. Need resources? His villager's 10x Resource Multiplier Talent was evolved into 100x! Enemies coming? His champion's Two-Hit Critical Attack was evolved into a One-Hit Critical Attack! Gods? He reared a couple in his courtyard. While other lords slept on their villagers’ talents, Augustus’s villagers transcended gods. While they mocked him for picking a dead village, he would transform it into an oasis. — What to Expect: OP MC FROM THE START NO NTR/YURI/INCEST NOT FAST-PACED MORALLY WEAK MC What NOT to Expect: Caricature MC/Characters Pokemon Harem Forced Romance MC is touchy with killing Kind, Loving, and Clueless MC

Cesare Caruso, a renowned actor and a global superstar, appeared to have it all—fame, fortune, and an impeccable reputation. Yet, hidden beneath the surface was a secret he had guarded for years—he was an Omega. That carefully guarded secret came crashing down in one fateful night, during a glamorous masquerade ball aboard a luxurious cruise ship. Overwhelmed by an unexpected heat cycle, Cesare loses control of himself, devoured by his own desires and falling into the arms of a mysterious Alpha—a reckless moment that changed everything. [Zahir al-Tamid. That’s my name.] To his shock, the Alpha was Zahir—a proud prince from an oil-rich kingdom and an unwelcome figure from Cesare’s past. Worse, that night left Cesare unexpectedly pregnant! Before Cesare could make sense of it all, Zahir made a grand entrance at Cesare’s mansion by helicopter, uninvited, catching the attention of major media outlets around the world, demanding a settlement claiming that Cesare shall be responsible for ‘imprinting’ a royal family like him! “...Seriously, it’s not as if I have a ludicrous $2 billion just lying around, you know.” “Thus, marry me, Cesare.” Pregnancy, imprinting, and a royal marriage proposal—showered by a series of unwanted events, Cesare is desperate to find a way to cut ties with Zahir. But Zahir, stubborn and relentless, has no plans to let go. Can Cesare outrun the tempest, or will it pull him under? #BL #Omegaverse #Obsessive #Crybaby #One-sideLove #Prince #Superior Text copyright ⓒ 2024 by Kim Sol Da All right reserved. The Korean edition was originally written by 김솔다, Korea Translated and Published by We’ve Lab.

{Brainless, Cool Article, Power Fantasy, Stupidly Overpowered,...} [In order to balance the quality, quantity, rarity, and frequency of critical strikes, the system has taken the initiative to categorize them. Monthly critical strikes range from 100 trillion times quality with 1 unit of item to 1 trillion times quality with 100 units of items. Weekly critical strikes range from 100 billion times quality with 1,000 units to 1 billion times quality with 100,000 units. Daily critical strikes range from 100 million times quality with 1 million units to 1 million times quality with 100 million units. Hourly critical strikes range from 100,000 times quality with 1 billion units to 1,000 times quality with 100 billion units. Then there is the most basic rate with no restrictions whatsoever between 100 to 999 times quality with 1 trillion units.]

I plan on writing what ever comes to mind, I will try writing quality but I may not be consistent. I am also looking for criticism so pls if u find anything strange or wrong about my writing style or things I could improve on pls tell me as I will always take them into consideration.

A soldier perishes on the battlefield under mysterious circumstances. She thought it was the end—until she opens her eyes again, only to find herself surrounded by unfamiliar faces. But that's not all; somehow, she's now a baby—and not even a human one! What is going on? Now, she must move forward, leaving her bloody past behind and embracing this second chance at a peaceful life. However, things won’t be that simple. . . . This is my first time writing, and I’m very open to criticism—just please be gentle. English is not my first language, so keep that in mind!

Some worlds have its fate to be worst than death itself, what's better than a little chaos to put things back together? Talia earned her reincarnation and system through her past life, she was giving a mission to change this new world's fate, will she be able to do so, starting from scratch and with all the obstacles in her way? A/N: Read the tags, leave a comment if you like it so far, constructive criticism is always welcome to help me improve, though don't be too harsh, this is the first novel I've ever written. Ps: The cover is temporary until I get something better.

Léonard Dumont, a 16-year-old French teenager and geek of the SCP Foundation's myths, one day receives a notification on his computer from the SCP Foundation Management System. His duty is to build the SCP Foundation has The Administrator of the Foundation. This story is a mix of several canons of the Foundation. Mix everything with our own real world to add a weight of realism to all this. This is my very first story, I hope you will enjoy it and I am open to all criticism and comments.

John Fan wakes up only to find he has returned to the past after almost stabbing his mom thinking she was an intruder! After clearing up the misunderstanding John decides that maybe he should take this chance given to him by the horns and find happiness not only for himself but those around him. ———————————————— I also ask for constructive criticism. This is my first time writing and I would enjoy all the help I can get. I plan to use this novel as an outlet for my boredom in quarantine for both my enjoyment. So don’t expect a steady upload speed.

After criticizing a game, William, a game critic, is punished by the Goddess of Eternity, Aurora, and transforms into the young Princess Ayla within this universe. Waking up kidnapped by 7 Demon Lords, Ayla must endure their lust, but also uncover the dark secrets that inhabit the castle. Immortal and trapped in a cycle of desire and manipulation, each revelation takes her deeper into a maze of mysteries where the line between ally and enemy becomes increasingly blurred. What she discovers may be the key to her liberation—or her eternal damnation.

Arthur is a mercenary on a quest to learn magic. Once a blacksmith’s apprentice, he left his comfortable life behind at fourteen to chase his dream of crafting enchanted weapons. With no noble blood or wealth, he turned to mercenary work, earning coin for the chance to study magic and uncover ancient relics. This is my first story. so sorry for any mistakes. I do plan to add romance later in the story when I feel more confident writing it. Constructive criticism please.

A child hated for what they are, a thief loved by all in their kingdom, a knight without a lord and many more stories in the world of Diitriva. If stories or characters are liked, then they might reappear I'm new to writing and any criticism is appreciated. ^^

Bumping into a stranger while looking for shelter while raining, Avery was about to scold the stranger but got tongue tied in seeing the handsome face . Follow the story of Avery and the millionaire playboy Alex Gibson who is also a mafia lord #Forced marriage # Betrayal # Funny # Bloody Note We're here to read not to criticize, also mature content and bloody

Cover Art by Neo and Yaoyueyi Volume 1 - Having been summoned to another world, Claude Evers is devastated to find out that he has no attack or magic proficiency. In a world of swords and magic, Claude endeavors to become his master's...chef? Despite this turn of events, he soon finds himself relying on his wit and strange abilities to stand by his master's side. With such fearsome enemies in this world, what solutions can Claude hope to cook up? Volume 2 - Defeating a terrifying monster endangering the kingdom, Claude's fame grows. With this in mind, his next goal is to...win over his master's heart? However, he soon learns that the nobility are not one to be trifled with. What can a lone chef do against the schemes of the powerful threatening his livelihood? Volume 3 - Welcome to the 'Certain Slice', where we are sure to serve you something that perfectly hits your tastes. This is a restaurant where you can sample our line of otherworldly food and drink, created by the one and only Demon Cleaver. Please wait here while we call a maid over to attend to your orders. The owner? I'm very sorry. He's not available at the moment. The reason? I'm afraid that he is now a wanted man, for defying kings and kidnapping princesses. Volume 4 - Stuck in another country, Claude and his companions happen upon abilities far different from what they had known before. With a country full of powerful warriors wielding such techniques, guided by a prophetic Oracle, new allies and enemies are around every corner. Will they find what they need to return home, or will 'destiny' swallow them up? Volume 5 - What happens when the person you thought you knew is completely different? Past and present collide as Claude makes his way back to Sistina to once again fight alongside his Master, encountering challenges that few Electi have ever faced. Destruction looms over Sistina as his enemies attack right where one is most vulnerable, the insecurities held in one’s heart. Volume 6 - With Sistina in the process of recoverying, Claude finds himself in a new role with many new challenges ahead. Though the dangers have passed, daily life is still far from boring as messy relationships and sudden adventures are at every corner. There is never a break in the life of an Electi! Volume 7 - War breaks out with the Empire of Purnesia. With decades of hatred possessing its people, Claude becomes embroiled in the tragedy of death and suffering. With his commitment to retain his humanity in jeopardy, how can a chef protect his friends on the battlefield? Volume 8 - Various tragedies have left Claude reeling. With his heart torn and his vow to not kill abandoned, he charges forward to the capital of Purnesia. With his heart trending towards darkness, who will remain by his side as he seeks revenge... and who will point their blade at him instead? Volume 9 - Learning of the existence of an entire army of demons, led by a familiar face, the very world is at stake. What will Claude discover upon setting foot in the realm of Gods, seeking the very limits of his Electi powers? Volume 10 - Peace has come at last, along with a new role for Claude. But his dreams foretell of another hidden danger on the horizon, one that would shatter everything he knows about the world. Volume 11 - Everything has ended, or has it? The secrets of the world are now revealed, and Claude must find everyone once again to face against a threat as old as the Gods. Volume 12 - Back together again, Claude and his crew make one final attempt against The Architect. Past and present collide as the fate of two worlds rest on the victor!

A story about our mc, Arin, join his journey in reaching to the top of the world. he makes the world shake at his might with his dragon lineage. the stories pace will change as this is my first novel and am still learning. I would appreciate any constructive criticism. New writer, synopsis will later be updated

After the introduction of the Apacolypse Marcus finds himself in a shitty situation and he’s gonna need all the luck and power he can get to survive the SSS level domain Follow Marcus’s path to power as he climbs the levels and kills monsters, bosses, kings, emporors, Gods and Goddesses, and everything he can to increase his power. P.S. this is my first time writing so be free to leave criticism and any help would be welcome, thank you.

Born into the royal family, Clove is the sole heir to the Aelaoria Empire. However, his frail nature makes him an unlikely candidate in the eyes of the nobles to become the next ruler. Under the watchful eyes of his uncle and the critical nobility, Clove is determined to overcome his weaknesses and transform into a respected, honorable king, like his father once was.

A collection of stories, places, concepts, and objects that exist in this Universe. =============================== I apologize to anyone offended, and please forgive the vast difference between chapter lengths as some will only be one paragraphs and other will be several pages long. =============================== Additionally, any feedback and criticism is appreciated as I am a ignorant and inexperienced writer

Two teenagers experienced a chance encounter and after that they became basically inseparable. Unfortunately they are faced with critical circumstances that might split them a part. Is their bond strong enough to overcome these circumstances or will they go their separate ways?

A story about a normal high school student who sacrificed his own life to save his friends in a critical moment reincarnating to the world of Sardonia. Instead reincarnating into a hero... he became a ball of light? This is my first ever novel. Hope you enjoy.

Generic Chinese manhua with a not so generic op mc. Ren a shy middle schooler from Japan after reincarnates in a mordern china with hidden cultivators. For more context just read it P.S:- English is my third language and this is my first book so please don't be too harsh with the criticism

The beginning of a new age. Zombies and mutated animals everywhere. Anarchy, Corruption, Murders, Rapes and others. The world is not like before. Watch Axel's path to the top, evolving and getting stronger, Spilling rivers of blood, destroying sects, kingdoms, camps, gangs and getting countless beauties. Join Axel and his growing Harem through this new post-apocalyptic world. (You will probably see similarities with GDW, after all I took some things from said novel, whatever, enjoy the novel and do not be too harsh with your criticism, after all this is my first novel, I will do what I can to improve :D, my english it's so bad, i'm sorry :c)

Criticism is very much appreciated don’t worry about my feelings being hurt. Synopsis: Humans are hunting the monsters of the other world for far too long it’s time for the revolt humans are gonna die at the hand of their own kind..

This story is about a boy who overthinks life and is not quite sure how to face it. All this while attending the prestigious high school Stone bridge, which trains up and coming businessmen and businesswomen. All the students try to wriggle themselves into each minds and use psychological means to win negotiations. Our mc tries to top in this school, all the while trying to lead a normal high school life while keeping the fact he’s a major corporate entity a secret. Do not worry about the character being edgy he will mature over time. P.S: It is my first work, therefore constructive criticism is encouraged.

this is a test mostly for criticism this is our first time trying to make a book help us please and thank you

Let there be light, and there was light; this marked the beginning of the universe and led to the emergence of the first humans and the first murder. Join Cain and Aiden as they stop supernatural threats that seek to destroy humanity. If you’re interested in the supernatural genre, this story is for you. I’ll be posting two chapters a week, although the schedule may change. I welcome constructive criticism and suggestions! I just want to state this before it comes to bite me in the back later. This world is similar to earth but not earth, it has almost the same history as earth, so just take it as a different dimension.

In this story, our protagonist finds himself transmigrated into his favorite game, a world filled with magic and demonic beasts. To secure a peaceful life in this new world—where strength equates to power—he must leverage his knowledge of the game to grow stronger and overcome the challenges that come his way. I appreciate any constructive criticism you may have. You can expect to see improvements as the story unfolds if you think it is. Release schedule: 5 chapters per week.