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"Let's see what my ability is.....huh!" [Ding...] [Congratulations!..You have acquired«Infinite Adaptation(SSS)»] [Congratulations!.. You have acquired«Telekinetic Control»] Anything that does not kill me makes me stronger. "If a dragon fires its breath on me I adapt" "If an unknown otherworldly entity attacks me, will I die" "Nah I'd adapt" [Congratulations! You have been chosen to climb the Tower of Trials] Hop on if you want to enjoy a long journey full of mysteries and adventures. ------ English is not my first language. If you find any mistake please point out. I am open to all criticism. Well... enjoy the read.

A soldier from the coalition finds her camp under attack by imperial troops. While escaping, she falls into a river that takes her to an unknown place, and, as if that weren't enough, she is now a baby in a strange and unfamiliar tribe. What’s going on? . . . This is my first time writing and I am very open to critics, just be gentle. Also, English is not my first language so keep it in mind

As a transmigrator turned extraordinary creature of the human race, he found the world to be more colorful than he had imagined. To more easily access everything this new realm had to offer, he first needed a special resume. Then, he had to find the right place in a city perennially shrouded in fog to fill out an application, and the last and most critical step... — was to kill a chicken or catch a mouse.

Have you ever wondered if god exists? If there is life on another planet? Does magic exist? What is there after death? Well, the answer to these questions is not difficult. Follow the story of a young porn lover who reincarnated in a fantasy world as the candidate for the God of sex, eroticism and obscenity. Accompany our protagonist on his journey full of fantasy, intrigue, women and lots of sex. English is not my native language, therefore, I apologize in advance if I present grammatical errors, I appreciate any correction and constructive criticism to improve.

In this story, our protagonist finds himself transmigrated into his favorite game, a world filled with magic and demonic beasts. To secure a peaceful life in this new world—where strength equates to power—he must leverage his knowledge of the game to grow stronger and overcome the challenges that come his way. I appreciate any constructive criticism you may have. You can expect to see improvements as the story unfolds if you think it is. Release schedule: 5 chapters per week.

Let there be light, and there was light; this marked the beginning of the universe and led to the emergence of the first humans and the first murder. Join Cain and Aiden as they stop supernatural threats that seek to destroy humanity. If you’re interested in the supernatural genre, this story is for you. I’ll be posting two chapters a week, although the schedule may change. I welcome constructive criticism and suggestions!

Born into the royal family, Clove is the sole heir to the Aelaoria Empire. However, his frail nature makes him an unlikely candidate in the eyes of the nobles to become the next ruler. Under the watchful eyes of his uncle and the critical nobility, Clove is determined to overcome his weaknesses and transform into a respected, honorable king, like his father once was.

Léonard Dumont, a 16-year-old French teenager and geek of the SCP Foundation's myths, one day receives a notification on his computer from the SCP Foundation Management System. His duty is to build the SCP Foundation has The Administrator of the Foundation. This story is a mix of several canons of the Foundation. Mix everything with our own real world to add a weight of realism to all this. This is my very first story, I hope you will enjoy it and I am open to all criticism and comments.

This is a story about a girl who dislikes the life she's living in, so she decides to run away. While in the run she finds a new friend. Along the way a tragedy occurs and they suddenly find themselves unfamiliar. They adjust to life and end up living together peacefully... Or do they? I do not own the image for the cover. I'm also new to writing so I will accept constructive criticism, but if you are just going to be negative the entire time, please leave and don't ruin the experience for others. Thanks!!

Two teenagers experienced a chance encounter and after that they became basically inseparable. Unfortunately they are faced with critical circumstances that might split them a part. Is their bond strong enough to overcome these circumstances or will they go their separate ways?

Cover Art by Neo and Yaoyueyi Volume 1 - Having been summoned to another world, Claude Evers is devastated to find out that he has no attack or magic proficiency. In a world of swords and magic, Claude endeavors to become his master's...chef? Despite this turn of events, he soon finds himself relying on his wit and strange abilities to stand by his master's side. With such fearsome enemies in this world, what solutions can Claude hope to cook up? Volume 2 - Defeating a terrifying monster endangering the kingdom, Claude's fame grows. With this in mind, his next goal is to...win over his master's heart? However, he soon learns that the nobility are not one to be trifled with. What can a lone chef do against the schemes of the powerful threatening his livelihood? Volume 3 - Welcome to the 'Certain Slice', where we are sure to serve you something that perfectly hits your tastes. This is a restaurant where you can sample our line of otherworldly food and drink, created by the one and only Demon Cleaver. Please wait here while we call a maid over to attend to your orders. The owner? I'm very sorry. He's not available at the moment. The reason? I'm afraid that he is now a wanted man, for defying kings and kidnapping princesses. Volume 4 - Stuck in another country, Claude and his companions happen upon abilities far different from what they had known before. With a country full of powerful warriors wielding such techniques, guided by a prophetic Oracle, new allies and enemies are around every corner. Will they find what they need to return home, or will 'destiny' swallow them up? Volume 5 - What happens when the person you thought you knew is completely different? Past and present collide as Claude makes his way back to Sistina to once again fight alongside his Master, encountering challenges that few Electi have ever faced. Destruction looms over Sistina as his enemies attack right where one is most vulnerable, the insecurities held in one’s heart. Volume 6 - With Sistina in the process of recoverying, Claude finds himself in a new role with many new challenges ahead. Though the dangers have passed, daily life is still far from boring as messy relationships and sudden adventures are at every corner. There is never a break in the life of an Electi! Volume 7 - War breaks out with the Empire of Purnesia. With decades of hatred possessing its people, Claude becomes embroiled in the tragedy of death and suffering. With his commitment to retain his humanity in jeopardy, how can a chef protect his friends on the battlefield? Volume 8 - Various tragedies have left Claude reeling. With his heart torn and his vow to not kill abandoned, he charges forward to the capital of Purnesia. With his heart trending towards darkness, who will remain by his side as he seeks revenge... and who will point their blade at him instead? Volume 9 - Learning of the existence of an entire army of demons, led by a familiar face, the very world is at stake. What will Claude discover upon setting foot in the realm of Gods, seeking the very limits of his Electi powers? Volume 10 - Peace has come at last, along with a new role for Claude. But his dreams foretell of another hidden danger on the horizon, one that would shatter everything he knows about the world. Volume 11 - Everything has ended, or has it? The secrets of the world are now revealed, and Claude must find everyone once again to face against a threat as old as the Gods. Volume 12 - Back together again, Claude and his crew make one final attempt against The Architect. Past and present collide as the fate of two worlds rest on the victor!

Bumping into a stranger while looking for shelter while raining, Avery was about to scold the stranger but got tongue tied in seeing the handsome face . Follow the story of Avery and the millionaire playboy Alex Gibson who is also a mafia lord #Forced marriage # Betrayal # Funny # Bloody Note We're here to read not to criticize, also mature content and bloody

this is a story about a the lone hero named Aaron storm Watch as he goes on a journey through the mha universe has he built bones, relationships and alliances note this is my first writing I am willing to take any sort of criticism in order to get better so please bear with me on this one.

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Every scratch a little less remains. how many does it take before there is nothing left? the human body kind of binds itself together to continue on until it doesn't have the energy to. but what of a species that gave up that ability for wings? how high can they fly before the nicks and cuts become too much? This is the story of how several of these people tried to fly higher and how pride comes before the fall As someone coming into this with little experience, there will be a lot of things for me to work on, and I would like to get people's criticism.

After criticizing a game, William, a game critic, is punished by the Goddess of Eternity, Aurora, and transforms into the young Princess Ayla within this universe. Waking up kidnapped by 7 Demon Lords, Ayla must endure their lust, but also uncover the dark secrets that inhabit the castle. Immortal and trapped in a cycle of desire and manipulation, each revelation takes her deeper into a maze of mysteries where the line between ally and enemy becomes increasingly blurred. What she discovers may be the key to her liberation—or her eternal damnation.

Living in an illusion Damon despised the protagonist of the novels, his way of thinking and the way he wastes his potential only to find his reality collapsing waking up to the real world where he actually is the protagonist of the novels he despised possessing overpowered cheats. Knowing a bit of the future and the power of Super Adaptation, watch as how Damon made his way to the top becoming an overpowered being with his selfish character. *** OP Chaotic Neutral MC Loner MC No Harem Note: This is an extremely laid-back novel written purely for fun. Criticism isn't welcomed; only praises will be appreciated. Just dive in and enjoy the ride!

This is just a story about the MC climbing a technological tree in a fantasy world. Am new to this writing field I might make some mistakes, criticism and corrections are welcome.

A world full of challenges and dangers. A world where weakness is an inevitable fate. Humans have to become stronger to achieve their dreams. In this cruel world, Akai Sora, a failed young man, began his journey towards greatness. After falling into a mysterious cave, he finds the legacy of an immortal farmer. With a mysterious ring, a world of power and knowledge opens before him. Akai begins to hone his skills, defying obstacles and enemies، Determined to change his destiny and ascend towards the stars، To prove that failure is not the end of the road, but the beginning of a new Legend. ------ Beginner novelist, if you have any criticism or advice write it in the review.

"Catch me, Agent." the man said before jumping out of the window. She ran fast to catch up with the man who jumped from the window but no matter how fast she ran she didn't catch up with it and was even more annoyed when she saw the man smiling at her as he fell and landed smoothly on the ground. "Ughh, that fucking mafia boss." ___ "Wanna play with me, agent?" "Hide and seek?" "Sure. find me, agent."

**DISCONTINUED** After years of pouring his heart and soul into his fantasy novel, a frustrated author faces the backlash of disappointed readers. Struggling with harsh criticisms and a sense of failure, he finds himself in a shocking accident that transports him into the very world he created—only to discover he’s not the hero but a mere extra in his own story.

Chou Tzuyu was an ordinary college girl who wanted to have a relaxing vacation. Because her internet connection was suddenly cut off, she found herself on the lake where she met a handsome young man who was feeding ducks. Is this a sweet love story of a young girl? Or... Is everyone hiding their true selves? (This is my first romance novel. Give a chance to this story and feel free to critic however you wish)

[Target in sight.] [Skill Critical Eye has been activated.] Being clumsy is quite common. But Luke Hunter’s clumsiness is on a different level. As the young man quite literally stumbles through life, he wonders if there’s something more he could be doing in the world. His dreams may come to be realized, as a freak accident causes Luke to wake up as Klum, in a completely different setting than his day-to-day life. His Dexterity, a skill that measures things such as flexibility and how well one holds themself, sits at the level it was in his past life; 1. And yet, he finds his skills to be suited for an extremely coordinated individual, especially after he meets the only other Sword Saint to have ever existed, an individual who is the strongest Swordsman among those both alive and passed on. It’s up to him to find his way in his new life, and strive to reach the path of the highest Swordsman — the Sword Saint. Will he be able to transform his 1 Dexterity into a 1000? Or will he be dragged into something much deeper — much darker? Credits to valeri_mirley on fiverr for the new cover! Updating 5-10 chapters a week, and now posting on RoyalRoad!

A Yandere story that has a gamer/rpg/whatever system. The Yandere comes later on. Ps- You can give me criticism if you want, as long as it doesn’t cross the line. I’ll be fine with that and also this story or novel will be a crack fic. Don’t take it to seriously btw. Updates are random since I mostly going to be on watt-pad. FanFiction.Net and Webnovel are use to take a break and refresh my mind, and sometimes giving me ideas and such. I’m planning on working on a story on FanFiction.Net but that’s on hold, but anyways updates on this story could be random or weekly. Depending if I’m in the mood to write.

Dave, once known as the "Great Virgin Mage!", was an avid RPG and online games player. However, due to a heart attack, he suddenly died and found himself meeting the Goddess of Life from another world, who summoned his soul to save humanity from demons. However, the Goddess proved to be somewhat incompetent and reincarnated him as a skeleton??? Now, Dave, a skeleton blessed by the Goddess of Life, must grow strong enough to defeat the Demon King and save the world. (The cover is not mine, I found it on Pinterest.) (Any criticism of my work is welcome.) (Updates will not be daily due to my job, but I will do my best (*-*)>).

A man reincarnated as a Hive leader monster after quickly dying after a accident. See how he brings destruction to the universe or is he defeated by the human race. Or maybe another race? Beginner writer. May be typos or some plot holes so I’ll be needing criticism or any advice. It may not be constantly uploads also do to life stuff. Thanks for reading and leave a review.

[Spent 1000 Yuan. 10x Critical Hit. Earned 10000 Yuan. The money has been transferred to account XXX XXX.] [Spent more than 1000 yuan in a day. Received 1 lottery ticket. Do you want to use it?] [YES] [NO] Taking a deep breath, Lu Fan clicked on the Yes button. [You have drawn Extreme Luck.] [Extreme Luck: Luck that is beyond the heavens. The host’s luck is way beyond mortal limits.] [You have spent 9000 yuan. 10x Critical Hit. Earned 90000 Yuan. The money has been transferred to account XXX XXX.] [Spent more than 10000 yuan. Conditions met for system upgrade. Upgrade complete.] [You have received 9 lottery tickets.] [You have received 1 Extreme lottery ticket.] [Do you want to draw?] [YES] [NO] Money is not an issue, the issue is, will the world economy be alright? Discord: https://discord.gg/tAyjH6MEr7

A young otaku, frustrated with the density of protagonists in his favorite novels, suddenly finds himself transported to the world of the book he criticized. Now, with the mission to survive and change history, he must face unexpected challenges in a magical academy located on floating islands. Will he be able to adapt and survive in this world that previously only existed in his imagination?

Countless people have suddenly traveled to a post-apocalyptic survival game, where they face the daunting challenge of surviving under the threat of countless natural disasters such as tsunamis, earthquakes, cold waves, volcanoes, and acid rain. In order to extend their lives, they must keep building upgraded shelters. While the situation is critical, the main character, Chris, discovers that he has a unique system that can be upgraded indefinitely! This discovery brings him unprecedented hope and opportunity.

A guy saves a young girl from truck-kun. then he meets an old God who decides to transmigrate him as Harry frickin Potter. Watch as "Harry" messes up canon and takes matters into his own hands. Strong and smart MC. Please do enjoy my book. I'm new here and I'm inexperienced at this. Criticism is allowed but pls don't make me cry. I don't own Harry Potter and I don't own the picture. Bye.