Mushoku Tensei Criticism

Different soul Different Rudues that's an old story. this one Different soul & Different circumstances & Different characters and different style of writing just enjoy this story is trying to fix mistakes & plot and loop holes in the story and taking ideas from other authors to make perfect story. This Rudues will change the timeline don't except copy paste of the original but the fixed points can't be changed this Rudues will be well balanced MC but not weak too. Also this Rudues far from being perverted but still he got Greyrat genes on his blood so, he will almost have normal childhood but.... Also this Rudues had accepted himself as Rudues Greyrat so let's see what will happen in the story. English is my second language so take it easy on me on grammar mistakes. Well this story is slow paced with many slice of life scenes and will be advancing slowly because I am not 100% free to write. Also obviously I don't own the story I'm just a nerd fan who loves to fix loop and plot holes in the stories I like, if anything I recommend you to read the original story from (rifujin na maganote) of course if you are over 18 and prepared to read an amazing mature story.

Have you ever wondered if god exists? If there is life on another planet? Does magic exist? What is there after death? Well, the answer to these questions is not difficult. Follow the story of a young porn lover who reincarnated in a fantasy world as the candidate for the God of sex, eroticism and obscenity. Accompany our protagonist on his journey full of fantasy, intrigue, women and lots of sex. English is not my native language, therefore, I apologize in advance if I present grammatical errors, I appreciate any correction and constructive criticism to improve.

A noble family is cursed by a being beyond them, yet so familiar,a journey of tragedy and acceptance, inspired by mushoku tensei and attack of titan

A man with a tragic past is reincarnated into a new world. He hides his sorrow behind a joyful and carefree personality. All he wants is to live life to the fullest in this new world. Fascinated by magic and this world, he seeks to learn and explore. Along the way, he forms deep bonds and makes many friends. However, fate constantly throws him into situations where he must grow stronger. For the sake of his family and friends, he makes difficult choices so he can see happiness in them. but Will he finally find happiness, or will destiny keep testing him?

Un occidental trata de salvar a Nanahoshi encontrando la muerte y renace como Rudeus, un tipo que no es un encerrado, y no es un pervertido, como El japones original, y es más inteligente y decidido que el nini japo los personajes no me pertenecen, mushoku tensei es una obra original de Rifujin Na Magonote, este es un Fanfic , sin fines de lucro

A slightly tense stream-of-consciousness novel with multiple narrative perspectives. simply a greedy, angry, yearning search for clues of love in the kitchen of the past.

There was an ancient dragon in human form who lived on a mountain, and by his side was a girl who took care of him. One day, the girl asked the dragon, "Please tell me more about yourself." The dragon replied, "Alright, but it will be a long story." — A derivative work of Mushoku Tensei by Rifujin na Maganote This novel tells the story of Laplace, and the beginning of the world of Mushoku Tensei. Hello! I am the author of Mushoku Tensei: Reincarnated as a Beast Race, and I am posting this because a lot of the information from the fanfic there will be taken from this work. I am NOT earning anything from this and all rights belong to Rifujin na Maganote, I hope you like it!

After criticizing a game, William, a game critic, is punished by the Goddess of Eternity, Aurora, and transforms into the young Princess Ayla within this universe. Waking up kidnapped by 7 Demon Lords, Ayla must endure their lust, but also uncover the dark secrets that inhabit the castle. Immortal and trapped in a cycle of desire and manipulation, each revelation takes her deeper into a maze of mysteries where the line between ally and enemy becomes increasingly blurred. What she discovers may be the key to her liberation—or her eternal damnation.

[LitRPG / Isekai / Adventure / Action / Comedy] Inspired by Mushoku Tensei, God of War, Bloodborne, Elden Ring & Warhammer 40k. Zen Hawthorn is a strange fellow, born with a curse that makes everyone question his sanity. In a cruel twist of fate, he embarks on a journey to avenge his grandfather; further unlocking the mysteries of the world he lives in.  Join him on an action-adventure-romcom journey filled with Demons, celestials, and cosmic beings as he narrates from his humble beginning to the prevention of the Demon King's resurrection and more. Beware of plentiful memes, Easter eggs, and references found within. This story contains Japanese folklores, Norse & Greek mythology along with Elves, Demons, Reptilians, Vikings and Dragons. Have fun reading! Book 1 - Not An Isekai Story (Completed) [Rewritten] Book 2 - Not An Isekai Story Unshipped (In Progress) Book 3 - Simply Not Another Isekai Story (Coming Soon) Book 4 - Simply Not Another Isekai Story Unlimited (Coming Soon)

Cesare Caruso, a renowned actor and a global superstar, appeared to have it all—fame, fortune, and an impeccable reputation. Yet, hidden beneath the surface was a secret he had guarded for years—he was an Omega. That carefully guarded secret came crashing down in one fateful night, during a glamorous masquerade ball aboard a luxurious cruise ship. Overwhelmed by an unexpected heat cycle, Cesare loses control of himself, devoured by his own desires and falling into the arms of a mysterious Alpha—a reckless moment that changed everything. [Zahir al-Tamid. That’s my name.] To his shock, the Alpha was Zahir—a proud prince from an oil-rich kingdom and an unwelcome figure from Cesare’s past. Worse, that night left Cesare unexpectedly pregnant! Before Cesare could make sense of it all, Zahir made a grand entrance at Cesare’s mansion by helicopter, uninvited, catching the attention of major media outlets around the world, demanding a settlement claiming that Cesare shall be responsible for ‘imprinting’ a royal family like him! “...Seriously, it’s not as if I have a ludicrous $2 billion just lying around, you know.” “Thus, marry me, Cesare.” Pregnancy, imprinting, and a royal marriage proposal—showered by a series of unwanted events, Cesare is desperate to find a way to cut ties with Zahir. But Zahir, stubborn and relentless, has no plans to let go. Can Cesare outrun the tempest, or will it pull him under? #BL #Omegaverse #Obsessive #Crybaby #One-sideLove #Prince #Superior Text copyright ⓒ 2024 by Kim Sol Da All right reserved. The Korean edition was originally written by 김솔다, Korea Translated and Published by We’ve Lab.

UN HOMBRE ES ASESINADO Y RECIBE UNA SEGUNDA OPORTUNIDAD EN UN MUNDO NUEVO CON REGLAS ALGO PECULIARES ( LIBRO ESTILO ISEKAI TENSEI....MUERE Y REENCARNA EN OTRO MUNDO CON REGLAS ESTILO ROL Y RPG)

Léonard Dumont, a 16-year-old French teenager and geek of the SCP Foundation's myths, one day receives a notification on his computer from the SCP Foundation Management System. His duty is to build the SCP Foundation has The Administrator of the Foundation. This story is a mix of several canons of the Foundation. Mix everything with our own real world to add a weight of realism to all this. This is my very first story, I hope you will enjoy it and I am open to all criticism and comments.

Cover Art by Neo and Yaoyueyi Volume 1 - Having been summoned to another world, Claude Evers is devastated to find out that he has no attack or magic proficiency. In a world of swords and magic, Claude endeavors to become his master's...chef? Despite this turn of events, he soon finds himself relying on his wit and strange abilities to stand by his master's side. With such fearsome enemies in this world, what solutions can Claude hope to cook up? Volume 2 - Defeating a terrifying monster endangering the kingdom, Claude's fame grows. With this in mind, his next goal is to...win over his master's heart? However, he soon learns that the nobility are not one to be trifled with. What can a lone chef do against the schemes of the powerful threatening his livelihood? Volume 3 - Welcome to the 'Certain Slice', where we are sure to serve you something that perfectly hits your tastes. This is a restaurant where you can sample our line of otherworldly food and drink, created by the one and only Demon Cleaver. Please wait here while we call a maid over to attend to your orders. The owner? I'm very sorry. He's not available at the moment. The reason? I'm afraid that he is now a wanted man, for defying kings and kidnapping princesses. Volume 4 - Stuck in another country, Claude and his companions happen upon abilities far different from what they had known before. With a country full of powerful warriors wielding such techniques, guided by a prophetic Oracle, new allies and enemies are around every corner. Will they find what they need to return home, or will 'destiny' swallow them up? Volume 5 - What happens when the person you thought you knew is completely different? Past and present collide as Claude makes his way back to Sistina to once again fight alongside his Master, encountering challenges that few Electi have ever faced. Destruction looms over Sistina as his enemies attack right where one is most vulnerable, the insecurities held in one’s heart. Volume 6 - With Sistina in the process of recoverying, Claude finds himself in a new role with many new challenges ahead. Though the dangers have passed, daily life is still far from boring as messy relationships and sudden adventures are at every corner. There is never a break in the life of an Electi! Volume 7 - War breaks out with the Empire of Purnesia. With decades of hatred possessing its people, Claude becomes embroiled in the tragedy of death and suffering. With his commitment to retain his humanity in jeopardy, how can a chef protect his friends on the battlefield? Volume 8 - Various tragedies have left Claude reeling. With his heart torn and his vow to not kill abandoned, he charges forward to the capital of Purnesia. With his heart trending towards darkness, who will remain by his side as he seeks revenge... and who will point their blade at him instead? Volume 9 - Learning of the existence of an entire army of demons, led by a familiar face, the very world is at stake. What will Claude discover upon setting foot in the realm of Gods, seeking the very limits of his Electi powers? Volume 10 - Peace has come at last, along with a new role for Claude. But his dreams foretell of another hidden danger on the horizon, one that would shatter everything he knows about the world. Volume 11 - Everything has ended, or has it? The secrets of the world are now revealed, and Claude must find everyone once again to face against a threat as old as the Gods. Volume 12 - Back together again, Claude and his crew make one final attempt against The Architect. Past and present collide as the fate of two worlds rest on the victor!

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A person found themselves in the world of Battle Through the Heavens and received a compensation system. Now, he is Xiao Kun, the twin brother of Xiao Yan. «Ding! You gave an ordinary person a medical book, triggering a 100,000-fold critical return, and received a Sixth-Tier Alchemist Inheritance Manual.» «Ding! You gave Xiao Yan a piece of Beast Flame, triggering a 1,000,000-fold critical return, and received the Earth Lotus Heart Flame*1.»

"He died a hero. He awoke a liar." **Kael Aranthor** sacrificed everything to slay a god. He failed. Reborn as **Elias Ravenspire**, the pampered heir to a noble house, he remembers the apocalypse that shattered his world—and the God of Destruction, **Vyrthax**, who hunts him still. But in this new life, Kael is trapped in the body of an eight-year-old boy, his legendary strength replaced by trembling hands and a family who sees him as a stranger. **The Ravenspires have secrets.** Their bloodline carries a forgotten power—a silver flame gifted by a goddess to fight the Devourer of Worlds. When shadow creatures stalk Elias’s new home and his birthmark ignites with ancient magic, he realizes Vyrthax’s hunger spans realms. To protect his sister Lila and the parents he’s learning to love, Elias must wield a power he cannot control… and confront the truth about the life he lost. **But the past won’t stay buried.** Vyrthax’s whispers poison Elias’s dreams. Family heirlooms hide forbidden histories. And when a cryptic blacksmith’s apprentice discovers Elias’s cursed magic, their fragile alliance could save the realm—or doom it. **In a world where gods feast on despair, one reborn hero must choose:** Embrace the warrior he was, or become the boy he’s meant to be. --- ### **Why Readers Will Love This Story**: - **Epic Reincarnation Fantasy**: Think *Mushoku Tensei* meets *The Wheel of Time*, with a child protagonist balancing vulnerability and latent god-slaying power. - **Morally Complex Villain**: Vyrthax isn’t just a destroyer—he’s a philosopher of despair, taunting Elias with truths that blur the line between monster and martyr. - **Family Secrets & Sacrifice**: The Ravenspire dynasty’s hidden past unravels in a gothic manor, where love and lies are two sides of the same blade. - **Relentless Pacing**: From midnight crypt rituals to shadow-infested forests, every chapter escalates tension, blending emotional depth with heart-pounding action. - **A Hero You’ll Root For**: Elias is no chosen one—he’s a traumatized soldier in a child’s body, fighting to protect a family he doesn’t believe he deserves. --- **Perfect for fans of**: - *The Stormlight Archive’s* intricate worldbuilding - *The Beginning After the End’s* reincarnation-driven growth - *Fullmetal Alchemist’s* blend of familial bonds and cosmic stakes - *Attack on Titan’s* relentless, existential dread --- **"A masterpiece of rebirth and redemption, where every flicker of hope is a rebellion against the dark."** --- **Dive into Chapter 1** and discover why one reader called it *"the love child of *Mistborn* and *Spirited Away*—dark, dazzling, and impossible to put down

A man was hit by the almighty truck-sama and he reincarnated as Naruto's twin brother. This is the first time in a long while since I have written any story (over 3 years in fact) so please go easy on me and give constructive criticism.

Shu Hotsu, a neglected boy in Tokyo, suffers under the weight of his father Darien’s abuse, stemming from deep-seated insecurities after his wife’s departure, shu ended up getting sent to another world after being run over by a train

In a world shattered by the Sundering, where the skies bleed ash and the earth cracks with the weight of forgotten magic, Kael Jasvyn is a young man trapped in a life he despises. Bored, restless, and burdened by the expectations of his family, Kael dreams of freedom and purpose—but finds neither in his mundane existence. That is, until a mysterious artifact, a cursed black chain, thrusts him into the dying world of Eryndor, a land ruled by chaos and haunted by the remnants of a fallen empire. "Ashen Chains" by J.S. Aranthys is a dark fantasy isekai that explores themes of freedom, ambition, and the cost of power. With its gritty world-building, morally complex characters, and heart-pounding action, this story is perfect for fans of Mushoku Tensei, *The Beginning After the End*, and *Solo Leveling*. Will Kael rise as a savior, or will the chains of his past—and the throne’s dark power—consume him?

Season 2 Synopsis After the fierce battle that nearly cost Seung Min his life, everyone hoped things would finally calm down. However, as school resumes, the atmosphere becomes even more tense. Seung Min returns to class with wounds that have yet to fully heal, greeted by questioning stares and whispers echoing through the hallways. Despite it all, his resolve remains unshaken—he knows the true enemy has yet to fully reveal themselves. In this second season, friendships are tested, betrayals are uncovered, and every step they take could lead either to destruction or salvation. Before reading, please start reading from season 1

Generic Chinese manhua with a not so generic op mc. Ren a shy middle schooler from Japan after reincarnates in a mordern china with hidden cultivators. For more context just read it P.S:- English is my third language and this is my first book so please don't be too harsh with the criticism

This novel is a fanfiction between "My Hero Academia" and "That Time I Got Reincarnated As A Slime" but with my own twists most of the characters I'm going to introduce are original characters but there will be some characters from the anime/manga from my hero Academia hey guys I'm a new writer and new to this app so constructive criticism and any type of advice is appreciated to no bounds

The fall of the Heavenly Demonic Cult! It was a big event that caused the balance between the Three Paths to shatter! After the war, only the Orthodox and the Unorthodox Paths remained. Unbeknownst to others, the Heavenly Fate is reversing and the Saints are returning! ___________________ Disclaimers: 1. DON'T give me powerstones. 2. If you really don't like the story, leave your 1 star/2 star reviews here. I accept all criticism as I will not take it to heart.

This masterpiece isn't mine. 'Mushoku Tensei' is my favorite novel, and although that's not a reasonable reason to share (Copy)it, I don't mind being reported. Enjoy this beautiful novel! -------------------------------------------------------- WRITTEN BY RIFUJIN NA MAGONOTE. The story follows an unnamed 34-year-old Japanese NEET (Not in Education, Employment, or Training) who's struggling with his life. After being kicked out of his home, he's involved in a fatal traffic accident. However, instead of dying, he's reincarnated into a fantasy world as Rudeus Greyrat, a newborn baby. Retaining his memories from his past life, Rudeus resolves to make the most of his second chance and become a successful and happy person. Throughout the series, Rudeus navigates his new life, learning magic, making friends, and facing various challenges. Along the way, he discovers his unique abilities and confronts the darkness within himself. Mushoku Tensei explores themes of redemption, self-improvement, and the complexities of human nature, all set against a rich fantasy world backdrop.

Title: Eternion: The Last Zenith Synopsis: In a universe where gods and mortals clash, the mighty warrior Eternion stood as the last defense against the darkness. But even his limitless power wasn't enough. Defeated by the tyrant Dark Omega, he made a final decision—to send his newborn son, Tensei, and two other celestial children to Earth. Stripped of their divine might, they were reborn as humans, unaware of their true origins. Twelve years later, their past catches up to them. Dark Omega's forces discover their existence, sending relentless assassins to eliminate them before they regain their powers. As Tensei and his companions, Kaizen and Yura, unlock their celestial heritage, their battle against the shadow army begins. But while their strength has limits, Tensei's power remains boundless—a hidden legacy of his father. As war looms over Earth, will they be able to reclaim their full strength and challenge Dark Omega? Or will they fall, just as their ancestors did? The fate of two worlds now rests on the last Zenith.

This is my own personal project, it's a story about a young man seeking revenge for the loss of his friend. This is simply the rough draft but ai hope those who read it do enjoy it, even with all the grammatical mistakes and issues in the story. I'll accept any constructive criticism so I can improve my novel and hopefully publish it someday.

Open to criticism, english is not my 1st language _____________________________________ Join Talented Zach Wenger on his journey today to find peace from this chaotic zombie apocalypse And eat something other then ready meals for once…

When y/n transferred schools then life decided to take a unexpectable turn. Y/n meets Stray kids and the things are getting very tense.