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I decided to go to the grave as planned. I wore a pink sweatshirt with blue trousers and carried my white handbag. As I approached the graveyard, I saw their tombstones all lined up accordingly.
Raya. 1606 - 1651
Mia. 1706 - 1736
Suzan. 1806 - 1841
Velvet. 1906 - 1931
Raya lived for 45 years, Mia for 35 years, Suzan for 30 years, and Velvet for 25 years.
Does this mean I would live for just 20 years?
I asked, and to my surprise, Velvet appeared.
"We don't live for long. Only Raya had the opportunity to live up to 45 years; the rest of us didn't pass that year."
Well... if I'm going to live for just 20 years, then I better start doing something useful, I thought to myself.
Raya, Mia, Suzan, and Velvet.
I called each of them and continued, "I know you all have a purpose that has been passed down to me: to defeat Rafaal. But I can't do it alone. He's much stronger than I am, especially with Aurora's powers. Together, we can face him. He won't be able to defeat us combined. That's why you all failed; you were meant to work together from day one. We've been divided before, but now together we stand... Who's with me?"
I said, and to my astonishment, they all emerged from their graves.
"I'm with you, Rockie!"
Raya said, her deep yet alluring voice resonating in the air, and the others agreed.
"But first... I have some dealings to take care of... and I'll need help from all of you."
I said with a devilish smile.
"Rockie, you're crazy!"
Velvet exclaimed, sensing what I was up to no good. I spoke to them about my plan, and they all agreed, so I went back home.
It's Monday, 7th of March 2022, and I was really in a hurry to go to school, which was unlike Rockie. 😊 I put on black clothes that signified revenge. I got into the car and drove off.
After class, I went to Rederick's... I mean Raiden's locker and left a note for him, saying he should meet me at a hotel by 9 PM, with the address at the bottom of the note.
When I got back home, I walked to my wardrobe, and then Velvet appeared.
"You really don't have to do this, Rockie!"
She said to me.
"Raiden's a liar, a deceiver. He worked with Rafaal to trap me in that cage; he collaborated with Rafaal to destroy you all!"
I said, stepping closer to her.
"You want to put an end to Rafaal, don't you? Then you'll have to eliminate all his allies one by one."
I said to her face, and she disappeared with a melancholic expression.
I knew she still had feelings for Raiden from my past life, but love was the main reason that distracted all of them. I walked back to my wardrobe and put on what could be called the most alluring outfit ever.
Night came. I shouldn't go out of the house, but I drove to a hotel called Mansion Hotel and went inside.
"I need a room, please," I said.
"Your name, Madam?"
The secretary asked me.
"Diana... it's Diana," I replied, already taking on the identity of Diana.
"What? Don't put your face like that... I need to make sure Diana has a share of my tasty revenge."
I was in room 185, having changed my appearance back to my normal self. I checked my clothes and sat on the bed, half naked. Raiden arrived at the hotel and was directed to my room.
"Why did you want to see me, and why here?" he asked as he stepped inside, his eyes widening at the sight of me on the bed.
As soon as I saw him, flashes of our intimate moments flooded my mind. I felt a rush of desire; I kinda liked what we started.
With a romantic smile, I moved closer, taking off his clothes and kissing him intensely. We kissed deeply until he finally gave in, and we both fell onto the bed. He explored my body, igniting a heat within me once again. But as we became intimate, I raised the knife behind his back, ready to stab him as planned. Yet, overwhelmed by our connection, I hesitated. I let go of the knife, and it clattered to the floor, breaking the moment and catching his attention.
"Oh! You think you're smart," he laughed dangerously. "You have to finish what you started!"
Before I could react, he jumped on the bed, forcing himself onto me.
"No! Let me go! Let go of me!" I yelled, but he pressed into me.
Then, a voice called out, "She said, let go of her!" Raiden stopped, looking toward the source of the voice. To my relief, I saw Raya and the others. They trapped him with their powers, and we all teleported to a desert.
"What do we do to him now?"
Mia asked me.
I was still half naked, just in my underwear. I raised my hand, and with my powers, a sword appeared in my grasp.
"No! Don't, Rockie!" Velvet shouted.
I turned to Raiden and said, "This is for what you did to all of us."
"No... no... no... please," Raiden pleaded, but I couldn't hear him anymore.
I raised my hand and sliced off his head, watching it roll on the ground as blood splattered across my body.
"Kyle? It's your turn," I said, and then I teleported away.
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Mia asked me.
I was still half naked, just in my underwear. I raised my hand, and with my powers, a sword appeared in my grasp.
"No! Don't, Rockie!" Velvet shouted.
I turned to Raiden and said, "This is for what you did to all of us."
"No... no... no... please," Raiden pleaded, but I couldn't hear him anymore.
I raised my hand and sliced off his head, watching it roll on the ground as blood splattered across my body.
"Kyle? It's your turn," I said, and then I teleported away.