So with Chapter 30, the prologue is essentially finished. Between the prologue and Act 1:
How many chapters, if any beyond one, do you want to cover the casual building of relationships/power, or jobs, during this time skip?
Ages official for Act 1. The time skip will be 6 months to a year:
Orion: 16, Vi: 15, Powder: 11-12, Caitlyn: 15, Jayce: 24.
Orion's current powers:
Light healing, and various usages of raw magic that aren't overpowered.
I believe the gap between Act 1 and Act 2 is 7 years.
Time for the goods and bads, starting with the goods:
The Good:
I believe the parts I excelled in during the prologue were the action sequences. Specifically, the best chapters were probably 22-28.
There were plenty of good ideas for the story to branch into too. Almost too many if I took the time.
I almost thought about making Orion follow C and become a complete villain, complimenting the original "C" lore.
Chapter length also gradually improved from 500-700 to start up to 1000-1500 toward the end. I felt like some of the (Shorts) I did were far more impactful than the long ones, however.
The problem that comes with it of course is brevity, and being too shallow.
The Bad:
Connecting points to bring in the main cast, just because I wanted them in, was weak and a weak reason. No doubt, but I'm not upset about it.
75% of chapters were written on the day, with no foresight or planning.
Twice it occurred when I wrote outlines for a few future chapters ahead but it was derailed quickly.
Coincidences and conveniences leading to introductions.
I tried to balance it out with Orion being beaten/humiliated in different ways as the attempted to balance it for better or worse.
Dialogue is another obvious weakness.
The simplest response received for improvement on dialogue: read more books. Alrighty.
With that:
Please leave critiques, comments, suggestions, or anything else you want in the comment section or reviews!
This is not a story where the MC becomes a master of everything, that should be obvious with how much he gets his ass kicked.
He will receive one or two more powers during the time skip if anyone wants to make suggestions on that.
I am thinking about an original book diving into the steampunk city realm mixed with magic or augmented powers, inspired because of writing this. I mentioned it briefly back in the first A/N too.
Right now, it's just concepts of the city and lore.
My writing can still improve heavily with this fanfiction.
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EDIT (D2)::::: Also a massive thank you to everyone supporting this fan fiction and bringing it into the top twenty!
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