Bom dia Pessoas,
[-] I'M GOING TO RELEASE MY FIRST BOOK! "Reincarnation Virtue" is an isekai story set in a medieval fantasy world with gender morality reversal. I give more details at the end.
[-]I saw people excited about the premise of this story so I'm going to commit to writing it until the end of the arc'Chunin Shiken'.
[-] I rewatched the first chapter of Naruto and I had forgotten how much comedy there was. Today's chapter was influenced by this, but that's not the tone of the fic as a whole.
COMMENTS:
[-]CR077(web novel):
Lol I need more chapters.
[-]Renan:
There wil be.
[-]Theleverofnomer(fanfiction):
This story has a lot of elements I like. I would love to see the story become more than a one-shot.
[-]Renan:
Thanks fot he comment, I have content until the Chunin Shiken.
[-]Error29(qq):
HE'S HERE , BOB Senju-Uchiha-Uzumaki-Hyuga-Ototsuki.
[-]Renan:
Not gonna lie… that comment hurts.
[-]alderspear(qq):
I started reading with low expectations but i was pleasently surprised.
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Originally i had thought a saiyan inserted into naruto would be to overpowered and boring, but you seem to be managing it quite well.
My advice to adapt them to naruto, make it a sort of Kekeigenkai like you did.
It might be best to do away with the supersaiyan transformation and limit yourself to the ozaru, hikari and SSJ4 transformations for powerups as thematically they can all be chained together (SSJ1 comes out of left field and aesthetically is completely diferent to the SunWukong/ozaru/monkey theme the saiyans had going). Dont know how you will explain him transforming only under the full moon, maybe it was a one off thing, and he can later learn to control the transformation even duting the day?
As a monkey/saiyan i cant wait to see his interactions with the two Sunwukong expees in the setting Hiruzen and Enma (was actually surprised he wasnt adopted by the sarutobis, but with kushina alive and well it makes sense (im still hoping he will sign the monkey summon scroll, maybe SSJ1 can be the sage mode transformation for the monkeys)).
About kushina living, she is an uzumaki, so they are one of the few who are able to survive the extraction of a biju. I think mito might have lived a couple of years once kurama was sealed into kushina, though dont quote me on that as im not sure.
Maybe kushina could be something similar, she can survive the extraction, but her chakra reserves and ninjutsu are severly damaged to the point she is cripled as a shinobi, so she can only be a civilian now.
Or just change it so minato sealed the other half into kushina instead of himself, the man didnt need the kurama chakra mode buff he was already op with his hiraishin, rasengan, and perfect sage mode.
Well, thank you for the chapter it was really interesting, and i hope your brother is doing better.
[-]Renan:
Wow… thanks for the comment and the excellent reflections on the themes of dragon ball and naruto.
Kushina losing her powers or at least becoming less of a fighter was part of my original plans. Surviving Kyuubi's extraction is possible for her, but without any after-effects it seems… wrong when I was thinking about this fic. In short, she became a civilian and she didn't even look for a way. It makes sense(at least to me) that the Kushina from the original series would focus on being a mother rather than a ninja, when she has two children to take care of.
This idea of using the SSJ 4 aesthetic is brilliant, I'm seriously thinking about using this idea.
And finally... do you want to be a beta for this story, alderspear? English is not my native language and I stumble a lot when I'm in the translation process.
Naruto runs towards the tree. He jumps, planting his feet on the tree trunk and continues his charge to the top.
Although the exercise uses little chakra, the boy's control is poor.
CRACK!
What caused him to use too much energy and break the bark of the tree…
"Damn it." The blonde ninja grumbled.
POF!
…and then ended up falling on his butt in the soft grass.
Saruhiko watches from afar, with a smug smile on his face. He knows that Naruto is struggling, but he also knows that his new brother won't give up easily.
It's this determination that made him like Naruto so much when he saw the anime for the first time, and now it's this determination that makes him proud to call the boy his brother.
…
Not that Saruhiko would admit it out loud.
'Thankfully, even without suffering as much as the original, he is still determined and stubborn.' Saruhiko thought silently.
"RAAAAAAAARGH!" Shouted Naruto running towards the tree.
CRACK!
POF!
Just to repeat the same result as before.
"Maybe 'too' stubborn?" Murmurs the black-haired Uzumaki upside down in the tree.
The reincarnated man knows that he still has 1 year until team seven is formed, so he still has time to make his adopted brother more prepared than in the original canon.
CRACK!
"FUCK!"
POF!
"He just won't be more patient or mature." Whispers the upside-down ninja holding back a laugh. "I gess you can't have everything."
CRACK!
"AAAAAH!"
POF!
Unlike other times, Naruto lay on the ground after falling, breathing heavily after his last failed attempt.
"Are you okay?" Saruhiko asked worriedly. "Did you break something important?"
"No." Replied Naruto in a frustrated tone. "How did you learn to do that so quickly?"
Saruhiko sighs irritably in response, he was already tired of explaining why.
"I've told you a thousand times. My chakra reserves are smaller than yours, and so control comes easier to me."
"What's the point of having so much chakra if I can't do anything?" Questions Naruto still lying down.
"Stop complaining. Once you overcome this it will never be a problem again, I on the other hand have to live the rest of my life with 30% of the reserves of a conventional ninja."
Before they can talk anylonger Kushina appears in the backyard, her red hair shining in the late afternoon sun. Her violet eyes sparkle with worry and irritation. She crosses her arms, taking in the scene before her. Naruto is on the ground, sweaty and panting, while Saruhiko is upside down on the tree, also sweating, but not from exhaustion.
"What is going on here?" Kushina asks with an intimidating maternal smile, which chills Saruhiko's spine.
Naruto lifts his head, wiping the sweat from his forehead.
"We're training, mom!" Says Naruto, standing up all proud. "Saruhiko is helping me control my chakra."
Kushina frowns, her violet eyes narrowing.
"Chakra control?" Says Kushina in an inquisitive tone focusing her eyes on the tree next to Naruto.
As a veteran ninja, Kushina immediately recognizes the training of climbing trees without hands.
"You know I forbade you both from doing advanced training without supervision." His voice is firm and icy, making his irritation palatable.
Naruto swallowed hard, realizing his mistake. He looks at Saruhiko, who is still upside down in the tree, trying to remain calm.
"Ah mom…it's just... I wanted to get better, you know? And Saruhiko is helping me."
Saruhiko, feeling Kushina's gaze, descends from the tree with an agile jump. He lands softly on the ground, trying to appear unconcerned.
"The truth is that Naruto just wanted to train a little." Says the black-haired boy trying to blame Naruto.
"What?" Questions Naruto. "You practically dragged me to training."
"Shut up you orange idiot!" Saruhiko complains, turning to Naruto. "There's no need to talk unnecessary shit."
In turn, the blonde ninja turns to his brother, glaring at him furiously.
"It's the truth, Ero-saru."
"Who are you calling Ero-saru you fucking drag queen."
"I'm not a drag queen, it's just a technique that defeated the Sandaime-."
"SHUT UP!" Howl's Kushina.
BONK! X2
Just to silence her children with a punch to each one's head.
Kushina crosses her arms, her violet eyes flickering with a mix of irritation and maternal concern. She looks at Naruto and Saruhiko, but calms down, sighing tiredly.
"Go wash your hands and come have dinner." Her voice is firm, but full of affection. "And behave. We have a visitor today."
Naruto and Saruhiko exchange a quick look, both surprised and confused by the news.
"Who is it?" Naruto asks curiously.
Laughing quietly, Kushina turns around responding.
"Your godfather."
N:ISNaruto, Saruhiko, and Kushina are sitting around the dining table, which is filled with steaming, fragrant dishes. The atmosphere is tense, but there is also a palpable curiosity in the air. The visitor, Jiraiya, sits at the head of the table, his long white hair falling over his shoulders and a playful smile on his face.
"Okay boys, this is Naruto's godfather, one of the three legendary Sannin." Says Kushina, trying to break the ice. "Jiraiya, these are my sons, Uzumaki Naruto and Uzumaki Saruhiko."
Jiraiya laughs as his eyes crinkle at the corners.
"It's a pleasure to meet you brats." Says the frog Sannin in a friendly tone. "The blonde really looks like Minato."
Kushina rejoices at the statement from her husband's former master, but before she can say anything, Naruto speaks his mind.
"Are you sure that this beggar dressed as a Kabuki theater actor was father's master?" Naruto asks casually.
A deafening silence falls in the room, Naruto casually offended one of Konoha's greatest living legends. Kushina's eyes widen, and she quickly looks at Jiraiya, fearing his reaction. The Sannin, however, was paralyzed with surprise.
The tension is broken by Saruhiko's laugh. He threw his head back, laughing uncontrollably, the boy's eyes were shining with amusement.
"Naruto, you are amazing!" Saruhiko exclaims, slamming his hand on the table. "Only you to call the frog sannin a beggar!"
Jiraiya, in turn, grumbles irritably.
"And to think I skipped a night of research to visit my godson and his brother."
When mentioning his godson Saruhiko stops laughing and looks at the visitor. Finally realizing the wierdness of the situation.
'Oh fuck!' Exclaims the reincarnated mentally. 'He never visited Naruto before the Chunin Shiken, how screwed is the canon because of my participation in the story?'
Kushina looks at Jiraiya, her eyes reflecting a mixture of respect and affection. She turns to Naruto, her voice firm but gentle.
"Jiraiya is respected even by the Sandaime Hokage and feared throughout the ninja world. Your skills and wisdom are unparalleled. He was the master of your father, Minato, and is one of the most important people in our village."
Naruto frowned, his blue eyes shining with a mix of curiosity and doubt. He looks at Jiraiya, trying to reconcile the figure before him with his mother's description.
"If the third Hokage respects him, it is because he must be important." Adds Saruhiko encouraging Naruto to give the Sannin a chance.
Kushina sighs, but her tone remains patient.
"Appearances can be deceiving, Naruto. Jiraiya may seem eccentric, but his skills and knowledge are real."
Naruto looks at Jiraiya, still hesitant, but the sincerity in his mother's words begins to break down his resistance. He looks at Saruhiko, who gives him an encouraging nod.
"Fine…" Naruto says finally, his voice still carrying a slight reluctance. "But why haven't you ever come to visit us before?"
…
"Good question!" Exclaims Saruhiko, holding back a laugh.
Jiraiya gives an embarrassed laugh, but answers the boy.
"I was busy with my...research." Jiraiya replied without being able to look the boys in the eye.
"What kind of-." Naruto tried to ask.
"When you're 21!" Exclaims Kushina, interrupting her son.
Tense silence settles again in the dining room, all eyes fixed on Jiraiya, who looks uncomfortable under the scrutiny. Saruhiko, breaks the silence once again with a mischievous smile.
"You kind of owe Naruto 10 years of birthday and Christmas presents."
"Really?" Exclaims Naruto happily.
"SARUHIKO!" Shouts Kushina, furious at the boldness of her black-haired son.
N:ISJiraiya walks calmly through the streets of Konoha, his stride long and carefree. He continues on his way, occasionally waving to villagers who recognize him and smile in response.
Upon reaching a less busy street, he stops and looks around, making sure no one is around, and enters a dark alley.
With a playful smile, he speaks loudly.
"What a peaceful place." It mentions the gallant ninja apparently alone. "Nobody us you will hear here, not even ANBU or 'Ne' agents."
(Renan: I will refer to Danzo's organization as 'Ne', the original name in Japanese, so I avoid getting confused when translating from Portuguese to English.)
His tone is light, but there is seriousness in his words. He knows that in Konoha, privacy is a rare commodity, especially for someone of his importance.
But at this point, the veteran ninja is confident he can speak freely.
From around the corner, the figure of a black-haired child appears from the darkness, who until a few hours ago was having dinner with him.
"Does your mother know you're out late?" Jiraiya asks, intrigued.
Saruhiko approaches the older ninja, yawning tiredly.
"We have an agreement for this kind of thing, I can leave the house late once in a while. As long as during the full moon I come home early and stay in my room with the windows closed... which I always do, after all I don't want to hurt anyone by accident."
Jiraiya frowns, staring at Saruhiko with a seriousness that contrasts with his usual casualness. His eyes, normally playful, are now sharp and penetrating, as if trying to decipher something deep in the boy.
Saruhiko, noticing the change in Jiraiya's behavior, smiles slightly. There is a hidden mischief in his smile, an unspoken understanding that he knows more than he lets on.
"So, you know about the redacted information of the fox attack." Jiraiya comments, his voice low and serious. "This is not something that is discussed openly Saruhiko. How did you find out this information?"
Saruhiko shrugs, keeping his smile enigmatic.
"A union of factors." Says the boy, raising his hand with three fingers stretched out. "The fox attack was during a full moon, this strange tail of mine that no one else in the village has and lastly… strange dreams that I have."
Jiraiya raises an eyebrow, intrigued.
'Nice! Looks like he took the bait.' Saruhiko thinks silently. 'Let's see if I can outwit Konoha's greatest spy.'
He finished, swallowing hard at the daunting task in front of him.
"During the full moon I have strange dreams. Sometimes the dreams are about me, other times I dream about things that happened to other people... but rarely do I dream about things that are yet to happen."
Still analyzing the boy, Jiraiya remained silent, as if waiting to hear something that could confirm what the boy was saying.
"I know that a giant ape helped in the fight against the Kyuubi, I know that the ape turned into a baby when dawn came and Uzumaki Kushina adopted the baby to raise with her son who is the Jinchuriki"
Once again the gallant ninja widens his eyes in surprise.
'It looks like he's starting to believe me.'
"I also know about the 'child of the prophecy'."
With the last statement Jiraiya's mouth fell open.
"I know you thought the Yondaime could have been that child, but you were wrong." Saruhiko paused in silence for a few seconds, looking Jiraiya in the eyes and this time without his classic dirty smile on his face he speaks. "Naruto is the child of the prophecy."
BOOM!
Thunder dramatically punctuates the younger ninja's speech, followed by rain that begins to fall on them.
"Dont mention the prophecy again… people will think you are a fool like me." Said the older ninja in a sad tone. "Let's continue this conversation in a dry place."
"And do you know any place safe from Danzo's spies?" Saruhiko asks in a sarcastic tone.
"To tell the truth, yes." Says Jiraiya, turning around. "Since you've met your brother's, I think it's time to meet your godfather."
"My Godfather?"
Giving a tired laugh Jiraiya responds.
"It seems like you don't know everything." He says in a relaxed tone. "Just follow me, brat."
N:ISSaruhiko and Jiraiya ran quickly through the rain, their feet hitting the wet ground in a steady rhythm. The water runs down their faces, but neither of them seems to care, as in a few moments Sarutobi Hiruzen's house appears ahead, a welcoming refuge in the middle of the storm.
The door opens before they can even knock on it, revealing the wrinkled, welcoming face of the Third Hokage. Sarutobi Hiruzen welcomes them with a tired look.
"Come in, come in." Hiruzen says, gesturing for them to enter quickly.
Inside the house, the atmosphere is warm and inviting. The smell of freshly brewed tea fills the air, and the crackling fire in the fireplace offers a welcoming contrast to the rain outside.
"That's my sensei, he must have realized that we were two blocks away." He comments about Jiraiya in a playful tone.
"There's no point in flattering me to get sake, we have a child with us this time." Says Hiruzen, serving tea for his visitors.
Upset by the news about the sake, Jiraiya grumbles with his arms crossed, complaining something about nosy brats getting in the way of his plans.
"I released my guard for a more private conversation as soon as I noticed you were one of those coming Jiraiya-chan, but I admit to being surprised to see my godson walking with you so late in the night." Hogake said, sitting down. "You're not leading him astray, are you?"
The Sannin stares at his old master with concern, but Saruhiko responds before he does.
"I don't need help to astray." Comments the proud boy. "But we need to catch up. My dear godfather who hardly visits."
Ignoring the jab, Sandaime sat back in his chair, and calmly drank his tea while Jiraiya and Saruhiko told him what they had discussed before the rain.
When they finished speaking, Hiruzen placed his cup on the table and looked at his godson seriously.
"You remembering what happened the night of the attack is not at all strange." The Hokage said without taking his eyes off Saruhiko. "We have records of some ninjas in our history, generally with perfect eidetic memory, who could even remember the day they were born."
Saruhiko is surprised by the idea of other people being able to remember their own birth, raising the hypothesis that this world has already been visited by reincarnated people.
"But since Saruhiko-kun proved to be a… limited student, I didn't have that concern anymore for a few years."
Now it was Jiraya's turn to laugh at the boy's expense.
"Not so smart, right kid?" Jiraiya comments, pretending to hold back his laughter.
"Don't be mean. Everyone grows and improves at their own pace, Jiraiya-chan." Adds Hiruzen in a joking tone.
A vein of anger jumps into Saruhiko's face, who angrily responds to the two.
"Better than being a legendary ninja and abandoning his godson to be raised by a single mother who has another son."
The comment hits Jiraiya's ring on his ego, who reacts as if he had been punched in the stomach while the Hokage laughs, pointing at him.
"It goes for you too, 'godfather'."
Hiruzen stops immediately and turns to Saruhiko in confusion.
"Ero-sannin was away on a mission, but you are in the same city. Why didn't you take the time to visit?"
Sarutobi Hiruzen and Jiraiya cough awkwardly, trying to hide their embarrassment. The Hokage adjusts himself in his chair, looking for a way to change the direction of the conversation.
"Let's leave the jokes aside for a moment." Hiruzen says, his voice taking on a more serious tone. "I'm more interested in the dreams and the other information you mentioned to Jiraiya."
Saruhiko, still irritated, crosses his arms and looks at the Hokage with a challenging look, but responds as he had planned.
"Next year, Naruto will form a team with Uchiha Sasuke and Haruno Sakura. Together with jonin the Hatake Kakashi they will form team seven. Team that helped Konaha in several moments of crisis, one of them being an attack by the sannin Orochimaru."
The atmosphere in the room turns cold with the young man's last statement. Hiruzen and Jiraiya exchange worried looks, the seriousness of the situation weighing on them. The silence is broken only by the crackling of the fire in the fireplace.
'I have to be careful.' Saruhiko thought, analyzing the ninjas. 'I need to say enough to secure their help, but not enough to further derail the canon.'
"I know it sounds crazy. But this is what has appeared in my dreams, they are too vivid to be just imagination."
Jiraiya, who until then had been thinking silently, turns to the boy.
"And you said Orochimaru is going to attack Konoha?"
"Yes." Saruhiko replies, without hesitation. "He will try to destroy the village, many people will die. And Naruto, Sasuke and Sakura will be instrumental in stopping this."
Hiruzen rubs his chin thoughtfully.
"If what you say is true, we need to prepare. Orochimaru is a serious threat."
"But there's also the problem of change." Alert Saruhiko. "Me having seen the future is enough to change it, telling you two will definitely trigger changes, possibly altering the entire scenario."
"What do you mean by that?" Questions Sarutobi confused.
"A common concept in fictional stories." Says Jiraiya, responding to his master. "The future that was predicted did not include both of us knowing that it would happen. If we reinforce the village's defenses, Orochimaru may not attack, or make a more devastating attack than Saruhiko had anticipated."
'Who would have thought that his background as a dirty writer would help Ero-sannin understand time travel.' Saruhiko thought silently.
Sarutobi Hiruzen remains silent for a few moments, his eyes fixed on a distant point as he reflects on Saruhiko's words. The rain outside continues to beat against the windows, creating a steady rhythm that fills the silence in the room. Jiraiya impatiently drums his fingers on the table, but keeps his mouth shut, waiting for his master's decision.
Finally, Hiruzen lifts his head and looks at Saruhiko with a serious but understanding look.
"I understand the situation, Saruhiko-kun." The Hokage says, his voice firm and determined. "If what you say is true, we need to proceed with caution. Making big changes all at once can alter the future in unpredictable ways."
Saruhiko nods, relieved to be taken seriously. Jiraiya, in turn, leans forward, eager to hear his master's plan.
"The most prudent thing is to make small changes." Hiruzen continues. "I will take measures and prepare the village for the attack discreetly." The hokage says, nodding his head slowly. "And how about you?"
Caught by surprise, Saruhiko stares confused at the Hokage.
"Any ideas on how you're going to prepare, young man?" Ask the older ninja with a sly smile.
Saruhiko realizes that he does not have an exact answer to Hiruzen's question. He scratches his head, trying to organize his thoughts.
"Orochimaru will approach Sasuke during the Chunin Shiken, but he doesn't care about Naruto at the time." Saruhiko mutters in thought. "So the chances of him realizing that Naruto has improved a lot in these years and changing his plans because of that are slim."
Sarutobi and Jiraya looked at the young man in astonishment, surprised by his solid train of thought.
"We need to speed up my and Naruto's training. The attack will happen during Chunin Shiken, so we have to be ready in less than two years." Concludes Saruhiko.
Hiruzen smiles proudly now that it is clear that his godson, in addition to having an enviable gift, is more mentally capable than he appears. His eyes shine with a mixture of admiration and relief, recognizing Saruhiko's maturity and intelligence.
"Whatever you need to carry out your training plan, just ask. Jiraiya-chan and I will help you." Says the Hokage, smiling.
"Eh?" Jiraiya says irritated. "I promised nothing"
Hiruzen silences his disciple by looking at him sternly. Despite being unhappy, Jiraiya nods agreeing to help.
"In that case." Saruhiko said, with a big savage smile on his face. "I will write you a list." He concludes laughing like a cartoon villain.
The two older ninjas swallow hard, realizing they made a terrible mistake in promising anything to the reincarnated young man.
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Boa noite pessoas,
[-]What do you think is on Saruhiko's list? What do you think could help the Uzumaki brothers get stronger?
[-] In your opinion, do I make a time skip for the formation of the teams, or do I write Naruto and Saruhiko's training? The training will be a maximum of 2 chapters, but if you think it's better to skip this part, leave your argument in the comments.
[-]About my book, "Virtue of Reincarnation":
COVER (Instagram renanp.moraes / X renanp1m)It's a dream come true to publish my first book on December 06, 2024.
I am deeply grateful to my mother and father, and especially to my younger brother who was essential for this dream to become a reality.
Synopsis:
"After an unexpected death, our protagonist awakens in a new world full of monsters and magic, with four moons lighting up the sky.
Reborn as Agnos Drakon, son of one of the powerful advisors of the Elysion Empire, he comes across a universe where women dominate and men with magical abilities are considered abominations.
Amid gaps in memories from his previous life, Agnos needs to discover his place in this new reality, learn to master his powers and face voracious creatures. All this while hiding from the holy inquisitors, who ruthlessly hunt down any man who dares to practice magic."
On the YouTube and TikTok channel, Nerd Runico, I am posting videos and music to help promote my book.
As my presence on social media is still micro(nothing), I would like to ask for your help by sharing information about the book.
P.S.: For legal reasons, I cannot make an English version available yet. But within 6 months, it will be on sale!
If you have references of proofreaders who work with native speakers of toher languages (especially Spanish and Portuguese), please leave them in the comments.