Yo guys I never knew people could be so dumb ... Like there is this one guy who left a bad review stating I am forcing the Mc's character.
Like what the actual F, how the hell am I forcing the MC's character when he is an OC I created, I designed his character then how the hell do you know I am forcing his character or personality to align with mine, that seemed pretty funny to me cuz the Mc and me have nothing in common. He says I changed the Mc's personality, I really want to ask, Are you the author or Am I the author? So I think this idiot probably did not even read or does not know how to read.
I got inspired by a Chinese Translation and took the premise and wrote my own fic, the Chinese Mc is Lin Ye and My MC is Fujii Itsuki they both are different people.
One is an edgy Chinese nobody while the other is a kind Japanese young man
Also If anybody is wondering this is not a Translation, this stopped being a translation from 3rd chapter onwards.
You guys can go check out his review and please tell me what you think.
Guys, You can leave bad reviews but don't leave dumb reviews like this idiot and an Idiot before, cuz I will remove it. A bad review criticizing what's wrong will help me improve while a dumb review will only showcase how dumb you are and also hurt my feelings like these idiots. An honest review won't no matter how badly you criticize me because it helps me improve.
I'm going to change some things in the first three chapters because a person suggested it, thank You for your wise words.
If you guys feel anything wrong please feel free to leave a review but don't leave a bad review stating things like, "Yeww it's a Harem" or stuff like that cuz there are tags for a reason, If you read a Harem novel with intention of single FL that's on you. All types of criticism are acceptable
I will be taking the idiot's review down tomorrow.
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Sorry for the delay, I was rewriting the First 3 chapters to remove the Chinese tone so that people don't discredit my work stating it's a translation.
And I'm happy to say It's no longer a Translation, other than the premise and title and a little similar plot direction in the beginning there isn't anything similar to the Chinese version.
Please check it out and tell me.
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Kushina felt her breath hitch when she felt his hot breath over her vagina, but even after a few seconds, nothing happened which prompted her to gaze down only to meet Itsuki's teasing gaze as he hovered over her pussy, causing her to release more fluids.
Kushina could only bite her lips and look at him with a pleading gaze. And maintaining eye contact with her, Itsuki gave her thong-covered pussy a long lick, causing an electrifying sensation to go through her body.
But when she thought he would continue with what he was doing, she was a little confused when she felt him avoid her pussy and plant kisses on her inner thighs and close to her pussy lips and Kushina could only bite her lips and endure the torturous teasing...
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Itsuki was planting kisses all around her thighs, he made sure to suck it with enough force to leave a mark.
Kushina's faint moans which she was trying to hide only riled him up. As he continued to mark her body his lips moved lower and lower...
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"Turn around "
Kushina heard his commanding voice and instantly complied and laid down on her stomach. She was anticipating what he was planning as she couldn't see him anymore and before she could look over her shoulder she felt a stinging pain on her behind causing her to moan out ...
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"Aangh"
Hearing her sensual moan and looking at her jiggling ass Itsuki couldn't help but want to smack it and that is what he did.
*Smack*
He slapped her ass with enough force to leave a hand print and if going by her voice she seemed to like it as he could see her looking back over her shoulders with a seductive look.
*Smack* *Smack* *Smack*
Itsuki gave into his desires as he continued slapping her ass, he was careful not to use too much force but he felt that would be unnecessary as she was an Uzumaki...
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Kushina could still feel the stinging pain on her buttocks but she wasn't dissatisfied quite the contrary.
Right now she was lying on her stomach feeling Itsuki laying his tender kisses on her shoulder blades and her nape, she could feel that he made sure to leave some hickeys there.
She could feel his lips travelling across her body continuing the torturous journey...
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Kushina was very embarrassed when she felt Itsuki's gaze on her naked cave, she couldn't help but reach out her hands to cover it. Although she was very eager earlier, when it came down to the real thing she couldn't help but be a little conscious.
"Don't look" she said in a meek tone
But Itsuki paid no heed to it and just pulled her hands away from covering this beautiful treasure...
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Itsuki couldn't help but stare for a few moments as he took in the sight of her inviting pink lips glistening with her arousal.
He kissed her glistening pussy lips and licked around them but never went for the prize.
"umm~" Hearing Kushina's pitiful whimper Itsuki felt the need to tease her more.
He kissed and sucked on her labia and slowly teased around her entrance but never went inside, he could feel Kushina's hands gripping his head trying to push his face into her pussy she even tried moving her hips but he told her to stay still which she obeyed.
Finally after having had enough Itsuki gave her glistening insides a long lick causing Kushina to arch and let out a loud moan of satisfaction.
"Ohhhhh~"
Itsuki couldn't wait anymore and dove in headfirst into her inviting lips savoring her tangy juices.
While Kushina pushed his face deeper into her thighs while grinding her hips against his face at the same time...
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Right now Kushina was kneeling in front of Itsuki while his cock was towering over her face.
Kushina's face was so close that she could smell the musky scent of his member causing her to be a little lightheaded.
Kushina couldn't help but bring her face closer and involuntarily take deep sniffs of his scent...
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It was her first time doing anything of this sort. Heck, tonight was the first time she experienced a lot of things because Minato and her have never done anything of this sort and she was fairly reserved and Minato was not that assertive and he was barely home. They would just do it in missionary , and after getting pregnant they never did it.
She felt a little guilty while thinking about this, not for Minato but for Itsuki. She no longer felt guilty about her feelings for Itsuki after coming to terms with her inner feelings and reservations.
She felt bad for thinking about Minato while she was with Itsuki, well she can't be blamed as she couldn't just move on that quickly. She also hoped Minato would be able to rest in peace after seeing her live happily.
The memory of their time together will always be a cherished memory in her life but she has decided to not dwell on the past and move on and live for her future...
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Kushina buried her face at the base of Itsuki's cock and was sniffing his scent, at the same time giving small licks and from time to time nipping at his cock and ball sack.
Kushina thought she would feel repulsed by the mere thought of doing what she was doing, but she felt no repulsion and all she felt was arousal as she felt Itsuki's hands stroking her hair and his soft groans which only made the fire in her loins get hotter.
Itsuki looked down to meet Kushina's upturned gaze and it only caused his meat rod to harden more. Not breaking eye contact with Itsuki, Kushina seductively took out her tongue to lick from the base of the cock to his glans in a tantalizingly slow manner not before sucking on his foreskin and ending it with a kiss on his head.
Itsuki grit his teeth and tried his best not to bust but a few drops of pre cum still formed on his tip, Kushina promptly made them disappear with a smooch.
Itsuki stroked Kushina's hair as she licked his shaft down and gave a kiss to his base while at the same time sucking it a little hard which caused a little stinging sensation but overall pleasurable.
While keeping his gaze Kushina took one of his balls into her mouth while her hands slowly stroked his hardened member rubbing his leaking precum all over his cock making it much smoother for her to move her hands...
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After taking her time to service both of his jewels Kushina moved to the top of his cock and lightly sucked on his foreskin before leaving it with a slight wet sound, Kushina rolled his foreskin back to kiss his glans, tasting the dollop of precum on his tip.
"Haah" Itsuki could only groan in satisfaction at the ministrations of the redhead making him clutch her hair a little tighter.
Itsuki closed his eyes as he felt Kushina's mouth enveloping his cock while she stroked his length.
He tightened his jaw as he felt Kushina slowly starting to ease his cock down her gullet...
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*Gluck* *Gluck*
Choking and sucking sounds echoed in the room as Itsuki was giving Kushina a facefuck. Kushina held onto Itsuki's thighs tightly while he held her long hair in a ponytail and used it to move her head back and forth quickly.
He wouldn't have been this rough if he didn't see the wild look in her eyes.
Drool and spit flowed out of her mouth to stain her breasts and the bed.
Itsuki pushed her head down on his crotch until her nose was buried in his pubes.
*Plop*
After grinding her face against his cock he pulled out of her mouth with a wet plop.
Kushina was breathing hard while resting her head against the base of his cock while giving tender kisses to his root...
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Itsuki inhaled a deep breath as he felt a strong suction on his nuts, he gazed down at the red-haired vixen looking at him with a gaze that promised pleasure...
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Itsuki was lying on the bed as he and Kushina were in a 69 position trying to pleasure each other.
Kushina was impaling her throat on Itsuki's meat rod as Itsuki bucked his hips in response. But not satisfied with just being on the receiving end Istuki grasped Kushina's pillowy ass and gave it a tight slap leaving a red hand print.
He spread her cheeks to get a good view of her flowing cunt and couldn't resist as he buried his face in her pussy and ate her out as a result he felt Kushina's moans in the form of vibrations on his cock.
Itsuki could feel himself getting closer as he increased his speed of sucking on Kushina who in turn also started bobbing her head faster to make Itsuki cum faster.
A shudder ran through Itsuki's body as he came inside Kushina's throat and just a few moments after he felt her orgasm in the form of her love juices which he wasted no time in lapping up.
*Pop*
Itsuki rode out his orgasm as he ground his cock inside Kushina's throat as he bucked his hips against her until she released his glistening cock with an audible wet pop not before giving a few loving kisses to the glistening pink head.
Kushina turned her head back and stared at Itsuki with a hungry gaze causing him to nearly growl under his breath.
"Get over here"
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Itsuki and Kushina were making out with each other as they ground their hot bodies together as if to meld them together.
Kushina let inaudible moans inside his mouth whenever she felt his hardened member grind against her wet mound.
* Gasp*
She pulled back from his lips with a gasp and gazed at him with love while whispering.
"Make love to me"
Itsuki didn't make break eye contact with her
while keeping his forehead in contact with hers. He slowly parted her warm lips and entered her warm and musshy insides inch by inch causing Kushina to let out a gasp which he promptly stopped as he sealed her lips quickly.
Itsuki and Kushina gave each other a sloppy kiss while Kushina felt the foreign intruder explore her insides slowly causing her toes to curl and she released inaudible moans inside Itsuki's mouth...
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"Ohh~"
Kushina let out a comfortable groan as she felt him filling her up to the brim, it was a little painful as he was a little too big.
She felt new sensations and places inside of her that she never knew she could feel as she clutched his hair and ran her hands through his back.
Itsuki buried his face in her neck gently nibbling on it and Kushina was sure there would be marks...
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Itsuki slowly started moving Inside Kushina causing her to frown a little because of the pain. Although she felt overwhelming pleasure, she also felt pain due to her insides still accommodating to his dick.
As Itsuki was slowly grinding against her, he felt his chest getting a little wet and he looked down with confusion only for his breathing to get faster and his Cock becoming stiffer.
'MILK!' That was the only thought in Itsuki's mind as he gazed at Kushina's tantalizing swaying tits which had milk leaking from the tips.
Kushina also felt a little confused, she didn't know why she suddenly started leaking as she made sure to extract everything with a breast pump. But all her thoughts were sent into disarray when she felt a sucking sensation on her tits.
She gazed at Itsuki, who was suckling on her tits with a smile which prompted her to push him tighter into her tits.
She let out a sigh of satisfaction upon feeling the pleasurable sensation on her breasts and pussy. She felt a sense of happiness feeling how slow and careful Itsuki was taking it to ensure she didn't feel uncomfortable.
She couldn't help but feel more aroused at the thought of being milked by Itsuki causing her to involuntarily move her hips together with his...
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"Aaaangh~"
Kushina couldn't help but moan out loud as she felt Itsuki's hard prick ploughing her insides and rearranging them to his shape.
Itsuki held onto Kushina's hips as he pounded her, he looked at her fat tits which were shaking up and down due to the movement. They looked delectable due to the milk flowing from them.
Itsuki couldn't help but reach out and squeeze her titts hard causing her to squirt out milk.
He couldn't help but get more aroused as he increased his speed causing Kushina's moans to get louder. Itsuki held onto her titts for leverage and pounded her into oblivion.
" Aaaannnghh!" Kushina couldn't help but moan out as she felt her insides tighten.
She hugged Itsuki's body tighter mashing her tits against his chest and locking her legs behind his back like a koala.
This caused Itsuki to grunt and he also felt his release coming and didn't bother holding back as he bottomed out inside her.
Kushina let out a comfortable groan as she felt his thick baby batter filling up her insides but she knew this was far from over as she felt his hardened member still as hard as a bat inside her cave...
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Kushina was on all fours as Itsuki railed her from behind making her moan out loud. Itsuki seeing her swaying tits couldn't help but reach out and squeeze them.
Kushina felt like she was an animal who was being bred. The way Itsuki pressed his chest against her back while milking her titts, while his hips hammered into her plush ass causing flesh slapping noise.
Itsuki leaned back a little and pulled Kushina to his chest by her tits and tugged on her nipples causing her to squirt milk like a cow.
Itsuki let go of her tits causing her to fall onto the bed with her ass raised. Itsuki seeing the ripples in her ass each time his thighs smacked against them couldn't help but give them a few tight smacks causing Kushina to moan into the pillow.
Itsuki just pressed her body underneath his as he started jackhammering her pussy with slow and heavy thrusts while sucking on her neck and shoulders.
And eventually, he bottomed out inside her sticky pussy with a groan prompting Kushina
to let out a loud moan...
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In their lustful haze, they did it numerous times in different parts of the room, painting it in their passion.
Currently, Kushina was lying on top of Itsuki coiling her tongue with his for a sloppy kiss while he held onto her ass and pounded her runny cunt with fast and heavy motions causing her body to tremble.
"Ummph~" Kushina's moans were stopped due to her mouth being sealed as she felt him speed up causing her to grind her hips down to his upward thrust.
With one final thrust, Itsuki sealed himself deep inside of her and released all of his cum inside of her already-filled pussy causing Kushina's body to go slack as Itsuki rode out his orgasm with gentle thrusts until he finally removed himself from her abused pussy with an audible plop causing a lot of white stuff to flow out.
Itsuki looked at the sweaty woman panting on top of him and he couldn't help but lean forward to give her a kiss on the forehead causing Kushina to lean more into his embrace.
They both lay there in each other's arms in the aftermath of their passion showering each other with occasional kisses and gentle caresses...
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"Itsuki-kun... nee-san is too tired ~"
"Stop~... hehe ~you naughty little boy ~" A raven-haired woman was mumbling in her sleep while having a silly smile on her face.
She seemed to be having a good dream...
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Bonk me up
Bonk me away
Excaalibonk!!
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This chapter is 3K words = 3 chapters
Also ages for the character I checked fandom and decided on the ages.
Considering that right now is 10 years before canon. Ok 👍🏻 we are going to take that.
Itsuki-20
Kushina-22 to 23
Mikoto -23 to 24
Kurenai -15
Kakashi -14
Yugao - 10 I guess
Anko - 12
Guy - 15
Ayame - 5 ( FBI ? )
Teuchi - 31
Hiruzen - 54
Nagato - 20 to 23
Tsunade - 39
Ok, the rest of the characters you can somewhat guess right?
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