Entropy of the Dead 9

* * * The Synopsis will be in the Glossary* * * (Haven't decided if I'm actually going to add R-18 and excessive gore scenes or not! And yes, the image is AI-generated. I'm terribly untalented at drawing and I'm too broke to commission art, but I promise I will in the future when I can afford it.) * * * This is my first novel and I don’t expect it to be good since I’m just starting out. So please read my story and critique it. I want to know what I did or am doing wrong and how to improve or what to learn from it. I am well aware that my story would never get close to a 9 since I’m new at this, but I’m at the very least aiming for a 7 or a 7.5 rating. I am more than willing to accept criticism, and I understand if I wrote something stupid, but please don’t give me an overly negative attitude about it. * * * – 「Authors Notes」 - I will do what I can to keep chapters around or over 1500 words per chapter. - Since I am new and have a job, I will do my best to hopefully complete at least one chapter within two or three weeks until I improve and can hopefully reduce that time. - I have many ideas and concepts that I really like and I also drew inspiration from several games and other media. I will do my best to use, build on, add to, and or reference these things so please tell me if I’m just blatantly plagiarizing them. I want to write my own story without simply reinventing the wheel, rewriting a copy and paste, or stealing someone else's idea. - As a new writer, I will definitely make a lot of mistakes, so I would definitely appreciate it if you could help point out if and when I make grammatical errors, contradictions, and retcon things. I will try to go back and fix my mistakes on my own, but I would appreciate it if you could spot me on them as well. - I plan on having a semi big cast of characters. I understand that multiple POVs can be annoying and ruin the story or pacing or both so I promise to do my best to focus solely on my big 3. - Though I want to, I don’t know how to properly write adult scenes that will fit well with certain moods I’m putting the characters in. I don’t want to add a needless or mindless adult scene just because two people finally decided they like each other or something. I’ll see if I can capture the mood properly. Please judge me if I don’t, though. - Since one of my characters is supposed to know everything that's happening within the story I'll do my best to make him speak as naturally about these things as possible. - One thing I really liked about a popular anime I liked was how they included bits of information, such as abilities, unique equipment, enemies, locations, and other details about the world before and after the short commercial break so I plan on trying to have some short notes/information about the world at the bottom of every chapter. * * * Thank you for choosing to read my novel, I hope it's something you look forward to reading * * *