DaoistEdrian

This is the story of Astra Solari, who died at a very young age. After his death, Astra travels alongside the stars for millions of years. However, Astra yearns for a life befitting his desires.

Finally, the goddess of creation grants him the wish he so desired: a second chance to live in a world brimming with unknown beings and beautiful lands, only found within the novels he once read.

Will he be able to survive in this unknown world?

Author: Also if possible please leave an opinion on my novel, Thank you.

Philippines

ohh I like it already nah agad at excited na ako sa kwento ng buhay ni astro kung piano siya mag simula ulit🥰

For a 15 year old like you to write this, it seems pretty good.Aslo it has potential so keep going

Hello everyone, please leave a comment if you like the story or not. Even if it's bad, i will accept it, and it may help me to improve my writing.

you're so good about this stuff men! love it! [img=strong]

I'm gonna be honest it's kinda bad but not bad.but the story is catching and it's unique.the first chapter was interesting too, and the latest chapter, i was kinda hype ngl.I'm waiting for chap 5, shadow monarch vs that demon Vexrac.

I don't have any other things to say.it's good that's all. Just continue writing.

Positive: Good pacing, good use of tone, memorable character names, alright use of sense writing.

Things to improve: Spacing… it’s very important. Most readers will find this type of writing cluttered, and sometimes, it becomes a bit difficult to really understand your story’s core concepts.

Characters need stable and unstable attributes, it’s only been three chapters but remember it for the future.

Grammar needs a bit of work, but if you take your time and edit each chapter properly, it shouldn’t be an issue.

I have seen this before, and it looks horrible too, it was the same grammar as the sunyguy, but it looks like you re edited everything.

Nice story though you gotta improve your grammar. it's horrible, gotta read it twice so I can understand it. Use an app or something , you got a decent story here so improve how you write it.

I, Who Will Rule The World

Table of contents

Volume 1

Chapter 1 - Second Chance