NoLongerExists

Warning for new readers who don't like a certain troupe. The writer decided to include other Reincarnated people to show up

i liked it at the begin in till the other reborn people started to show up             
                                                                    

it's good so far, keep up the good work. However, there are a few bits I'm confused on and would like to criticise:

1. Have you forgotten he has uchiha and uzumaki blood. Firstly, you gave him low chakra (compared to others his age) when uzumaki usually have more. Doesn't have to be Naruto level as he is jinchuriki, but should not be lower than other kids. Then you made him choose fire affinity with chakra paper (which is weird because the paper only checks affinity not picks one), when in the second chapter (I think), he got it automatically with his uchiha bloodline.

2. Why is he being so naive. He has called the Hokage 'gramps' out of nowhere. This isn't fairy tail and Hiruzen is not Makarav. Then there is just the instant anger whenever Naruto is insulted. It came out of nowhere. Sure you may be a Naruto fan (like me) but you should understand that Naruto is hated for a long time, no need for shin to get so excessively emotional. Finally, meeting Itachi. The question at the end of that chapter about power and losing important people is extremely sus.

Just want to state that it is a good novel and please continue writing. This was only to point some stuff I would like to address.

By the way, considering Hanabi is joining early, does that mean she will be romantic interest?

I'll return later when there's more chapters

So many bad things in this I can't even remember them all.

Most annoying is the inconsistency. In Gamer type stories this is the most annoying thing ever. One day his taijutsu is level 4 then it levels up and its level 3...The same with chakra control and some others...

Another thing that I see as a red flag is MC's age. He is 8 years old. As a gamer...This fic will only have the MC be a child or the author will severely nerf and stun his growth. I dislike child MCs. Even the 12-14 years olds in the OG Naruto are a bit annoying, but at least they don't act like adults. Having an 8 yo act like and adult and no one seeing anything wrong with it is so bad...

Another very bad point in this is the awareness of ninja in Konoha. The MC does a lot of stupid things that are never noticed. This is including that he killed a dude right after making a huge commotion. And no one batted an eye.

Jesus bro this is painful to read on mobile please break up the paragraphs into more readable chunks. I would have loved to actually read the book without my eyes commuting sewer slide. 4/10 just for that fact. If it’s fixed then it would be higher. 

I like how the story is goin so far and can't wait for the next one. Just try using the system less and have more of the actually story, all of the best Gamer fics ive read include less system and more story .Have a good day Author-san!

please author, we need more. Please tell me you haven't dropped, I really like your idea of adding other reincarnators, and I'm very hyped up for dragon sage. Also, I was of the impression that his uzumaki bloodline would become very secondary and I'm glad that you did more with it

author have you dropped this story? Tell us, as we are awaiting for 2 weeks for updates.

Love Your work Auth and glad that this story is back up and running again. Hopefully it stays like this for a long while. . . . . . . . . . .


MMMOOORRReeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeEEEEE AAAUUTTTTHHHOORRRR-San 
Love you author-san!!!!! :0

Just write the story in paragraphs writing it in lines will make it less presentable .

Just the Author here to shamelessly give himself five Stars!
Hope you enjoy the story and feel free to comment on any questions you have, I'll do my best to answer all of them. 

What was this fic? Why’d you delete it? I hate when authors delete fics, it won’t show up to others if you just change the title, so just drop it, deleting it is so annoying, all that effort you made gone, why leave nothing to tell what the story was?

Writing Quality                1
Stability of Updates        2
Story Development         2
Character Design             3
World Background          1


Niente male davvero non vedo l'ora di come si metterà in pari con la serie e vorrei più interazioni con hanabi in un momento ho pensato a shin con naruto con hinata che li spia ed hanabi che fa altrettanto con la differenza che hanabi non si facesse scoprire peccato che shin sia diventato un sensore sarebbe stato divertente da vedere

Hella plot holes, inconsistent writing,author forgets that mc has skills and to top it off there are other transmigrstors later on

for anyone reading the reviews, just read yami kage... the author basically copied his story from yami kage except for the fact other reincarnated people are in naruto for some odd reason

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To Be Continued......