Aug_ust15

[MATURE CONTENT] R18

She leaned close, offering him a lop-sided smile as she slipped a hand under his shirt to feel those taut muscles ripping in anticipation.

His eyes bored into hers squarely,

But, she could see his throat, bob up and down clearly.

It made her smile, as dark swirls of smoke that seeped continuously out of her body, enveloped them.

"It is just a question," she smiled, "do you want me, or not?" she said, sounding like the deal was nothing big.

Pierre continued to stare at her.

What was he supposed to say?

His body wanted her,

His own self needed her.

But, how could he?

When the Devil was inside him.

The person who was supposedly her Father.

His voice came out choked when he said, "Cleopatra, why can't you just go straight to the point without protocols?" 

Her head tilted to the side as she leaned all the more closer. 

So close, her breath was on his lips, and he could taste what those luscious lips were like if he moved forward, 

Only a little.

But, the person inside of him was highly protesting, growling harshly inside his skin as he felt the resolve of his host weakening.

The Devil committed countless of absurd sins,

Yet, how could he defile a Daughter he had never had the chance to get close to?

"I don't remember adding any protocol to having sex, Pierre," her languid whisper pulled him back from his thoughts, her rough-soft voice soothing, "you know a Lady does nothing without permission-"

Pierre blinked through his daze.

She had been anything but a Lady ever since he met her!

Doing everything without permission!

"-but since your answer is obviously a 'no'," she turned away, "you know where to..."

"Cleopatra!" He groaned, pulling her down harshly on him, just as she wanted to leave.

Even the Devil was getting dazed.

This Daughter of his was being a Dare-'Devil', toying with fire.

But, who could he blame?

Like Father,

Like Daughter.

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Will the Devil really commit this inauspicious sin with a Daughter, who didn't even know he existed in her personal life?

Join this wonderful journey to find out the mysteries lurking behind the guise.

Read on to find out what happens.

Love lots

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Overall, the world setting in these 5 chapters that I have read there appears to be a blend of reality and fantasy, with elements of a supernatural realm coexisting with the modern world. The inclusion of characters with supernatural abilities, such as the ability to materialize, adds an interesting and unique aspect to the world building. However, it would be helpful to have more explicit explanations and descriptions of the rules and limitations of these abilities in order to fully understand and become immersed in this world.

The characters in these chapters, particularly Maya and Amiri, are complex and multifaceted, with their own motivations, desires, and flaws. The portrayal conflicts and dynamics between these characters, such as the strained relationship between Maya and Amiri, add depth and realism to their personalities. However, it would be beneficial to provide more background and context for these characters in order to fully understand their actions and motivations.

Overall, the grammar and writing in these chapters is generally clear and easy to follow. However, there are some instances of awkward phrasing and repetitive use of certain words or phrases that could be improved upon.

One constructive criticism would be to focus on developing a clear and consistent narrative structure, including a clear plot and character arc. While there are hints of conflicts and plot points introduced in these chapters, they often feel disconnected and disjointed, leaving the reader feeling uncertain about the direction of the story. It would also be helpful to provide more context and explanation for the various events and characters introduced, as they can feel confusing and confusing without proper setup and development.

From a psychological perspective, the portrayal struggles and conflicts of the characters, particularly Maya's internal turmoil and her strained relationship with her father, suggest deeper underlying issues and past traumas that could be explored in greater depth. The portrayal behaviors and actions of the characters, such as Maya's arrogance and hot temper, could also be further analyzed and examined in terms of their psychological motivations and impacts on the characters' relationships and personal growth.

Overall, these 5 chapters that I have read show promise in terms of world building and character development. With some improvements in grammar and more context and depth in the interactions between the characters, the story has the potential to be engaging and captivating. I hope you keep up the good work and upload constantly which is one of the most important things which I'm glad you have many chapters uploaded to support that.

I love it and, but it needs more work on the story give details on what the characters are wearing and where they stand next to each other, if there are emotions like love or sadness.  what I felt as I am reading that the main character is blunt and shows anger, but the rest of the characters just gives me mute emotions like they don't really have any.    I so wanted there to be emotions because it calls READ me and enjoy me, I can show you more than anything in the whole world, other than not many emotions. it was very good and i must have more 

I must say, this novel is quite intriguing...it's superb. I was immersed in that little world of maya, and now I am waiting for updates from the author. I highly recommend this book as I am sure many people would like it

Your book was alright, I guess, but the one thing I didn't like about it was the lack of vocabulary. You seemed to be using a lot of the same phrases repeatedly. However, other from that, I believe it was a fine book.

Seal The Heart

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