Aight bruhs time to lay this on for real.
That hurt to write. Anyway… I'll try to keep this a bit consistent.
Reason for stopping.
What to expect
Spoilers to not cuck you guys. Why? I still want to keep this story as public domain (scribblehub has a thing to show this). Reasons are my own. So, might as well tell you guys here. No eta as when the rewrite will come out.
1:
Turns out that writing in first person is a bitch for me. Third flows out much easier. I managed to write one scene, at 1300 words, during this entire time from when the last chapter came out for this story. In comparison, I have written 3-4 chapters, each at around 2-3k for 2 other stories each during the same time. With another 7 on my dump project.
2:
I will keep this story up until I finish a rewrite in 3rd POv. I'll post another announcement and then take it down after a week. It will have the same cover so it can be easily identified. On the fence of changing the name. I will definitely rework the synopsis. I have been told that it doesn't convey enough as to what the story is about. Especially with sites with limited tags, it sounds far too generic.
I did have an outline already fully made for the first "arc" thing, book, part. Idk. It got an ending. And, a general outline as what the story as a whole would end.
Better interaction with readers across platforms.
3:
For RoyalRoad and Webnovel, this was going to go the route of army building and light kingdom building. Multiple POV's was a given from the start and would have continued throughout to explain things about the world to the reader while keeping the MC in the dark. Other main relevant tags would have been the "evil religion", "demons", and "priests" descriptions. Overall, it would have gone the route of the MC staying somewhat true to the reason why he was summoned. Being originally the healer/holy user of his classmates. And ultimately going against his classmates because misunderstandings. Including why the system and not the world/gods was changing things for a "balancing" by routing heroes. This was cleared a bit on a RoyalRoad comment.
Webnovel specifically, in chapter 3 there was a brief dialogue at the beginning (between two entities) that wasn't conveyed that great with the lack of italics. They are important for the grand scheme of things. I'll keep in mind for future formatting for the site.
Novel35, fuck you. That is all.
With that out of the way, spoilers.
Immediate spoilers:
What would have happened was Gnome=gems. Gems=enchantments. Easy way to introduce legitimate magic and not just skills to the MC. At the end of the village attack another classmate would have made an appearance with the context that something went very wrong during the transfer of the heroes. Instead of being taken through a portal like our MC she was reincarnated into an already dead body. She would have been the air superiority
The [Last Will] was originally a throwaway but, I got attached to him. I was going to somehow turn him into the tank of the group. If it wasn't conveyed clearly, he took the brunt of an undead attack to protect the bloodied group. It was why his aura worked that way and why he was so mangled.
The reason for the book cover and the forest being that way was to hint at how the MC's evolution would have moved towards. From an ash-based fire attacks of his first evolution into an [ash ghoul] to eventually a non-corporeal nightmare creature.
arc outline spoilers (rambly so it won't make much sense):
After the village he would have formed a party with the harpy. Find out through her that the fog wall changes destinations. Which is why there was no signs of the bloodied groups struggle.
Second venture after the info dump was to be a lone road with a village of adventurers that quit the life and settled down. Along with the start of the religion aspect. A fight with a necromancer trying to enslave the MC and his friends. Adventurers thinking it was the MC instead. Village priest fight and a show how the MC isn't affected by holy/light spells. Team up between adventurers and MC to fight Necro.
As MC and group leave the Chapter 3 voices return saying that they should test him. Instead of walking through the wall and making their way into the forest, they get taken to a random location.
This would lead into the end of the first part of the arc. The meat of the story would start here. The three get taken to a jungle like area with a major town and a dungeon nearby. They befriend the local monster population. Still hadn't decided if I should go generic goblins or go kobolds. Who are being hunted occasionally by the human settlement nearby.
A brief intermission to show a demon and how legitimately strong they are. I always hated how beginner adventurers could take them out in other stories. He would have been attacking a nobles house without a care in the world. Curb stomping the entire guard corps.
This section would have revolved with getting closer to the goblin/kobolds for information and safety. The town getting attacked by the demon and 2 of his abomination/experiments with humans. The citizens intruding on the goblin/kobold village as they run away.
Guards chasing MC team and village away and in the process one of the demon's 2 staying behind to kill stragglers. The MC rerouting the guards to fight the remaining demon's underling since they can't. Split off group fights the main demon. The dungeon is there because that is the goal. To turn it into a spawner for demons by taking over as the owner of the core. Needless to say, the MC gets it in the end and it connects to the forest. Bringing them back. The group gets another member when the dungeon converts one of the abominations.
End would have been another group of unknown voices talking about how its domain had been breached (the two earlier voices and test makers). Finding it entertaining that some of their children (the MC and company) is contributing to "expansion". MC and group are exploiting the undeadness to cheat the system to powerlevel in a flash-forward. Monster village gets integrated with the dungeon and they are living it up and thanking the group for a better land. Last lines would have been the set-up for the Chapter 3 voices and giving his [mana core] either a [oracle] or [seer] designation out of the blue, with a promise of meeting. They liked his performance.