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Ryo, a man who loves to play games more than anything completed his favourite game for the 50th time. But as soon as he completed the game he got struck by lightning and passed out. 

When he next awoke, he found himself in his favourite game [ Nine Realms ].
 
A world where more than a thousand kind of magic exists such as rune magic, blood magic, time magic etc.

What will he do when he finds out that he has been reincarnated as the unluckiest mob ever who has no magic and dies at the very start of the game. 

How is he gonna survive in this forsaken World?

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[ Nine Realms ] is a game which takes place in the world of Aldea.


Aldea is a planet hundred times bigger than Earth.


Our Main character Lance lives on the continent of Reul.


Species that live in the world of Aldea are - 


In the world of Aldea, the mages are divided into 12 groups --


When someone reaches the level of pseudo-elite, pseudo-grandmaster and ruler level mage they can unlock a new kind of magic.


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Will be updated in the future as the storyline progress.


I am a poor author with passable writing skills so please do tell me what mistakes I have made in my novel so I can improve myself like a sincere person that I am. 🤔🤔🤔🥒🥒

First of all, grammar is okay; readable at the very least, though it can be improved more. Sentence structure not the best, it needs more flow. First chapter is an immediate info dump. Yes, we get it. The guy knows the game like the back of his hand. But this is a novel, the main lead knows a lot of the world, but for us readers, it is something new. If you suddenly give us a lot of information, some might feel overwhelmed or might skip through the paragraphs. You could make an auxiliary volume if that helps. You could drop the info little by little, or maybe through character dialogues. While story-wise, it does not seem to be a rare premise so I do hope this does get an interesting turn.  

Author this novel is quite good and has potential please resume the work .

It's short. You haven't updated in a while you could be booted out of first place in the contest so you have to update frequently and if something is going on leave a message or something.

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Table of contents

Volume 1

Chapter 1 - Info about the World