HeroOfWroughtIron

United States

this is not as good as it seems to be at all. World background is a 3 due to being a fanfic. Character design is a 1 due to the reincarnation tag being meaningless. The person who is reincarnated, Brandon has 0 personality show through, and the m.c acts just like a fusion of goku, and kakarot. The memories of Brandon are only used in refence to future events. For all intents and purposes this person does not exist, and the memories of Brandon serve nothing but to give the m.c future knowledge. Brandon is not in control of the body at all. He doesn't have any sway in the m.c personality either. Nothing about Brandon is mentioned aside from the future memories, this is NOT a reincarnation story at all. Story development is a 1, due to the author skipping over everything...and I mean EVERYTHING. for instance the mmc learns the multiform technique at some point from tien, but we do not see this happen. It's offhand mentioned that he learned it from tien, bit the author skipped that part entirely, another example is Gohan training arc with the m.c and piccolo. Its a paragraph long and thats it. The is no detail or depth to it at all. And by far the best example highlighting the authors incompetence, is the training in.the H.T.C (hyperbolic time chamber)
He goes in to learn to control the ozzaru form and uses a powerball to transform. This Is an issue on many fronts. 1 how does he even know how to make a powerball??? It is never explained at all. 2 how does the powerball technique even work in the H.T.C? the technique works by mixing with the upper atmosphere of PLANETS not extra dimensional spaces. Beside those 2 huge continuity issues, the author skips the entire training arc of this part, and sums it up by saying he sated in ozzaru form for MONTHS until he got control.  That is not how the ozzaru form works at all. Let alone that during that time he needs sleep, which requires being calm. Which requires control. Nobody. Nit even a sayian is staying in that form for months on end. The author just doesn't feel like writing an actual story I guess. So they give us a summary, yes a summary of what happened, like a shopping list or a bullet point presentation. The update stability seems awful from the dates on chapters, and there are .any misspelled words is each chapter. If you feel like reading a rushed nonsensical dbz story this is not even that. Don't waste your time. 

I really do like this story it has a good character design and background story on how the character feels. It also has the feel of the character of what they are going through along with the recent loss of family from the character from the memories the original don't remember because of this it goes outside of the normal plot and he accepted he is a clone but not willing to be Goku instead making have his own name so Kakarot!

As the author it’s apparently normal for us to give an automatic five stars so that’s what I am going to do for this fanfic.I hope you all enjoy this and stay tuned.Updates will be slow 

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