nini45000

You will follow Eloise's story which is full of pitfalls and love and you will see how she will succeed in either realising her dream of doing good or becoming a master of evil. the character on the cover does not belong to me. In rewriting

Réunion

There are 2 worlds, the world of demons and the world of humans 


First of all there are 2 types of demons, the demons with horns and the demons without horns, the women are dominant and can reproduce with other women, whether they are demons or humans.


present character:Eloise(main character) Lucy(???) Ella(???)Alana(demon queen) you will discover the rest by reading


Please read the author to the end. This is my private opinion

According to the 2 chapters I have read, I will say my impression - The idea is not bad, the execution is bad.
I would call what you put out raw materials.

What needs to be fixed:
1) We need more descriptions of the environment, characters.

2) Events are happening too fast.

3) In some moments, the characters have no emotions, it feels like robots are talking

4) we (readers) should learn information about the world not from the author's explanations, but it should be presented as an interaction between the characters

Before I started reading your novel, I read another novel, if you just compare it on a ten-point scale, then yours is 2 (and then purely for the idea), and the one I read before is 10

Author, I hope that you will accept my criticism and become better, because as I understand it, this is your first work

I think that the story is verry good i can't wait to see the next chapter and my favorite character is the grabdma she is so funny when she is here i love here so much so continue please

Ohhh my goody I like this story there is so much switch of emotions, in first while I read it I don't sure where the story coming because the scenario are so fast for me when your feeling you get the image what's happening that the time the twist of scenes are change again, it's Make my emotions run about 😅😅😅 but later on it coming better and better.... Love it. keep it up and I wish I can still continue reading the continuetion of this story.... I can't wait for the nect chapters👍👍👍🥰

Ohhhh I love this it's twisting my emotions like it's nothing, especially nearing the latest chapter l don't even know anymore..I just want to update PLEASE!!!😭😭😭😭😭😭

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It's good i like it i really love Jade she is my favorite character hpe to have a new chapter soon[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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The story of the daughter of the demon queen

Table of contents

Volume 1

Chapter 1 - Chapter: explanation