Xiaoli quickly put away her smile, but it was too late.
After Song Tai's eyes stayed on her for a few seconds, he turned his head and asked Xiang Li Jiming, "Do you have any suggestions for this comic?"
"He is just not very solid painter, but the setting and story are very good, and the storytelling is also magnificent. Nowadays, I rarely encounter such an outstanding painter." Li Jiming said his opinion.
"Apart from the painter, what shortcomings does he have?" Song Tai asked.
"More?" Li Jiming scratched his head, unable to remember for a moment.
Song Tai looked at Xiaoli again, "I heard that you said in the serialization meeting that this name has shortcomings?"
"Huh?" Xiaoli opened her mouth slightly, her mind was a little dazed, and she subconsciously said, "Yeah."
"What shortcomings, let me listen, except for the painter." Song Tai asked.
"Disadvantages..." Xiaoli showed sweat on her forehead, and her throat was a little dry. "Yes. Of course he is not a painter. In fact, although his painter is not solid, the comics with good painters and good shots are not necessarily good comics. This one The biggest problem with the work is the story."
"Story?" Song Tai was flabbergasted, he had never thought that it would be a story.
"This story is very new, how could there be a problem? You have the problem, right?" Li Jiming sneered.
"Of course there is a problem!" Xiaoli couldn't stand Li Jiming's ridicule, and regardless of Yan Fei's wink, she said without hesitation, "The story of this comic is too scattered!"
"what?"
"Too scattered?"
"What is too scattered?"
The people in the house looked confused, and even Yan Fei didn't know what Xiaoli was thinking.
"Too scattered? How can there be such a shortcoming?" Li Jiming sneered.
Song Tai's gaze swept over the name in the first episode, "I think the story is okay, what's the matter with you too scattered?"
Xiaoli knows that everyone else is watching her, and she knows that she has no room to look back, she can only bite the bullet and say: "President, you will know after reading the three things in one go."
Song Tai was skeptical and read the contents of the three episodes again.
From the second episode, the protagonist left the underworld to search for the cause of the puppet, but he never found it. At the end of the second episode, he returned to Huangquan again.
Because of the previous experience, the number of guards in Huangquan has doubled, and the souls have entered Huangquan one after another.
Just when he thought that the last time the puppet was just an accident, he suddenly noticed that the souls at the back had once again formed a puppet, tried to swallow the souls nearby, and walked towards the small official of the underworld. The battle was about to start.
The third chapter has nothing to do with the plot and is not complicated.
"Where...Where is it?" After Song Tai finished reading, he looked up at Xiaoli again.
Li Jiming saw the tangled face of Xiaoli, the corners of his mouth were slightly tilted, and he smiled inadvertently.
"Scattered... the structure of its story." Xiaoli said hesitated, "the structure of its story has a problem."
"What you said is too false, right? What can be the problem with the structure?" Li Jiming asked rhetorically.
"Brother Li, you are also an old editor, so you should be clear. The reason why the first episode has more than 50 pages is to use a small climax to attract readers, and then the story will slowly unfold. And for the fictional world Background, the first chapter has to be involved, and from the second chapter, it must be expanded, right?"
"That's right. Ahem... Teacher Fat Dahai, also painted like this, is there any problem?" Li Jiming asked.
"Yes. The name of "Ghost Power" has been drawn to three chapters. I ask you, what is the connection between the title of the book and the story? The three words don't even explain what "Ghost Power" is. Does the structure remain? I remember Shen Shen In the first chapter, the teacher pointed out the origin of the title of "Y's", and the following story has been around Iori and Yigui. But "Ghost", so far, is more than exciting, but it is easy for readers to feel Confused." Xiaoli felt confident at the end of her speech.
Li Jiming was a little at a loss, hesitated, and didn't know how to explain it for a while.
Song Tai nodded slightly, "There is such a point. The first three passages really emphasize the plot too much, but ignore the most important theme of the comics. Old Li, you shouldn't make this mistake."
"I was not careful... this situation will never happen next time." Li Jiming explained quickly.
He only cares about whether the story is wonderful, but forgets the layout of the plot.
"Is that right? The teacher'Fat Dahai' is very thoughtful, and the storytelling is good, but the story needs to be refined. After all, he is also a powerful newcomer in "NewWorld". It's just other..." Song Tai knocked twice. At the table, he suddenly handed her name to Xiaoli, "Xiaoli, you and "Ghost Shishi" in the future, after all, you are all young people, and it is not easy to have a generation gap. By the way, let him change his pen name. Lao Li, you too Take time to improve your business level."
"what?"
"Eh?"
Li Jiming and Xiaoli screamed in surprise.
Things reversed somewhat quickly.
"Xiao Li, you have to follow along and try to bring out another "Y's". Song Ren, quickly find the voice actress's audio and send it to Teacher Shen." Song Tai waved his hand and motioned everyone to leave.
Xiaoli was relieved when she left the office.
Li Jiming snorted coldly, did not speak much, went down the stairs angrily, and Song Ren also entered the elevator.
Xiaoli kept holding Yan Fei's hand tightly, and came to rest in the reception room.
"Sister Yan, Teacher Shen really saved my life." After Xiaoli sat down, she immediately opened the chatterbox.
"Teacher Shen Xin?" Yan Fei guessed.
"Who else is there besides him?" Xiaoli nodded repeatedly.
"He hasn't seen this name, right?"
"No. But the words I said ~www.mtlnovel.com~ are his comments on the short story of'Fat Dahai'. I just used it to apply it, and as a result, his novel really had a problem with the structure. Sister Yan , I want to make time to visit Teacher Shen, can I?"
Yan Fei was taken aback first, and then found that Xiaoli's hands on the table were shaking. She can understand Xiaoli's current mood. This newcomer is expected by many people. In case she doesn't get up in the end, Xiaoli, the editor in charge, must take the lead.
If Shen Xin can give one or two suggestions, maybe it can give Xiaoli some ideas or confidence.
"right now?"
"When will he have time?" Xiaoli looked forward to it.
"It's the weekend, right? He should be busy drawing the manuscript now, and he doesn't have much time. By the way, don't you go and hand over with Li Jiming?" Yan Fei asked.
"I'll go now. He mocked me like that, now it's time for me to fight back. I just like to see him angry and bullied." Xiaoli said with a smile.
Yan Fei tapped Xiaoli's forehead, "Okay, don't make him anxious."
"Yes!" Xiaoli twisted her neck and looked excited.
This week, Xiaoli and Li Jiming completed the handover of work. At the same time, she also saw "Fat Dahai". As expected, she was a little Zhengtai, named Zhou Yang, who was a little shy in personality and a good talker. .
At first, Xiaoli thought Zhou Yang was difficult to contact, but after the exchange, she knew that apart from being a little shy, there was nothing special about him, and he was also quite talkative. Other than that, Xiaoli was the most surprised. , That is, he has some clothes, many of which are women's clothing.
Isn't he a big lady in women's clothing?
Noting Xiaoli's bright eyes, and even the corners of her mouth, Zhou Yang immediately declared that these were not his things, but Xiaoli didn't believe it at all.