dvces

Hi, Mandatory Author Review here....
Ahem, Well hello, Welcome to a naughty corner of my my mind... Just kidding.. 
Actually, hello, Im glad you stopped by to read my book, This is the first time that I've ever written something like this, so expect it to be a little rough on the edges. I have though, READ an absurd amount of novels similar.
I loved this genre, I think its fun to get lost in these types of worlds, and I hope if you are reading this that you also get lost in the world I will create.

MC; Dante, a confident, alpha male. Cunning, Naive, Joyful, and Evil all at the same time. An enigma. 
He will meet many beauties, go to many exotic places, and get hunted down by everyone...

Its a beautiful world of cultivaton and fantasy, scaled up few sizes, but just big enough to write a novel around it. 

This is a story of tradgedy, a story of triumph, a story of pain, a story of love, and a story of the PEERLESS.

dvces

First I'll talk about the author's writing quality. I think the author did well, but can improve. There a lot of paragraphs that uses commas, whereas it should be place with a period. For the author I'll do an in-comment examples of what I'm talking about. Also, I did find a few run-on sentences, and for that I have a tip for the author. Which is for he/her to read out loud any big paragraphs, and if the author read without stopping or take a breath. The author should put a period or a comma depending on the type of sentence. 

Onward to story development, and world background, I felt like the author work on these two topic more than the other. At the beginning it's was all about describing the setting and what took place. But the author did bring in characters soon into the scene, but with...*Ahem, good description regarding the female lead appearance. Then later the introduction of the male lead, I assume Dante is the male lead for now, unless I' mistaken. In regard to him. I don't think I hate or like his character. He kind of like a loudmouth, but someone who can keep quiet when situation calls for it. In this case it does. As the story is still in progress, I think more chapters will better improve his image. So a last few words of encouragement for the author: You're doing great! Keep up the good work. 



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Good storyline hope the author keep it Consistent !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Added to my library, the novel itself is pretty catching, I like it and the author has a great imagination, I felt it. The only thing that I noticed was that there are a few parts where you directly tell me what's happening, how the character is feeling rather than actually showing it. But overall this is a good novel, keep up the great job. 

Monarch of the Divine