CV_LaPorte

Physically and mentally injured all his life, Walter's only hope was in the NFL players he would see on the TV, inspired to be great and play with them but wasn't capable. Now with this new chance what will he do?

You could maybe do 2 positions wr and cb so he could be a 2-way player and be good on both sides of the ball 

Nice I was wondering when updates would come. If it's going to be a system you should make it like a 2K/Madden system where he can up his attributes through credits received from playing, and get badges and X-factors. That would be pretty cool, and I've only seen one person who did it before. 

I think if you go the system way, maybe incorporate trash talking as the basic requirement for him to get skill points 👉  to upgrade his Stats, the more upset the person he is guarding and thrown of their game he could get a X times multiplier on how well he does it, like he frustrated a player to get a dropped pass = .50, a crossover with him braking their ankles he gets to times x2 = 1 skill point, playing  a playoff game all points x.50 play two positions x2 for the day... etc

I’m conflicted on what position Walter would be. I just hate the idea of QB. Ideas?

If you haven't noticed I haven't written in a while. I started with this whole idea when I was 15-16 years old and a month ago I reread the whole thing and just cringed and hated every part so I've decided to delete everything, and rewrite the story.   (I did save the past work as a reference on word so its not completely gone.)


Walter in a different field position possibly, and maybe even a system. I swear I won't take long to start reposting. 


I would appreciate ideas in the comments, or literally anything.


I'm conflicted on what position Walter should be, and I hate the idea to put him as QB, ideas?


Has potential
Within first 9 chapters Author has 4 year time skip then uses a flash back to explain something instead of having the event happen then a time skip
Mc wants to play basketball in first life but disregards that and starts playing American football which author doesn't make clear is American and not every other countries form of football which they call soccer
Mc is around 30 to 40, I get to fit in he hangs around with people his own age from Rebirth but I find that perspective difficult to believe. Imagine if you went back to 7 years old the things that interest children wouldn't interest you dolls toys etc
Mc does rediculous training at 7 that wouldn't be physically possible 
Expect readers to believe that a 7 year old or an 11 year old is more physically fit than his father
Lack of slice of life with family growing up after being reborn
Doesn't seem to do additional learning. Mc has intelligence of an ***** he would already be able to do multiplications 
No evidence  of investment in 4 years even if its only with pocket money for cutting the grass etc
Why no paper round for mc, mc likes running run while in the round/ rounds

cant wait to read more but I think it would have been better to skip to highschool since thats when everybody really be paying attention 👑👑

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All American Dream

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Volume 1

Chapter 1 - o. redo