Carciphones_02

This story is deleted due to cringeness. If I ever meet my past self, I will pour cement inside their mouth, and slam their face on the road.

United States

writing quality: 3 star
story development: 5 star
character design: 5 star
updating stability: 2 star
world background: 5 star

as usual, my writing is not bad, but it's not perfect either. I kind off like it.
the development and character design is pretty good so far. 
the updating stability is meh... but I will not abandon it unless I die. 
world background is yay!

new novel.

BTW.. I draw the cover and edited it myself. praise me.

I love the book so far. Please continue writing it.  I love the book so far. Please continue writing it.  I love the book so far. Please continue writing it.  I love the book so far. Please continue writing it.  

This is a novel which is for 18 up. No children allowed, Keep it out of children's reach. But ey! This is exciting! Too bad she chose the masochist system, The tables will turn around if she chose the other one. Which made the novel interesting and I became perverted. Did I say perverted? no, Not really.

The story so far is intresring i get the rivalry thing its very rated R which im bot complaining about.

Try to make Your sentences Flow more, be discriptive of your mc’s thoughts almost like your in their shoes(if that makes sense)

Keep it up its really good also love the cover btw. 

-dede 


delete due to cringeness