Pen Protectors The Family ( REVIEW )
Hello Guys I hope y'all enjoyed The Family; I started writing in in the first quarter of December of 2021 I just wanted to get it out; like everything I do I'm completely honest with myself I'm gonna list the 2 things I did wrong in the arc & 2 things I feel I did right; also I have to tell you guys something really important by the end of this review it's nothing big but it does have something to do with Pen Protectors & it's future for this year; Relax I'm not ending the series yet I have so many stories I want want to tell but I will talk about that at the end of this review
2 THINGS I DID WRONG
Not enough build up= this arc was difficult to write because I had to focus on Kanye Lupe & Rodrigo Lopez; i could have built up the suspense a little better putting both of these guys in danger as well as the story but rushed things a lot in this arc I just feel like like the build up was there but it wasn't good enough.
Drama between Rodrigo & Lupe = I intended to have more drama between Lupe & Rodrigo but I rushed the chapters for to get to the action; it was really supposed to be more comedy then anything just to lighten up the mood but I was in game mode for this arc didn't really get around to it.
2 THINGS I DID RIGHT
Dialogue= I think I did an exceptional job with the dialogue in this arc as far as Dialogue goes,I feel like I've gotten better with characters & character development I feel like dialogue is a big part in a character; it can either make them are break them & I feel like I have gotten Better in that area.
2 . putting Lupe in Danger= I wouldn't say I did a great job of Putting Lupe in Danger but I'm getting the better; it the Hot Air balloon Chapter I think that is the kinda suspense I want to put the audience in when Curena had to fight to protect Lupe & even she was in trouble at some point I enjoyed writing that seen the most out of this whole arc.
Now that that's out of the way I want to explain why I rushed this arc I'm in the military & I have some Trainng to do I will gone for 17 weeks I will return on August 4th God Willing; & I will write the entire second arc in August; I don't prefer doing it like that & it is going to be a challenge but I got to get it out & I will; HOWEVER!!!!!!!!!!!! I Will drop Chapter 1 on Wendesday to let you know who will be the next villain for Kanye Lupe; heads up this will probably be one of the darkest arcs I will ever write ONE OF THEM !!!!!!!! & I will have plenty of time to think about the characters & the plot so be on the look out 1st Chapters are always 2000 words are more; so after this 1st chapter Wendesday see you guys in August & God bless y'all.
END OF REVIEW FOR THE FAMILY