mel0n

United States

Good fun story here. The protagonist is taken from his mundane everyday life and wakes up in a strange new world with mysterious powers. The author writes extremely well and effortlessly establishes the rules of his world. He also has a good sense of humor which is littered throughout his writing. Solid opening to the story. This one has potential to go far. 

"JD goes through the motions of every day life, wishing that he could make his nerdy dreams become reality. One night as he goes to sleep, he finds himself in what he believes is just a normal dream, but soon realizes that he can't wake up to his reality. The thing that shocks him the most after this revelation, is that he's taken the form of a small demon named Rokene. After realizing that this new reality has become his own, he also finds that he has a system similar to that of what you find in video games, and it begins to explain to him that his objective in this new world is to become the god of not only the demon race, but of every existence in this world."
It's a good novel if you give it a try 

I found myself reading more and more of it. I was engaged in the story, which is very important to me as a reader. I think you absolutely killed it! I recommend grammar errors, they all happen, but it's ok! That's all I have to say. Good luck with future writing projects! 

A story with  good narrations! Descriptions were vivid and enjoyed the ride. Try be metaphoric sometimes on descriptions and the flow will be better. I say your story was awesome based on what I read. The character was likable and it was an epic read!

Hey yall, i know that it seems as if every author leaves a review for their own book, but I actually understand why now. This is my very first novel, and I know that not everyone will enjoy it, but it’s something that I’m trying to have fun with. If you enjoy it, please leave a review and encourage me to keep going. If you don’t enjoy it, then still leave a review. If you say something mean, I won’t delete it. It might hurt my feelings, but I’ll at least try to view it as constructive criticism. Now if there is nothing constructing that I can gleam from it though, then i guess you can go **** yourself :) I hope you all enjoy and follow Rokene as he becomes the surpreme demon ruler!

keep up great work i hope we will get more chapters il be weithing  this novel goes great with som music that was i listening during reading.

Hmmmm how do i say this its not the best but Hes a demon and has the power to be a rulEr and It has comedy and he can understand the truth of steong Kill the weak so i would say that this has a lot of potential but you just have to implant it in the story. keep woRking

Supreme Demon Lord