NickEND

United States

I DONT UNDERSTAND, IS THIS THE ACTUAL CHAPTER OR NAH?


1st: Needs an introduction. You don't drop out new terms like zeus pooping out new kids. 
2: Some grammar errors, but overall decent
3: some weird punctuation here and there.
4: Some ideas should be extended
Good start. If you feel like you don't like the story and don't feel confident, ask a friend to beta-read. There are some other smaller issues but my webnovel app keeps crashing when I leave reviews and comments so i'll keep it short. Great start tho

Prototype: DO NOT READ

Table of contents

Volume 1

Chapter 1 - my dumbass went and copy pasted the whole thing into the title HAHAHAHA no wonder it was taking up the whole screen.