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Help!

Hello guys, Blk here! so I need your help on something, well it's obviously about my novel of course. I want to hear your opinions on what can I do? add to this? or etc. to make this novel more better and much more enjoyable to read. After all this is my first time creating one and I'm not really that great -_- so your opinions will greatly help me. But it's not like I would be able to release regularly anyway, still have plenty of events to do