At last, please refer to The Chicago Manual of Style to correct improperly used punctuation in the target text.
Replace colons with commas for punctuation in dialogues.
Change all the present tense to past tense, except for words in double quotes.
Upon hearing these words, a chorus of snickers echoed from around.
Xue An's heart stirred slightly as he lifted his head to look and saw Di Yuanlong on the high platform, looking over here with a smug expression.
Xue An understood that this must have been his doing and couldn't help but laugh.
Thinking that he could intimidate with such clumsy tactics, it was clear how petty-minded Di Yuanlong truly was.
Yet, when Di Yuanlong saw Xue An's laughter, he was taken aback.
Indeed, it was he who had arranged for the guard, intending to use this method to suppress Xue An, to make him realize who was the boss in the Tian Zhao Star Domain.
But he hadn't expected Xue An not to show any sign of annoyance; instead, he was smiling.
