TNT_Subho99

A guy finds himself in the void.... meets god..... gets his wishes and gets reincarnated in highschool DXD. OC will be anti-hero not someone naive.

I don't own any characters except the OC. Everything else belongs to Ichiei Ishibumi.

India

Instant mastery always, and I mean always, make the story boring.

why so mixed up markings? "" for conversation '' for thought is THE standard and anything other than those are retarded

The wishes look good. Not like some novels where MC asks for some weak abilities. I mean who wouldn't ask for strong powers when reincarnating into a fictional world where you can be killed. So good wishes there author. 

Firstly I want to declare that I don't own anything except the OC. Every other character belongs to the original creator/owner.


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??? : Where am I?? How long I have been here?? I can remember everything from my previous life clearly, but no matter how much I try I cannot remember my name.


GOD/SUPREME BEING: How did a soul get here? That is pretty odd! 


??? : Who is there?? SHOW YOURSELF!!?? 


GOD/SUPREME BEING: I am someone that you people usually and simply call god. But I the SUPREME BEING. But I don't understand how a mortal soul like you survive in the void??


??? : Is this the void? I don't know how I got here, I just know that I died and I ended up here.


GOD/SUPREME BEING: I see, so you somehow escaped from the cycle of reincarnation. Since you have been strangled here for so long without losing your mind I will reincarnate you in a world and give you five wishes.


??? : Really??!!! You can do that?? Can I go to fictional world??


GOD/SUPREME BEING: Ofcourse I can do that who do you think I am??? Yes you can go to fictional world you like so much in your previous life. Now ask away where do u want to go and tell me what your wishes are??


??? : I can ask for anything right?? And I will like to go to the world of Highschool DXD.


GOD/SUPREME BEING: Ok Highschool DXD. You know what knock yourself out with the wishes.


GOD didn't answer but he nodded his head


1) I want the power of Vector Manipulation of ACCELERATOR from A Certain Magical Index.


2) I want a system with a store from which I can buy everything.


3) I want the GATE OF BABYLON as my Sacred Gear including all the treasures of GILGAMESH.


4) I want SHARINGAN of Itachi Uchiha and Obito Uchiha combined which I can later upgrade to 


GOD/SUPREME BEING: All of your wishes can be granted. Then off you go, jst remember this that you won't remember anything until you are 4 years old.


After that he faded into light particles


GOD/SUPREME BEING: I think I will not get bored for sometime.


-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------A/N: That's it guys for the first chapter. This is my first time writing anything so please don't be hard on me. I do welcome your suggestions very much.


Came for accelerator but instead i got the most trashiest fanfic I've ever read, and let's not forget the idiotic mc that kept complaining about vali that he's nothing without his sacred gear.

I at first thought  that it was a cool idea about using the power of accelerator because his power of vector is seriously op but the author decides to give him a system,a sharingan,instant whatever it is called, and gate of Babylon and instant regeneration all the while he is just 6 years old.Did I also say that he is a descendant of lucifer who will have a purer bloodline then lucifer becaus of purifying pills.Like what bull**** is it to make him completely immune to holy power. And most of the interaction are with just the system and the penalty of failing a mission is something severe like losing power('apparently mc is an anti hero,so that's why there is penalty otherwise he won't do the mission' is the reason the author gave which is pure bs)He also gets space manipulation and crash magic(at the age of 6).

Content and plot wise it's alright. The MC is op as **** through the usual wishes. The biggest deal breaker is hoe autistic it's written. It's like listening to Sheldon from bbt coming up with a plot in which reality bends to conform to his wishes. 

The main character is overpowered, which is expected with wishes. What is stupid is how the MC does missiions for his syatem, then throws the people he saved to Rias Gremory with her doing absolutely nothing to deserve it. 
The MC was born as Rizevims grandson, so the Khaos brigade will know him anyway and Canon is shot to hell with him being Vali's twin. 

The grammar is mediocre, it's readable but there are plenty of mistakes.

The characters are totally undeveloped. Vali ran away without us having read even one conversation between him and the MC, his twin. We know nothing about the MC's likes or dislikes, only that he believes in absolute strength. Rizevim is also not fleshed out at all, he seems ok for a villain, then does a 180 to make his grandson listening to him, then ignores him again.

The world background is also ignored, someone who has not read Dxd fics would be unable to follow this fic, and there are no additions/changes or even descriptions to be found aside from the MC being Vali's twin. Hell even Rizevims background isnt mentioned in the first ten chapters.

Mc slave to the system.
Instantly OP af. Will basically have no challenges, ever.
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So... Where should i start? I guess from the title?.
Okay then. First of all is the title. Its simply a disaster. Sparda Gilgamesh Lucifer. You know that 3 words as a name for japanese is kind of weird, usually they dont do things like middle name or at least as far as i know. Kind of similar when you pull a stunt like naruto uchiha-uzumaki-senju-namikaze. Fucking abomination. And dont forget its a ****i g last name that u use.
Next, wish. Yada2 & boom2 and the MC is OP. I dont want to comment at this part cz it is plain stupid and too much fanboying aspect of the author.
General idea and vibe that i get from this story. Harem seeking protagonist that is no better than scum-che. Hipocrites, shamelees(in a bad vibe) and once again... Fanboy. And i kind of feeling weird why people liking an arrogant and know no bound MC. Why is the ***** and mature aspect of it of the Mc? When someone insult you, you just fucking murder him? Then the worlds will be barren of lives already. So if i need to rate then this books isn't really worth it to read if you searching for semi-serious -> serious type of fanfic. But if you search for something that can fulfill your fanboying and ego, then feel free. As for you guys hating me and picking a fight using my books. Feel free to do so, more problem spotted, more close for it to be the perfect book.

Wth he just save akeno and koneko but give them away to random stranger who don't know him, he save kuroka but he let her go straying off somewhere not taking her with him, who knows if she would be cuddling with his 'brother' vali in the so called khaos sect

Writing Quality: 2/5 The story is little readable, but it has a lot of grammatical errors and the writing is very "childish".

Stability of Updates: 5/5 The update rate is actually very good. But it has so many chapters one after the other, and for that reason the chapters are few worked and have zero development.

Story Development: 1/5 The development of the story is just too bad, it's really horrible. It is  basically  the canon history with an extra character(the mc) , which does not change the original story at all. The story progressed very fast, it has a lot of time-skip, but the story itself has zero evolution and development. He saves people like:Akeno and her mother and lets them follow the canonical course, the only one that changes and that her mother is alive now. The same can be said with Shirone and Kuroka, nor does it make sense that he saved them, since they have exactly the same fate as the canon.

Character Design: 2/5 He managed to keep a little of the personality of the original characters, but the  OCs, like the MC he created, has zero development. The MC itself is the worst character in the story itself, he basically has a body that can't resist his power and just keeps on gaining more power and skills. He's only 12 and he's just dating a goddess, who basically agreed to date him in 1 chapter! It only took 1 fucking chapter for her to fall in love with him! Zero development with these characters. Not to mention the MC's personality (he looks like a door, a one-dimensional character, his interactions and that of any character does not pass any emotion). This mc continues in the same way as the first chapter so far, he is already OP, but the author still says that his body cannot take all his power (so why give him so much skills?), And he makes no difference in the story, taking him out of history will not make any difference. A simply generic character with no depth or development at all, besides acting like a child, he was simply bribed with a snack! WTF! And he also acts like a retard, even in the logic of thought!

World Background: 1/5 The author did not even make a point of explaining or expanding the world already created in the original material, he even quotes develops wrong things already mentioned and explained in the canon.

Anyway. If you like a childlike character and act like an idiot, a story with zero development, and characters without   emotions in the interactions or a dumbass mc. A super OP mc that still looks weak. This is the type of story for you, otherwise don't even read this story! Sorry. English is not my first language

just bad. don't bother. not worth it. could have been good, but author dropped the ball. disappointing. saves someone then just throws them to Rias, all in a vain hope of keeping the OG plot the same, yet he is Vali's brother so it is ****ed, he saves Akeno and her mother which fucks it even more, then saves Koneko and Kuroneko, yet has them splitting up despite having a book full of evidence... just disappointing.

The rule of the game are simple I start my review at 5, anything that is good is +1 and as for negative -1.

Be warn their is a wishing part where sweet mc gets his wishes and to tell you the truth I am tire of everyone using this setting. -1

Character OC is as flat and monotone at the moment. -1

Conversation are flat that it feels like robots are talking to one another it just doesn’t have any flavor. -1

We know is a fanfic but at least make something original -1

Tell you the truth I don’t mind op character if it makes sense, giving him a system and then sharingan. Their is no balance what so ever to me it makes no sense. -1

Another problem is with how you make the OC, be so powerful just to downplay him with some bs. -1

At least is readable +1

Character development are none existent and since I am going to take a point, did I tell you my hatred of sentient system especially the bossy types. -1

It has a decent update schedule.+1

Okay if we do the calculation this book gets a 0 it could be a 1 with world building but, the world is no his sadly way to manny problem is a shame really and in the end is a [0]

How the **** is this fanfic ranked so high? It’s literally garbage. Trash! I tell you. Don’t even waste your time on this piece of ****. I thought it would get better but it just gets worse and worse. By chapter 20-30 I felt like clawing my brains out just from the knowledge that I had wasted all my time on this literal crap.

this will be the best DxD fanfic ever and will Make for a Cool Badass Mc that will become the greatest in DxD world so far it's too great , author is simply a genius just by coming with this idea of mc being Lucifer and Gilgamesh descendant i mean how badass and cool he will be his full name will be Sparda Gilgamesh Lucifer .


am i the only one that is excited for this i mean descendant of Lucifer the Origin of all Devils and Gilgamesh the Fist Hero , King of Heroes , The one to Unit the world under his rule in ancient time , The King of Urus this many Titles are just enough to give him a lot of Fame and everyone will look at him in awe and respect , well he can earn it himself too with his powers he is meant for greatness 

i wish mc doesn't turn into evil or Anti-Hero this is not a hero world at least so far 

i wish he continue being battle maniac but also be calm , collected , intel , veteran warrior , tactician , kind , caring for his friends , family ( Vali ) ,  and be more carefree and a little lazy this would make his personality a little funny 


also i hope if there is a harem 

some of my suggestion for future harem in the far future are 

Tsubaki (Please i like her but everyone ignore her) 
Sona ( pair Saji with Ruruko don't like jealousy things) 
Serafall (Like how childish she is and hos hot her body is even though it is childish) 
Gabriel (the only Angel and most beautiful one , innocent and pure i like her too much , but needed to somehow in far future change the heaven system as to not make her fall and become a fallen angel) 

Seekvira ( with this you can tell i have thing for glass girls and you are right they are simply being ignored always that break my pervert heart and mind

Kuroka & Yasaka (Only animal girls or if you want add Koneko since she is cute and all but the two womens prove to be insane beautifull and have sexy hot bodies and i like how they dress and mostly their breasts are the best ) 


as for lolis there are three of them in my mind 
Ophis and her clone (Lilith) 'count as one', Koneko and Ravel ( can be called Oppai loli since her boobs are developped to the level of asia or even bigger while being younger and smaller)



if you want my opinion on NTR the only ones i'd want to take are Venelana and Grayfia but if so i'd even like their background be changed to not being married at all and change their place with some oc from the same house they can even be their sisters since Venelana is a Bael and Grayfia is a Lucifuge ohhh how i like this two to be add i am really a greedy bastard 


ohohoho my inner greedy pervert scream **please author make this choices real while sobbing tears of blood , my inner pervert scream for the perfect harem**


Just, sheer stupidity. The starting abilities are retarded overpowered. Vector control, Gate of Babylon and Sharingan. And a system on top of that?

There's no world building at all. The characters are bland as hell. Grammar and spelling are supbar. Hell, we didn't even get one full conversation between the mc and his twin Vali. And on top of it all, he's a hypocrite that claims Vali is nothing without his sacred gear and glorifies in his op abilities just handed to him and his system.

It says a lot about this website that trash like this is the third most popular fanfiction on here.

Man. I’m trying my best here to find something I like about this fanfic. And it’s so damn tough.

The MC doesn’t know what he’s doing.
The Instant Mastery skill doesn’t work.
MC is constantly making stupid choices and is scared of changing the plot of DXD away from the original.
Sharingan doesn’t work that well.
Did I mention the horrible choices of wishes made at the beginning?
The way the system speaks is horrendous. I hate it.
The fact that the author is forcing characters to interact with the MC. (Akeno is friends with him after meeting with him for a few minuets. Shirone is treating him like some kind of older brother/ savior. Azazel is suddenly going from trying to take him out to buddy buddy.)
The way this is written. It’s so bad. Like it’s only “straight to the point” and only that, nothing else. Get the job done, I don’t care about anything else. (This mindset causes great devastation)
MC is supposedly one of the most powerful beings in hell and nobody knows?!
MC is supposedly super powerful but can’t last fifteen minutes on the battlefield without getting weaker?!
MC can kill and end a person’s life and then just not address it? He even vomits at the sight of the laboratory.

I’m trying my best to find things I like, but find even more things done super wrong.
Very disappointed. I’ll try reading some more and then I can update this review. But I can’t imagine it getting better than this.

I'm sad that I have to give this novels high stars so that people can see my review in the review section,
 I came to this story with the expectations to find accelerator or a guy with the same power but we get a guy with a system sharing an and the gate of babylon, 
what is the point of having that title if you are going to butcher it in the first chapter
Also the interactions between characters are bland he never spoke with his brother vali even when both are supposed to be training together 

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Your eyes will bleed, your brain matter numbed and you will wish to end your own life..Your eyes will bleed, your brain matter numbed and you will wish to end your own life...Your eyes will bleed, your brain matter numbed and you will wish to end your own life....Your eyes will bleed, your brain matter numbed and you will wish to end your own life....Your eyes will bleed, your brain matter numbed and you will wish to end your own life.

Nosy MC is sucks. System with Missions is sucks.
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DXD: Golden King of Lucifer [COMPLETED]

Table of contents

Volume 1 :BEGINNING

Chapter 1 - Prolouge