Alight

A Guy known as Alight lived in a normal city until his life changed when he gets a supernatural stone that gets absorbed in his body giving him the powers of the Lightning

Note: This story is a reboot to Naturals-The Heroes of Dimension with another story that doesn't have any relation to Naturals
There a lot of changes that were not in Naturals

Well I won't say much cause I am like you, Lazy 
So I will get to the point, This story isn't something you should continue cause Its bad, I am saying this cause I read it and I feel that this was stupid for me to write, I was also going to delete it soon but decided not I don't know why but anyway 
after dropping these stories and almost every story I wrote 
I decided to do the things you just said 
I started re-reading my own chapters, I didn't just look at cool encounters and that, I started thinking of a plot that might or might not be rushed, I don't know I can't that on my own and I did almost all the things you said in your long review, Maybe cause as I just said I can't tell that on my own 

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World building is on the lacking end, you’ve got the basics right, and you’ve established the skeleton frame of your story, just flesh it out and put more meat on it if you know what I mean.

At least the grammar is good enough to make it enjoyable.

The plot feels rushed, as if you can’t wait to write about the cool encounters or badass moments. Take it slow, taking your time to put in more sentences and bring that word count up, it will only make those anticipated moments all the more gratifying and entertaining.

I don’t know if you do this, but as an author you should read and re-read your own chapter dozens of times before you should feel satisfied. Though everyone has a different threshold of satisfaction, re-reading your work can’t hurt. You’ll spot mistakes, or maybe parts where you can change the wording for the better. Heck you might even me able to add entire paragraphs, it’s happened to me. 

Though this is only the first chapter, so I can’t very well judge properly at this stage.

That being said, this is your own work. This will be the eventual fruit of all your efforts and labours. I’m enjoying the read so far, so I’ll keep going! 

Don’t expect long reviews every chapter, or any review at all, as I’m one of the laziest people I know when it comes to reviews. Hell I’m surprised by how much I’ve been able to write on this “simple” chapter comment.

Anyways, thanks for the chapter and have a good day.

No problem haha! I’ll go check out the recommendation right after this. 

He stands up and runs out of his house 


"Oh I don't want to be late for the first day of High school"


Alight tells himself as he runs on the roads of Okinawa, Japan


As he was running he noticed something shiny on the mountain nearby


He ignored it and reaches Kadena High school, Okinawa 


The bells rings and Alight runs towards his class


"Ah, I need to go to the teacher's lounge first"


Alight thinks to himself as he reachers there, the teacher just came out of the teacher's lounge


The teacher starts walking as Alight follows him


"Let me introduce myself, I am Alight Wilson, Half Japanese Half American, My parents died recently and I had to move in with my Mom's sister or likely known to be my Aunt, Takahashi Anna, she doesn't stay home a lot as she has to go on business trips, but I had no other choice as she was my only family, I have came here to Okinawa from New York, I have transferred into the Kanada High School, Okinawa and am living a good life"


"Here we are, to your class 2-B, come in when I call you"


The teacher goes in and tells everyone about the new student 


Alight enters the room and stands in front of the class


Alight writes his name on the board and tells everyone


"I am Alight Wilson, My hobbies are cooking and dancing, nice to meet you all"


after a little while of quietness, it became awkward for Alight


"Okay then, Alight sit next to the window on the right with Luke"


Alight starts walking and goes towards his seat and sits down


The teacher begins the lesson and then after a little while came the lunch break 


Alight leaves the class for the cafeteria 


"Hey, sorry for the awkwardness before, everyone is like that in this class, by the way, I am Watanabe Luke, Nice to meet you"


"Hey, you are sitting next to me right?"


Alight and Luke ate lunch together and became good friends 


After school when Alight leaves the school he sees the shine on the mountain again


"There is an old cave there, nobody goes there as whenever someone enters the cave they are found dead the next day"


Alight replies to Luke and starts walking home


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Alight-A SuperNatural

Table of contents

Volume 1 :Naturals

Chapter 1 - Chapter 1 Alight