Aurafyre

United States

Owaaaa so interesting I love this novel so far! It seems like a light hearted rebirth into VRMMORPG game while it also has some dark elements mixed in. MC is a mad scientist but it’s awesome to see his amazing feats so far into the game.

i love the way you wrote this story.it makes me want to keep on reading on and on . keep it up,this dook is a dimond.there is a lot more i want to say but im not good at describing what i think.

well not much world background, not much depth in characters, only know he needs to gain immortality, well i think it'll improve in the future, good luck

Overall an interesting story with some intriguing ideas but very poorly executed, aside from massive time skips, there is barely any interaction between characters, 0 development, world building completely tossed out the window, in 60+ chapters not more than 10 sentences have been spoken between characters, there is no use of the system, no explanation about skills, no quests, it doesn't even feel like a game world(even if it looks like later it will merge with the real world) everything seems super rushed and for the love of god, the chapters are super short too. I enjoy the story somewhat as i find the plot interesting but thats all, an interesting plot and a huge potential wasted.

As good as it is, there is alot of time skips and no details. Just listing out mc deeds majority of the time. Needs detail of other people and more dialogue because it feels more of an outline of a story. Sad because I felt there might've been something but with no character there is no story.

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