Merry God Damn Christmas!!!!!!
Coming in at a whopping 43k words, this is officially the longest chapter I have ever written. It took me a long time, as you guys know it's been about what like 4 months since the last chapter came out. Now for posterity I did not write like anything for 2 months straight on this novel or any of my others, as I was dealing with uni exams and stress and all that, so really about 2 months to really write this whole thing. (No seriously it has been that long)
Honestly I don't think I would have gotten this out so fast if I hadn't set a Christmas release date on the chapter. Seriously I have written about 20k words in the last week to get this done, about 7k just today (24th) and spent like 8 hours doing it. Now I proof read as I go and also think that everything is up to scratch, but I might have missed a few things and would love any and all comments about errors that a person sees.
That is the end of this HUGE chapter!
So first and foremost about Mace's White lightsaber. Yes I know that in current cannon a white lightsaber crystal means a red blade is purged of it's dark side or something like that, but what I'm going with is that the crystal is a Krayt dragon pearl, that produces the color white.
Knowing this I added the blood red line running down the middle, to denote the fact that his dark side has infected the crystal or better yet crystallized in the center of the pearl to produce it's unique color.
*Note* So I will put this here and leave it while also having a before chapter note put in. I will not take credit for the great idea which is having a recording to use in the senate. I read this general plot in 'A Sith's second chance.' If you have never read it before, it is a great novel that I suggest you read.
Now while I have taken and copied the main concept and a few of the longer paragraphs, there are a few differences between this and the original content. There is however well more than enough that I have to mention it. I loved the idea and honestly couldn't, not use it when I did this chapter.
For those wondering if Ayillh had enough time to get the recording before saving Padme in chapter 1, basically I did say that she scouted the area for entrances to the palace, aka when this happened, and is a retroactive continuity change or addition. Wanted to put this in so that people know.
A person (The name eludes me right now) mentioned that sound effects are not necessary in the story, I would like to say, I tried this chapter to get rid of most of them and would love feedback on what you guys think. I did keep filtering between them and not having them, so that you can compare. Personally I think the sound affects helped out, but if people really don't like them I can strive to get rid of them.
Now moving on I saw an interesting comment last chapter and couldn't reply to it directly so I'm just putting it here. It is about the technology difference between the old republic and the 'Movie Era', And my stance on it during the novels duration.
1nt3rD1ct0r: About the technology difference between the Old republic and the Movie era. I completely understand where you coming from, I know that technology has changed after 4000 years, it was easy to tell when I was looking into the Queens royal starship. I saw that their hyper drives and other technologies have advanced, that was specifically why last chapter I put in Ayillh commenting on this subject.
Of course she was commenting on the fact that she could upgrade the phantoms engines after only a quick overview of the new ship she found herself on. Because I am not a super fan of star wars and only have superficial knowledge about tech in universe, I kept it simple by skirting around the subject.
So far the tech I have commented on has been the hyper drive of the Queens ship, the blasters used by the droids, as well as the holonet security. As mentioned in your comment the fact that the republic hasn't been to war in a millennia has led to the security of their holonet to be a simple thing in the eyes of Mace and Co. (easily hackable)
As I was saying before; when I had Ayillh mention the tech on the Queens ship, I only mentioned the speed and size of the engine/capacity/output because I am truly a novice in the area. Also why I mentioned that the ship had underdeveloped/non-existent shielding and weapons (because it is a luxury cruiser). I did this because as you have said, in the 'Movie era', cannons and heavy weaponry has advanced, but I am just too illiterate on the subject to know the differences and go in-depth mentioning them.
Finally I also mentioned how the blasters the droids were using didn't seem to have changed. I have no clue if there are major differences between the old republic and 'Movie era' when it comes to this subject. From just looking, there doesn't seem to be much of a difference, though there probably is a huge on.
Also as mentioned in the comment the gear used by the Jedi has regressed because of the long lasting peace, which is also an easy thing to skirt around when writing. In later chapters I am going to put in a few words about their tech being upgraded using the 'movie era' technology, but I will be very vague about the subject.
About the personal shields, honestly forgot about them until you mentioned them, like completely forgot. And what you said makes sense, that they are still around but not used as much. And with that I have nothing else to say on that subject.
Having said that, you probably brought the comment up as the characters have repeatedly mentioned that Technology doesn't seem to have changed and instead regressed. To Mace and Co. right now, yes that is the case, but as said I will be making sure that they learn that this isn't the case (But will be vague about it), and Technology has advanced in certain areas.
Thanks for the Review, always love the insight, it helps me refine the novel.
Having hopefully read my answer to the above comment, I would like to ask for some help! I'm not the biggest legends aficionado for star wars and honestly will have to do a lot of research to find places that mace and co. can go to upgrade their gear , build ships and all that.
While I thought of using the Chiss, I have other plans for them (Foreshadowing). So I would love comments on planets to look into or places that he can go to deal with such problems.
I'm just going to put in now, when I name dropped Master Luminara as being a Jedi knight, I have no clue what she was up to at the time of Episode 1. Though as she is on the high council by the time of the clone wars, I must assume that she was already a Jedi Knight, possible even a master. Would love to know if we have any Luminara fans reading. Update: She was a Jedi master a few years before the invasion. Already fixed.
For all those wondering where this novel is going to head I think I'll just drop a name of planets mace and the rest will be visiting in the future, well most of them, not including where they are about to go. Would love your best guess at where Mace is about to set up base!
So the planets are: Kashyyyk, Kalee, Dathomir, Sarkhai, Ryloth, Zakuul, Rattatak and Coruscant.
Going off that some of you might realize that before I get into the events of Episode 2 Mace will be going on a few personal and professional quests with his companions. Well I let you think about what all those planets might mean.
Now for the final piece of news, this will be about the next chapter going forwards. I will be trying to stick to a 10-15k max words for each chapter so they don't take as long to release, but I will be focusing on my other novels for a while after releasing this mega damn huge chapter.
I also just got a second job that will be night shifts that will affect my timetable and all that. So I have no clue when it will come out.
Honestly if I have missed mentioning something you think is important, please mention it in the comments. This chapter has taken so long to write that I have forgotten somethings I might have had to answer down here at the bottom.
Edit: If anyone is wondering how much Mace and Vaylin saw in their vision of the future, it mainly focused on the events of episode 3 and not everything from episode 1-3 meaning they still don't know a lot of what's going on behind the scenes and how everything happens. They just know the main players in the future. I think that should be enough of an explanation
Thanks for reading See you in the next one!
Merry Christmas and a Happy New year!!!!!