VL_Knight

United States

Not bad at last she got a response from him

Well, that first line definitely caught my attention, loll.

I could not tell if she was in her situation voluntarily, or involuntarily, and it seems tense and stressful. It seems like we are joining the story either in the middle or at the end, which is a common tactic, but one that I don't like. The dismissal of everyone seems likely to create more grudges and stressful situations. It's a very dramatic beginning, and I generally avoid both horror and drama in stories. Not that there's anything wrong with it, I just get enough pain in real life and prefer my fiction light and with happy endings. This beginning does not lead me to expect much humor or upbeat adventure.

Hi Reader.  Thank you for taking the time to read the first chapter.  I appreciate your view and feedback.  If you don't mind me asking what was it that you did not like about my novel so far?  I'd like to know for future references so I can improve my story building and writing.  Again I appreciate your honest opinion.  Thanks!

<p>What kind of woman did she become?</p>

Well, I saw a two people kissing on the cover and here I am😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄

Gotta read this and find out more 😂😂😂😂😂


Here is 5* for that attractive cover😘😘

OMG this book kept me up all night!!! I honestly couldn't put it down I read up to chapter 53 in one sitting. This novel is the GOAT!!! I need more updates plz


Omg!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!....Once I start with this book. I didn't stop and I stay all night long reading with excitement how the story goes....love it love it...thank you Arthur love your work......😍

This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 22.

It's been a while since I read something starting in medias res and then jumping back to when it all began. It's a traditional enough way to start, but not all that common in webnovels.

This is a fantasy romance, or rather the beginning of one. At chapter 22 we've been through some backdrop, got the important characters introduced, plus a few more, experienced a wedding gone horribly wrong and seen the aftermath. That aftermath looks like the beginning of the romance.

Our female lead grew up in a brutal world of men. That's the main reason for the bad wedding. The story lingers at that part for maybe a little too long, since I believe the second arc that started is her literal journey from childhood to *****hood.

No, she's not a kid when the story proper starts, but she's ***** enough to be one.

While briefly introduced early on the potential love interest takes the stage at the end of the initial arc and acts as her guardian as far as the second arc goes.

Two main characters plus a few supporting cast. While there are a lot of side characters it's very unclear who will show up again. The thing with journeys is that characters introduced early on might very well also be discarded early on.

Now for the stars.

Writing: Four stars. The story wavers between past and present tense, and there are quite a few peculiar constructions as well. Still, it's perfectly readable.

Updates: Four stars. They are frequent enough for me to only yank one star, but they aren't stable.

Story: Five stars. Apart from the prologue it's told straight. I wonder a little about the need for the first half of the first chapter since we don't see all characters introduced there again. There's magic, violence and lust. There might be love as well.

Character: Five stars. The main characters are well portrayed. The antagonist maybe a little less so. He's simply just too evil with absolutely no redeeming traits at all. In the long run he risks becoming boring unless the author offs him before that. Side characters are also portrayed well.

World: Five stars. It's there and it's experienced by the characters. What's mysterious remains mysterious until we need to know more. I prefer getting the setting served this way rather than in huge chunks of info dumping.

Lastly, this isn't anything for the soft hearted. There's very little cuteness in this story. Does that mean it's bad? No, but just don't expect too much in the departement of fluffy feelings in your stomach.

This is so interesting I am still waiting for the second part I can’t wait to read it . Everyday I stop by to see if there is something new please can you release the second part soon 

This book kept me up all night! (I'm a slow reader) though I was quite confused at the first few chapters,  I must say that this is a well-thought-out book. 

It's intriguing, there is also a sort of suspense, and sometimes, I find the simple gestured quite cute.

The writing flow is smooth. I like how the author narrates her book regardless who's perspective it was. The story progress is surprisingly building up well along with the world building and characters development.


10/10 for me. I am hoping for more chapters :) 

This is beautiful.Apart from the starting which i found a little weird,the other parts were good.And also it's as if i'm in this book's world able to see and feel what's going on.I have learnt a lot from this and i sincerely thank you author.give us moreeeee.
This book must not be trifled with.Should be carried shoulder high.

The first few words that appeared before my eyes were tits and ass. So as a gentle man, I was hooked and continued reading. The story is good and it’s written pretty well. Maintain the quality and you’ll do great.

interesting story💓💓...il wait for more........................................  .................................... .......................        

Loved the story while reading it. Synopsis is also too direct and pointing, helps the readers to get an idea of what to expect from the story. Character and plot development is amazing. Would like to recommend it if anybody is looking for a fresh read.

Overall the story is amazing 👍

Indeed your work is good, the grammar is wow, character is good too and it fascinate me to read more. Just added the novel to my library😊 hopefully you can check mine. Thanks😘

Well...the story is indeed very good and I have to admit that I found really enjoyable reading through all the chapters in one go. It was good enough to make read non stop, usually I get tired after reading a few chapters back to back. Only a few Original Stories made few this way, the The Mech Touch is my favorite.

My biggest problem with the novel in fact is something that someone had already pointed out, the switching POVs, from third to first, and so on. I'm a writer too and I also switch POVs, but I don't do it when I'm writing the main chapters of my book, this switches only happen in special chapters. The point that o want to make is that switching POVs I think it really breaks the immersion of the reader because of how sudden it happen and abrupt, and just as fast it came, it go away.

But in general I had fun reading. My favorite thing about the novel, until now, is the MC. Even though it had been just a few chapters I grew a liking to it. I just hope that the author stay focused and make the MC, and the other characters, grow as the story progress, not just in power, but in mentality as well.

Entertaining indeed. The MC felt like a real person and not like a made up fictional character. The author has a specially good ability to describe pervert scenes which made them easy to visualize, I like that a lot XD. In conclusion, a good read that you should give a try.

First and foremost, i love how your synopsis is ****** and straight to the point. Good job! 

I read the first chapter and thought it seems to be written in the first person where we would see only "I". I was wrong. This novel is different and unique. I think this is the first time I've read a novel on Web-novel written in the present tense. Kudos to you author. It did take me a while to really get what was happening because of your writing style. I like the story line. The writing style deserves 5 stars.  Happy Reading

It's sooooo cute! Loving Yueh and the mysterious man who is helping her out. The writing quality is very good, smooth flow. Keep updating it please!

I love it. This is a hidden gem. The plot is intriguing, the characters were written in a way that you will really love them or hate them. All in all it's a very good novel. I hate Liang and I hope you will let him die a terrible death!

Good progression and well written characters. Plot is interesting although I'd like to suggest sticking to one kind of POV instead of switching from first to thirds. :)

Wow, I really love the pace of the story's progression, it keeps me on the edge of my seat and makes me want to know what happens next. Love the character designs and how well you describe Yuliah's thought processes. It helps me sympathize with her, even though I might not think the same way as her. Keep up the good work!

Wow, I did not feel bored while reading, devoured until chapter 14, interesting story! Writing quality is good. Story developments is excellent, clear and well established. Character design, I pity Yuliah, glad she killed his pig husband, Ryas is a mystery, I like to know him more. Will they become a couple? hope so. Amazing novel, engrossing and it's something worth reading. Added on my library.

This is absolutely stunning. I love the writing style and how the story is spread in front of the reader. Weirdly enough, it made me feel like I'm watching a TV show, obviously in a good way. I feel the reason for that is because of the way the characters' background comes to light by conversation, and the story is shown from many eyes.

I especially love the character design and the world setting.

Keep on writing and never stop!

The Ethrel Series - Book One: The Cursed Soul

Table of contents

Volume 1 :The Beginning

Chapter 1 - Chapter 1. Prologue: What Kind of Woman Did I Become?